For$aken vs Empire
 

P.S.A. Tourney
Empire (seed #8-PSA)
vs.
For$aken (seed #9-AI)

Battle Rules:

10 - 15
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 09-07-04 at 11:10 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

For$akeN has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-05-04 12:24 AM.

Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-05-04 12:34 AM.

Need 'elevation' you been 'FORSAKEN' when talent was manifested
Verbal weopons 'pressing' my 'suggestion' that you run for the exit
No 'limping' but you can tell im 'pimping' watch what i do to this whore
'Manhandle ya' 'damage ya' you from 'canada'?...aint no rappers in 204(1)
What it 'meant to me' you know my 'alter identitys' you damn groupie
Cant 'stand' you not a 'man' got to sneak into R-rated movies(2)
Not in lyrical 'fitness' you couldnt be 'lifted' if you wrote on blunt papers
Ya'll get a 'loss' you the 'force'? watch as i son you like DARTH VADER(3)
Dumb hater need 'links' cant 'think' of a decent punchline
Lay the pimpslap on 'hos' its bout to be '5-0' like one time(4)







EXPLANATIONS-
1)204 is his area code aint no rappers from no 204
2)hes only fourteen he aint no man he cant even get into r-rated movies yet
3)in STAR WARS luke skywalker is the FORCE and but in last episode he finds out DARTH VADER is his father
4)5-0 represents the votes and one time is police but so aint 5-0 a little wordplay

Voted For: For$akeN

Nice Spit:thumbup:

Empire u dumbass u say no rappers in 204... lol im from 204.... lopts of people here are from 204...

oops... supposed to be feedback... ill PM strobe

Removed

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

Just check'n things out.. .

This was feedback posted for For$akeN
 

gud battle ppl stay up.....o i think forsaken edged this.....anyways nice battle

Voted For: Empire

Uh, Okay....

LMAO @ THE PICTURE An The Personal Side Of FORSAKENS Verse...
But.......................

EMPIRE Had Better Wordplays, Metas, Punches An Structure...

Forsaken Ya Personal Side Of The Rhyme Was Nice But Ya Need'a Step Ya Game Up, Elevate Ya Vocab n Punches...

EMPIRE Got My Vote

Voted For: For$akeN

heres the break down

opener:forsaken
punches:forsaken
flow:both
structure:empire
wordplay:none
meta's:empire
personals:forsaken(killed him in that)
humor:forsaken
closer:forsaken
overall:Forsaken


no hate just fact........

Voted For: For$akeN

forsaken- lol funny verse the opener is funny but i think thats a fuse box the blind line was nice to but i still think u should get more wordplay in your verses bunch of personals in this battle though funny 1s to others where kinda weak like the phone i didnt like to much overall though a pretty nice verse just dissin his pic

empire- vocab started off good then u kinda went away from it personals where average u had a lot of internal rhymes though that kept a tight flow but i think ya punchs lacked here your wordplay was ight didnt have much of it again u should add that to your verse more u had less lines to spit an i still dont think u had that good of averse and u even fed off his when u put that link line in there your closer could have been nice but worded wrong overall work on wordplay and wording your punchs to hit harder everything else is ight

vote forsaken for an overall better verse

no hate an return an HONEST FUCKIN VOTE

you are so dumb i cant feed i cant see forsakens verse stupid in the new system i knew the lame would do that anyways uppppppppppppppppin 2 hater votes for forsaken 2 of my enemys :cussing:

This was feedback posted for For$akeN
 

Blah...
just feedback
Empire had too much explination but yah i gotta say you have been improving by a lil( want a rematch??)
Forsaken gets this battle in my eyes seeing he had a better and stronger verse with better punches and personals

NVM take this feedback away and allow me to vote

Voted For: For$akeN

[font=arial narrow]Empire
I liked your punches they were hard & connected there..
Yo flow was pretty decent & it didn't fall or nuttin..
Tha structure was in place...it didn't stretch out..
All together you had a pretty nice flow there..
7.5/10

For$akeN
I liked your punches too...they were hard & they landed..
Flow was aight..didnt fell or nuttin..
Structure was nice..
But all 2gether ur verse was nice & had a slight harder punches than Empire...
8/10

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

my tourney... I want to see feedback... lol... close battle tho.

looks like a picture frame to me at least:S blah uppppppping

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

ok this honest lil feedback
cuz i can vote cuz i have "reasons"

For$aken:

you had some nice punches in there
but you mostly got on his weight and didnt mix it up
but your structure wsa good and flow also

Empire:

very nice vocab here
you had some nice punches
and your verse was very complex i say
and you didnt need a pic to win this

but both were good

ps:this my 1st time on elite FL lol

~1~

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

This was an aight battle..

