paramik vs Empire
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
no links
no quotes


Time to show how much ive improved and merk you accept dont run cuz i will chase you down


200 posts to vote

Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 09-18-04 at 06:17 PM

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huh?? blah you shud have asked me first... lets make this due tonight

nah.. 10 lines iight???

naw cuz i just came out retirement and i got madd battles going up tonight rules are good just accept its 200 posts to vote anyways ill drop either tonight or tommorow morning :thumbup:

Empire has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-15-04 06:34 PM.

iiight, but we straight though cos i don't like net beef its really dumb shit...
have it by tonight at at least if possible, 9:00pm... but i'll post mines first

Paramik has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-15-04 06:36 PM.

wat?? you made a mistake it says 20 posts instead of 200...
ima tell strobe to close it cos you set the post to vote wrong...

naw leave it ill have strobe fix it drop in battle forum problems cuz it says 200 posts to vote on the rule thread

Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.
Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.
So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.
This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.
Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.

Ross is a clothing store…
He doesnt have a sig…

Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left(1)

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser(2)

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags(3)

Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance(4)


EXPLANATIONS-(shouldnt be needed but just in case)-
1)little wordplay RINGO STAR was a beatle they fell apart when he left
2)his sig says hes from F.L that must be FRADULENT LOSER
3)his crew is A.I and they are gay
4)his sig says lightweight champ so hes way outta his league cuz im a fucking heavyweight

iigiht upping this battle

Voted For: Empire

Ayo this was a close one. I saw some good punches from both of you, and some good structure as well. Empire you came with some multis that were aight, they fit with the bars but didn't come off very impressive, since I only saw them in your last bar and they were kinda simple. You did drop a line about being gay, a pretty blatent one at that. I think all of rv can agree that direct lines about homosexuality are played. I do like how you played off where he's from though, yet in your explanation it didn't seem like you actually knew what F.L was lol. Correct me if I'm wrong Paramik, but are you from Florida? Lol no hate Emp, you had an aight opener too.
Paramik you had the vocab in this battle, I was feelin' your opener. The thing with your drop though was that you set up some bars good, but they didn't hit like I was expecting them to, like the "toy racecar" line. You made up for it in the next bar though, "your malfunctioning brain" made me laugh. But truthfully I've seen you come harder than this, so I though you could've put some more effort into your verse.
Overall my vote goes to Empire because he came with harder punches and some better wordplay. No hate, keep doin' ya thing y'all...
Vote - Empire

Voted For: Empire

mmm well just cause he lightweight and u heavyweight doesn't mean he couldnt have beat ya! MMMM i put it in th nicest form possible......Empire had a beeter flow, word play, vocb., and just a better rap altogether! The other kid did iight but needs to elevate sum!

VOTE----Empire

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Voted For: Empire

k man u got this by your punches 10/10 but your rhyme was aight its a 8/10 and paranic your flow was wack but empire u flowed tight 9/10 so overall i vote for........

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i meant to say wat she said!!

Voted For: Paramik

nice battle..
my explanation no hate either str8 truth..
EMPIRE's verse.
Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left(1)
^u don't start off tellin' ur challenger that u checked his stats.. no punch existed whatsoever.. second half not bad.. 6/10

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser(2)
^lines played for real.. not bad second line have but being sarcastic doesn't help.. 4/10

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags(3)
^terrible nonsense, last line was horrible, u could have done better (i think!).. anywayz- 0/10

Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance(4)
^multi first half not bad if it made better sense, JESUS! second half even worse, what happened empire? 0/10

ur score- 10/40.. u had sum really played lines which didn't help your structure is terrible quit double spacin' ya verse it's newbish.. 25%.. you had one personal throughout the whole verse.. I have seen you drop harder before, I don't know what happened this time.. you fell short, and ya vocab wasn't bad but u put it in the wrong places.. you need to work on a couple of things and the explanations didn't help ur verse out in anyway whatsoever but oh well, good luck, NEXT..

paramik..
Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.
^first half terrible way to start off, but second half recovered it, kinda funny too.. 6/10

Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.
^first half again not a real punch.. second fell off a bit also.. 4/10

So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.
^nice personal, followin' a "punch line", and funny.. lol 7/10

This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.
^best bar in the battle.. it woulda made a great opener, but nice.. lmao 9/10

Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.
^first half, fell off somewhat.. second half not true about his wins but the emptiness and sig spot came correct.. not the best closer but enuff to take the battle i think.. 6/10
ur score- 32/40 which is 80%..

you need to look out for wordiness, you verse had a nice flow in general but watch your word placement it can throw it off terribly.. but this time it didn't.. you had more personals, better bars.. even punches to follow your verse.. you came harder and your structure wasn't bad either.. good job..

However, both of you need to work on the things i pointed out within y'all verses.. good luck with this battle you too..

my vote/ paramik- brought the harder verse, took the win.. good luck you two..

