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Spektikul vs Verbal Abuse
Punchline Battle Rules...
-30 Line Minimum -Must have 100+ posts to vote -2 days to check, 3 days to drop -No crew, hate, bullshit, d/r, biting, recycling... -Topic will be............"A Deeper Hell" Best of luck Verbal... Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 09-05-04 at 02:16 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Uppin for Verbal to accept...If you have already seen this open thread...plz type in here so that I know you know...
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Verbal Abuse has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-03-04 01:18 PM.
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[FONT=tahoma]^^^i accepted, so you know i know. maditory check checked.[/DONT]
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"A Deeper Hell" sanctuaries wont trash hell's ticket, but mudder hope. hell bound is well found as neglect, exempt from those but a dope. beloved folk yield the other's cope, living under pressure. relevance; a studded joke, while we distill a despirate measure. mind n soul indevered, circulating sin and self repentance. reminace n call love its antidote, and matain in fear of sentence. let loose the inner menace, and foreclose your worthless theories. on a level of integrity, god willing you reach your happy series. the devil's fury expands, feeding off human nature. classify murder as reflexsive, and youll trash n ruin labor. built this nation apon a century, with struggles for independence. you kill a law, when death comes to more kin in minutes. you sit within the limits, you wont finish unless you fake attempts. trapped n hopeless with shit results, like thick chicks making dents. some earn a greater vision to administer a sacred mission... ...yet make no percision. i for one want heaven's admission. a Lord to glorify petition... ...and a halo incision. a savior is risen, its truth. like self propelling a coward. you cant do it on your own, and you still recite rebellion a power. my desire rests in heaven, no need for tranquil discipline. defiance comes so natural, its like we're pissin sin. the praise must be missin him, aim a little farther. saying you cant be heard, well proclaim a little harder. your lives are lived a martyr. these days, ppl pop pills like suicide is health. if it was that popular back then, jesus would have crucified himself. dont you get it? he sacrificed his son in hopes of wisdom for the patient. to live in holy places, thats why he was risen from his placement. its candid, you cant erase it. his enternal fire is still hot in me. cant compare the evidence? like god was a philosophy. hes not a transparent being. but a breathing source of love. you might not hear the calling yet, youll know when the feel is forced to shove. perhaps jesus had a face lift, a facial truth. until his features fell. either way its your decision. a faithful heaven, or a deeper hell? |
Spektikul has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-04 11:34 PM.
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A Deeper Hell Last thing I remember, the sound of gunshot's in the air Six shots to the chest later, I rest, intensive care I swear I might not live, and that I realize As I try to sleep, my whole life flashes before my eyes I disguise myself from the fear, that frightens me at night In an instant, consistantly running toward a light Despite It's bright beauty, I could start to see a shade Just then I started falling, as the light began to fade I made it to the ground, found myself there all alone Dark and cold, a million miles away from home Unknown to where I was, as I got my thoughts together Next thing I know, a violent change occured within the weather I never knew it hurt, but the acid from the rain Started burning in my skin, and flowing through my veins The pain was too intense, so I ran where I could hide From the rain that was spurning, while im buring from inside I tried to take shelter, as my body started shaking When the sky filled with fire, and the earth started quaking I'm aching constantly, but then I fell from an attack In a pool of my blood, claw marks deep inside my back The fact I cannot move, only leaves me left to stare As I burn and bleed, evil screams howl through the air A pair of fire balls strike, like the spirits playing games In seconds, my entire body was engulfed with burning flames Its strange how I can't scream, cause my mouth has been sewn shut The rest of my body remains broken, burnt and badly cut But then something happened, that was worse than all the rest My ribs started breaking, and then open went my chest Messed up organs seeping out, my whole body fell apart When finally I lay next, to my slowly beating heart It starts to beat slower, as I wish that I was dead Praying for God's help, as my eyes roll in my head I led myself to think, that I could never fall The scariest thing about this place, is no one's here at all I crawl but it's just black, theres nothing left to see My heart's last beats are beating, as a man stands over me He said I slipped into a coma, life for me will soon be hard When I was gone, ninety-three percent of my body became charred The rest scarred and bruised, you must have really took a dive Its like you've died and gone to hell, son, your lucky to be alive Arrived back in my room, after several operations There's a chance I may still live, give my full co-operation This situation's tough, down my cheek I feel a tear It's not there from all the pain, I'm still crying from the fear. |
Nice Verse Verbal, props...Lets get some honest votes going ya'll, you'd better actually read both of them too, we took the time to write, you'd better take time to read...no bullshit...upping.
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Voted For: Spektikul
ok verbal wins in vocab but thats it good story and nice structure good metas but you aint give me a good visualization and that what needs to be done to win topicals. spec you shit needs better vocab but the story was fucking dope shit gave me the chills ending was official whole shit was fire good structure and words fell like a movie sun i never knew you was this fucking dope sun that shit was fire a 9/10 only vocab stopped it from being a 10/10 |
This was feedback posted for Verbal Abuse
good stuff...... i can get into this..... pm me if any of you guys wanna take me on.... peace
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^^^dont come in here freeposting sindrome, you actually gotta leave feed on our battle. If you wanna make a callout, go do it in bitchslapped...Thanks for your honest feed/vote Empire, Upping for more honest votes, dont sleep ya'll this shits hot...
