Who's Child Is This?
(This was written from the eyes of a soldier... I've seen some things... things that some people choose not to see... this is what I call fictional truth... It didn't necessarily happen... or did it?)
young child.... cold and alone in a world where no one seems to care no clothes... no shoes on your feet... until the world gave you dis---pair dinner's thin pickings...scrounging for scraps fails to ease the intestinal thunder it's no wonder that nothing I can ever give will replace your hunger... your hunger for hope outweighs your hunger for edible nourishment so along with that sandwich I offer a side-order of encouragement still you hunger... hunger for life... hunger for love never known living with the harsh realities of suffering caused by leaders with egos overblown overgrown children playing God...who are they to decide who's a have or a have not especially when the "have"s have lots and the have nots have... knots....? knots in their stomachs...not just from lack of food... but from lack of respect a lack of a will to fight back to keep the better half of "have-not" in check but you, young child, are a warrior... destined to defeat those who oppose you your hunger keeps you alive... searching... for the satisfaction that this world owes you Hold true to who you are ...and make no mistake about what makes your country the greatest place the world will ever hate... From Bhagdad via Kuwait?... yeah, shyt's rough out there... but I wasn't talking about Iraq... I was referring to the States! (I honestly believe that the future relies on the children... the world is really fucked up right now on all fronts. 9/11 is a constant reminder of what men are capable of in this day and age. I pray everyday that this "war" will end and that my children may be able to live in a world filled with love instead of hate. Do your part now. That child in the poem above could be yours... it could've been you a few years back... it could be your child in the future. That child will one day make a difference in this world. It's up to us to nurture that child and take all those negative experiences and channel them into something positive. Like the old saying goes, "It takes a village to raise a child.") IN MEMORY OF ALL THE CHILDREN WHO DIED IN THAT SCHOOLHOUSE IN RUSSIA! |
uppin for feed back... lemme know sum'n ppl
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nice rhymin here, and i liked the concept and the flow, great job on this poem, foreal, very creative...........1
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nice shit man. Really deep topic n' you expressed ya self well. I think a lotta cats would only be able to relate to it by what they seen on the media... But peeps who've seen talented kids grow up in the wrong way.. whether it be a bad country, drugs, lack of oppertunity.. whatever, they'll really feel this one.
by the way, hows iraq? one |
^^^ for more feed back... check mine and i'll do my best to check yours... there are so many of you it's hard to keep up sometimes...lol
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c'mon now... hook a brother up w/some feedback
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yall mean with tha poems..that was hot mayn
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ya know , this is really good, there was nothing wrong with it. whats key to a good piece of poetry is emotion and you displayed it here and i totally kids are the future, everyone should read this you can learn something from this... keep droppin,
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kool...good lookin out, y'all... drop some shyt and i'll check back when i can...one
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^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ omma keep doin this until you all notice my shyt!!!!....lol....oh.. that means post some feedback....lmao...one
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your name speaks for itself...you hella ill..tight...
mayne that shit was cool...no probs nothing to work on... therre aint nobody gon fill ya shoes for real..cos dawg u the numba 1 of the few peeps on this site that got that hot shit to show... gd job 1 |
Feelin That Poem Ill,
You Came Up With Some Really Deep Lyrics, You Need To Get Ya Self Hooked Up Wit Sum Audio Gear ... You'd Be Tight ... Tha Poem Needs Sum More FeedBack ... |
damn...lol...it took this long for my own crew to peep my shyt...lmao... j/k y'all... it's all love... let's get them battles crackin' though.... PSA... Mindz Kollide... let us know what the dayum deal is... y'all called us out so let's do this...lol
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^^u laff a lot............lol *jolly boy*........
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when i stop laughin'... that's when kats should start worryin'!....word!...lol
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uppin ...hit this up with some honest feedback!!!
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Lol ... Yeah Sorry ... I Think Tha Mindz Kollide Thing Is Happenin On Saturday ... Not Sure Bout Tha P.S.A ... Anyway Uppin For Feedback ... |
yo, omma play like a stin-gee horse trainer and "take my feed back"....lol
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Ya know, it's funny how no one ever wants to see the truth! You can't run from it forever.
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uppin this for feedback
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lol, I think I replied to this one already lol. But I will again in case. Nice drop, I like the form and I like how u informed everyone of the topic before hand. Good drop keep it up!
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yea man, this was dope in the feeling department, flow was a little sacrificed for me but I got a strange beat on, so that might be it- as far as lyrically wise I was feelin it- said some solid shit in this peice, remind me of a track i finished writing recently... keep droppin.
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ok since i cant return a honest vote in your battle cuz that whore anixiety has me blacklisted ill drop a honest feedback here.this was fucking dope shit here true poetry in a rare form the topic was real as well you should do a spoken word cd with me im working on mine now as weel this was a real emotional heartfelt powerfull piece the deepness of how you feel shines through and i feel exactl;y the same on this topic homie good shit
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damn good one here.real deep content.good work...............
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werd...uppin for more feed...check 365 and counting also
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uppin for more feed
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more feedback, please....perciated
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wow.... this shyt is oooooooooooolllllllllllllllldddddddddddd
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