For$aken attempted a lot of personals.. but some of them seemed quite corny.. the like the remote line.. i liked the extra chin line though.. i was laughin at that.. some of his punched connected..

Empire did ok as well.. explainin some of those punches took away from them, i.e. the star wars one.. the explanation wasnt needed.. the personal was pretty good about the R-Rated.. some of ur punches connected as well..

So yea..

That is all.

Yes.. This was meant to be feedback..

shit I want to vote on this battle but I can't cause the boxes not appearin so I can drop feed. WTF?

Voted For: Empire

honestly...i don't think this was close at all...forsaken..i've seen your work and i think your a lot better this....as a matter of fact..i thought this was weak..no offense..no hate...maybe i just didn't understand the punches....which i have no problem with...but i just wasn't feelin it..

no hate though...i got a ton of respect for you....thats just how i saw it..

you empire...your verse was alright..it had some good punches...wasn't jam packed but it was decent....you got my vote

Voted For: For$akeN

I'm going with this verse the poor to guess line had me in a laughing fit...that was nice lookin there...

Empire it was an aight verse u posted but not much really stood out for me to be honest...flow and structure was on point...ur punches lacked in places but picked up in others like the personals too...ur wordplay and imagery i'll give ya good ones for that jus a shame they didn't hit hard enough.

For$aken dope...flow structure decent really readable 1 link didn't work but the poor to guess line was decent lookin...punches connected...persoanals...go to you because you based ur rhyme souly on that picture...again good lookin...rhymes were decent the verse was layed out really well to me...

Empire you have put out sum good spits but i think this time u were beaten...sorry man...

RTF on ma sig

uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppppppppppp

This was feedback posted for Empire
 

oh yea, i read this before, i ain't gonna vote on it tho, but i had thought that Empire took it, he won in every category accept personals..

damn, maybe i should of voted, i thought that Empire had tgis in the bag..

I feel that it was unfair that i didn't vote, so heres an explaination of why i think that Empire barley took it, but no hate For$aken, you ripped him up personally, i just think that you over did it, one hard personal would of impressed me..

Personals - obviously For$aken, he ripped you up with that picture, i used that against you too empire, he put a lot on it tho, and made a couple of observations that were clever when he flipped it. like the cell phone thing.. coz u denie it, but i do still think you're caliph, but it's all good..

Punches - Empire had better punches man, he put a little more into them and they were more complex, harder to think up, it was more clever coz he had no real personals, but the punches landed..

Wordplay - empire had a slightly better rhyme scheme, his lyrical content was better, and syllable count was nice..

flow - i have to give this to no one. both of your flows were nice and i can't justifu giving it to one over the other..

overall - this is why i think he won, the wordplay and punches basically had it for me, For$aken if you would of used multies, you would of got my vote, coz it was basically up to one category, you had personals, he had punches, now the wordplay, and he got that..

So this is my vote, strobe if you can't count it go ahead, coz i should of voted in the first place, but i figured that Empire had it, but For$aken came hard too, so i guess that's how it crumbles.. no hate For$aken, u can still easily take it, this is just my honesty..

Voted For: Empire

Opener - Empire, good use of opponents name...
Closer - Neither, thought both were weak...
Punches - Empire, Forsakens were not as strong...
Personals - Forsaken, whole verse seemed to be personals...
Multies - Empire, had mad multies...
Metas - Tie, both had good metaphors...
Structure - Tie, both were neat and organized, look good...
Vocab - Empire, not for nessecarily havin bigger words, just more tech and descriptive...

Forsaken: I guess it was kinda creative to try battling against the picture of your opponent. Ill give you that much but I thought you coulda done a better job man. Work on multies and better punches instead of so many personals.

Empire: All around pretty good verse, just work on throwin some more crafty/witty punchlines and wordplay in that and youll have these battles no prob.

Close battle, props to both, no hate...this vote goes to Empire...

Voted For: Empire

aight

for$aken:
nothin wrong with flow or anything... But some of your punches were kinda weak. And that whole pic thing was a bit much... It was like you were struggling to find things to diss him on, and in the end found a couple things that seemed a lil far fetched. And what was ya closer?? was wierd...

Empire:
Wordplay was nice.. Nothin wrong with flow. Punches were mostly hittin.

Both of you had a good structure... But ive seen you come way harder in other battles... ah well..

Emp just edged it out on this one..