KaNg kOrRuPt vs Lyriclesolja
 

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Check in by: 09-04-04 at 09:37 PM

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Lyriclesolja has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-04 09:08 PM.

KaNg kOrRuPt has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-04-04 09:17 PM.

This is a topical battle the topic is ***Depression***


My God im so sorry what did i do to deserve this pain,
all i feel inside is sorrow like theres no 2marrow is it all in my brain,
how do i refrain from goin insane in this day in age,
when i look in the mirror all i see is rage,
and in my head all i feel is rain,
God please help me with this depression,
and agression please teach me a lesson,
this situation im hatin,
cause i feel im god forsaken,
please take me away i think i need to go,
i dont know how long i can last my confidence is low,
i want to get a gun and pull the trigger and let loose,
spray my brains all over these walls wit a twenty two,
im sorry if ive ever done any thing wrong truly i am,
if i could go back i would change it and not be a man,
why did you give me this crap life lord take me away,
cause truly i dont think i can last another day.

Depression is a lesson that you just can’t learn
You yearn for peace and quiet times but your soul just burns
Askin whens it my turn you find it hard to discern
Between real life and fantasy Askin God what’s your plans for me
Why can’t I be happy like everybody else I see
You try to hide your face so peeps don’t see your pain
Things have changed you cry on your trips down memory lane
You can’t look into the mirror and not complain
Things ain’t the same it feels like your carrying a boulder
You can’t believe the years have flown so fast and now you’re older
Your shoulders start getting weak your legs start given out
You want to yell but you’re too tired to give a shout
You out of luck out of life this is where the road bends
Don’t let it get to you only you decide your end

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uppin ya'll need to vote up mayn

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Uppin for votes.......if you vote honestly i will return the favor.......

uppin 4 votes somebody please vote!!!!!

Uppin for votes.......if you vote honestly i will return the favor.......

Uppin for votes.......if you vote honestly i will return the favor.......

ay man i been voting on other people's battles and askin them to return the favor and they ain't votin i don't know man i guess nobody wants to vote

uppin ya''l vote up

Yeah this blows..........Uppin..

uppin 4 votes

Voted For: KaNg kOrRuPt

KaNg-punches were a slight harder, tha flow was ok and tha structure was in place & not stretch'd~out..

Solja-yo shit was ok..punches could've been a little~harder..and tha flow was ok would've gottin' my vote if tha punches were a little harder tho..

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ay thanks for voting on our battle sik. uppin for votes!

uppin 4 votes vote up ya'll

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uppin!!!!! vote up anybody!!!!!

Vote up!!! vote up!! vote up! uppin 4 votes mayn!!!!

Voted For: KaNg kOrRuPt

both on topic but i liked this 1 more it seemed to expres the topic n had more content both did ok but i hadto choose 1...
both could use more imagery,n be strutured better...but keep it up...props ta both for tryin out a topical....