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Voted For: Verbal Abuse
Verbal Abuse got this with better wordplay, and better use of vocab, his verse was more enjoyable than Spektikul's, whose verse was aight, but verbal's verse is deeper, both of yall did a great job, but my vote goes to Verbal Abuse Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Thanks for your voting so far everone, uppin for some more...
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Voted For: Verbal Abuse
blah both were iiight nice topic though VA: your shit was nice good verse nice overall you stayed well on the topic and it was really good and deep but some was kind of wierd took me 4 times to read so i can understand ya verse SPEKTIKUL: nice try man nice verse overall but it really wasnt that good as verbal abuse you stayed on the topic well but at someplace you kind of drifited off but god sturcutre and flow to both of you Vote: VA |
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Uppin for more honest vote ya'll, don't sleep...
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Upping once again for votes, lets get some started up again...
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Uppin...
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Voted For: Spektikul
Damn...this battle was crazy hot. Both was right on topic and had some hot shit to say. But i'll give you this vote cause I like the way your structure way. I really wasn't feelin the way V.A's structure was because of the font. It seemed small on my comp. But both yaw ideas was crazy hot. Drop another battle and i'll peep it anytime. Return da favor! http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=147476 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Uppin for honest votes/feed ya'll, dont sleep.....
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Uppin...
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Uppin this topical for more honest votes ya'll, keep'em commin...
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This was feedback posted for Spektikul
Check'n you two out, just scouting for talent for ya both know what.
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Uppin for more honest votes to keep comming in....
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uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppppppin why is this still open this is a good battle fuck vote mathafuckas :cussing:
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Upping for more votes ya'll, lets keep'em commin..
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Voted For: Spektikul
k this was the best ive heard from spektikul the best and for a first topical not bad hes pretty dope rapper and mean it lots of potential and i mean it but ya lets get this started: verbal abuses: k you had a tight verse you had the vocab topped but yer story the way you wrote it was on as good as spektikuls but you still tight n all you had some nice stucture as well nicly flowed hard to vote for this battle tho this is wha ti rate you gurl 7.9/10 spektikul: hey man you were tight as fuck you had one line with some vocab but thats it but yer stroyline was nice but still needs work also dos verbal abuse she needs it more tho and spektikul try and elavate on vocab and wordplay you had a lil wordplay but this is wha ti rate you 8.2/10 hust another honest vote that goes to: Spektikul return the favour me verse Net the links in my sig |
Voted For: Verbal Abuse
WORD.. this was a dope battle.. botha ya came hella good.. but: Spektikul: yours was ill.. had madd imagery and nice content.. good flow.. nice plot.. good vocab.. it was an all round good drop.. well done.. VA: your vocab was amazing.. very poeticly written verse.. I reckon a lot of the voters wont get half ya lines or even know what half ya shit means.. cos most of this site's like 13yrs old.. but it was dope.. flow was on, as always with ya multis.. but ya content was so deep.. Illness.. VA gets my vote, but dont get me wrong.. both verses were dope, but someone has to win, na'mean? Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Uppin for ya'll to keep voting, lets end this thing with honest votes already...
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honest vote from opinion both of your was excellent i mean it
very deep the hole time i was reading it i had a picture in my head of what y'all was saying it was a very hard decsion but i have to vote honestly i understand skep more then verbal cuz of the style u wrote ur verse in it was little and hard to read i didnt like it and skep verse made me feel it was real like he was telling a true story . return a favor |
Yo...Still waitin for some honest votes that aint gunna get DQ'ed like those other two did, ...lets do this ppl...
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This was feedback posted for Spektikul
checkin the polls on this shit..........
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Voted For: Verbal Abuse
Spektiful u had a nice vision and ok wordplay i mean it could have been better u could have elevated a lil in this drop, i kinda felt where u were comin from but u need 2 work on your word selection a lil bit ya structure was ok it looks better if u kept all the lines together Va i felt ya whole drop i felt where u were comin from this wasent really close at all u had all the check points on point had wordplay and i could see the vision that u were tryin 2 get across overall u had the better drop 4 better set ups and a more clear verse 2 understand Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for Spektikul
checkkkkkkinnggggggggggggggggg i already voted for spektikul on my alais
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This was feedback posted for Verbal Abuse
your lives are lived a martyr. these days, ppl pop pills like suicide is health.
if it was that popular back then, jesus would have crucified himself. dont you get it? he sacrificed his son in hopes of wisdom for the patient. to live in holy places, thats why he was risen from his placement.-nice words here and verbal kept comen up with good points and he was more creative with the topic,both did very good,i was very impressed and i liked them both a lot,but im voten for verbal becuz spektikul could have been more complex,he had a story line but the story line wasnt as good as verbals,both kept me interested tho,keep it up ya'll yo verbal return the favor in my match.its the one against dabados ill come back and vote on this when i get 100 post...sorry i cant vote yet but soon i will be able to.ill come back to this soon-1- |
Voted For: Spektikul
I think that Spektikul got this battle because i feel that Spektikul came stronger in the following categories...Topic i felt Spektikul got it was effective and was on point V.A u shoulda been a bit more creative on this occasion rhyming i felt went to Spektikul good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to Spektikul and flow and structure i'll give to Spektikul. V/Spektikul There's my sig be sure to return the favour honestly (vs JPoll) Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
This was feedback posted for Spektikul
yo you atrue poet this is very hot you need to get ya voice heard
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Voted For: Spektikul
i like ur flow how skip a line it was easier 2 read and u had nice wordplay honest votes back please Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Uppin to end this shat............................
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Uppin.............................................
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