Voted For: Empire

aight im not going to break each line down but heres the deal:
empire,lmao,nice opener ringo star line killed it,shit was fire man,the rest of your verse was fairly good but ya flow n structure was on key for the most part,your explanations were not needed at all,opener was the best line out've both verses..
paramik??>.......weak ass verse from you i was again expecting more from you,your punches were lame n did'nt connect you had nice flow,the moss line was straight dumb,
srry paramik but nothin stood out in your verse,maybe your closer but it was'nt enough..
empire got this cause of harder punches...no hate..jus be'in honest...return the favour honestly....
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Voted For: Paramik

Paramik took this one, but it was close.

Empire, you had some decent punches, i liked the ringo one,

But PAramik came harder, and the best line of the battle was his malfunctionin brain line.

MY vote, you know

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Voted For: Empire

ha empire your verse was funny as hell

his lines had some good wordplay and flow

vocab was nice also
strcu was easy to read

Paramik:
opener was wack
you only changed to letters to rhyme
flow was ok, but wordplay was bad

empire takes it easy

no hate
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return the favor on this battle pleaase

don't HATE vote
if ur planning to do it jus don't vote at all

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This was feedback posted for Paramik
 

aiiiiight

i'm not gon vote cause empire will only bitch n complain to get dq'ed so i'm just gonna post feedback..

paramik got this, all round more complex verse..
better punches, more complex vocab n connected the bars alot better......

empire? why are you dissin FL emcees when u just got murderd by one?

fuck that you shud've voted...
upping this shit

i just wanted to peep the battle, n check the votes...

paramik, i swear he gotta be dick ridin man...

his verse was trash, it wasnt even acceptable as a damn newbie verse...

his first bar was his best feature, an it got worse n worse as he progressed...

i really am failin to see how your losing this battle

i shouldda voted, my bad man

stop posting in my thread before i have you banned bitch and i had a better verse good shit though paramik shotta go dickride somewhere else homo and you post here again ill have strobe ban you uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp pppppin

Voted For: Paramik

paramik got this one... it was close but i still dont like how empire explains his punches makes it unfair.. but paramik did too... better punches and wordplay close battle but paramik got it..

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^we got beef aso you go vote aganist me obvious not explained definate dr fuck you faggot you are now blacklisted :gfy:

Voted For: Paramik

Paramik for the fact that his flow was definately on point, better than Empiers. He had some damn good punches. Empire always comes with personals something I respect about him. He just got out classed by a textcee with great overall skill.

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Voted For: Empire

Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.6/10
Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.4/10
So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.2/10 simple
This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.5/10
Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.3/10

Ross is a clothing store…
He doesnt have a sig…





Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left(1) 7/10

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser(2)6/10

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags(3)
4/10
Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance(4)8/10 good line


y em[ire takes this wit good punches and wordplay

v/empire

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Voted For: Empire

break down

Vocab - Para
Punchez - Empire
Personalz - Empire (not realli any tho)

don't feel like xplainin any further cuz he got 2 outta 3 so he got my vote

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Voted For: Empire

Paramik
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Empire wants to impress me, claiming he elevated and improved…
But like uncertain science theories, his claiming is fully unproved.
...good opener...nice punch 8/10

Claims he smokes Mcs?, the only smoke you make, is from a cigar.
Fuck the force you provide, cause ya line drive is just a toy racecar.
...kinda weak...6/10

So back off, you been text-injured so much that you feel the pain.
But mostly by your own punches and your malfunctioning brain.
....haha not to shabby, nice punch 7.5/10

This shit’s always clinging to a loss, I'd say Empire’s just like moss.
I mean his style and personals are fake, like the T-shirts at Ross.
...don't understand why a t-shirt would be fake..?good first line...5.5/10

Can’t get through this battle, the win’s blocked from him like a clot…
Ya hope to win, and the wins ya got, come empty like ya sig spot.
...not bad of a closer, coulda been a bit better...7/10
overal: 34/50

Empire
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Ya record is unimpressive i went to checked not a single vet
On R.V you hardly a 'STAR' like the 'BEATLES'when Ringo left
...hahaha solid opener and punch 9/10

No hope you couldnt be dope if you was a addict drug user
I can tell you whack ass from 'FL' yous a fraudalent loser
....nice personal and punch 8/10

Bunch of gay guys repping A.I dont understand how you brag
Get ya dicks rubbed in homo strip clubs damn yall some fags
....meh 6.5/10

Dont write great you lightweight fact is that you ameatuer champ
Heavyweight elevation levatate you shouldve been warned in advance
...pretty good closer...7.5/10
overal:31/40

v/empire...close battle, empire takes it though

This was feedback posted for Paramik
 

checkin it out

incase you didn't know paramik had more lines making it look like his total was higher when really if you take the percentages of both the overals i put empire would win, so my vote does stand for empire

my bad but you siad you really didnt understand one lnie but o well
i dont think its fair that empire has explnations.. which kinda ups... his chances of winning...
i had no explination those extra was juss stuff saying if you don't know wat Ross is..

^you suppose to put explanations thats what makes text dope

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Voted For: Empire

aight this is pretty much notmuch challenge for empire once again. The structure was pretty good for both. But Empire had a better vocab, and i think that his punches just hit harder and shit. Yeah Paramik wasnt bad but Empire was just plain better. ]

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