Elevation Time...
 

Okay since I left when I had my elevation class going on the skill-challenged didnt get to elevate...now i will just do sumtin in LL to help yall out...this time im not taking individuals...just gonna explain shit with examples...so Mental sticky this...thanks... :thumbup:

First Lesson....
 

Introducing alot n this one and Ill go in depth about it later...Im going to use Feeble Minded's verse against Reckless in this cause its prolly one of the best spits on this site that isnt in a battle thats not closed...I'd use something enygma used recently but it may promote swaying...ok so anyways heres Feebles verse...



Now here is verse displays awesome witty punches...most of RV doesnt even understand this...and thats why I am doing this...

u copy RB vets styles & punches, i'll swallow this head
Ok, now the first line gets you intro'd to the punch...you get the point that he is going to make a punch out of this statement...
cuz even orders are sick and tired of u following them ..
And he delivers it with a clever, witty meta...for the slow people that are still saying "no it sucks ass"...he is talking about a delivery (UPS, FedEx) and you tracking it on the internet...see, i told you it was good!

pussy, i'll tell on u for cheatin, but won't get my tattles far
Another intro...this doesnt introduce the punch as well as his opener...but it works..
cuz i realized ur names missing the "W" like ur battles are
Opponents name = Reckless...usually spelled like Wreckless...witty personal...hitting very hard...

im waiting to beat Spul, a must when flowing, fuck..
Intro...he's wording it so his wordplay will work even better in the punch...
your hated so much.. u make a-rival just by showing up
Awesome wordplay...arrival is changed to a rival (enemy)...see people, it is dope...he makes the wordplay work by saing your hated so much...

i`ll wreck some, with no affection - get whored & perish
More of a filler intro...just there to make the 2nd bar to rhyme well...this is okay as long as most of your verse doesnt have it...
if you could step son, it'd be by a former marriage
Decent punch with sum wordplay...for the slow kids...Step Son---Former Marriage...get it?...thought so...

and remember that, whats the cost to be reminded?
Another one of those filler to rhyme well...
ya sig'll go from winning streak to "Loss to feeble minded"
A personal...not amazing but decent...

don't speak in my presence, faggot, itll end with hatred
Good intro to the wordplay and punch...this is a skill u must have to get better...
cuz ur room to talk is about to get fucking renovated
Tight punch and nice wordplay...kids that dont get it...Room's get renovated...yeah, of course, you knew that all along right?...

cuz you've got fans on here man, but confess it they ..
anticipating the punch...ahh!!
gave me more respect than u when I came here yesterday
Witty punch...these hit hard and have people chuckling...everyone needs to learn this attribute...

the lesson? sway, cuz u got no style for boastin kid
Intro to the punch...notice how he says style in the 1st bar to introduce his punch about his opponents form...getting it now?
matter fact, only kinda form u got is the one u posted in
Witty personal...hits hard....

its no guess i'll protest, but wont let up the beating
Ok...here comes the punch..
i mean.. my fists & ur face should set up a meeting
Decent...not amazing though...least fav bar of the verse

even Phenom-in-all hates u, nobody bought it though
Ok..setting up for the personal by mentioning Phenom in all...
till he said 'im out like spuls chance of makin good audio'
A personal that delivers a punch...i hope you can get it lol...

This should help...seriously...read it...study the styles...try to imitate it...word lets elevate people!

well i got the punches it was a decent verse but the best i disagree read e looch verse when he beat me or dv8 verse aganist reckless them was dope this is just ok to me now latins verse aganist i daughter that was fucking dope and so wasnt i daughters verse i would like to see this thread though to see what you gotta say :thumbup:

Dont worry...there may be better...but thats the first that came to my mind to evaluate for everyone...plus it had example of meta'spersonals, and wordplay...it was an all around dope verse...just trying to help people elevate so the skill level on this site gets better...

ok this is a good idea is there anyway i can help?

i dont think so...unless u have sumtin in mind

yup i do i wanna help the newbees who really suck that noone wants to work with to make them good like sinner would be if anyone bothered to spend time and help him

sure...if anyone who wants help from empire just say so..

i want empire to help me aight

whos world famous??

feeble minded...I can help people topicaly...........

that was the biggest example of D/r ever. Have you been on original wile you were gone? well anyway if you cant figure out the punches in that battle, then your hopeless at text battles.

rofl
fucka feeble.

Phat Mic...you are an idiot for saying that is D/R...im trying to help people who need to elevate...so shut the fuck up and keep ur faggot thoughts to urself...Mental...sticky this

I think L.I needs some attitude elevation......

lol j/p

LI i wanna speak with u on AIM next time u got a second...it corresponds with this in a way

This was good

But i beat Feeble Minded

On rapbattles b4 he was a mod over there

He then asled me into his crew, and that was over a year and a half ago.......

SO i guess this was OK

Yeah Apo get at me on AIM... Git Fugged Up is my new aim name...

well i need help not to much tho just punches and a bit wordplay and multi's and thats basially it i got vocab and flow and stucture basically anyone that can help me on msn i tryed to get aim but cant for now sence im waiting ill try and do my shit off what L.I posted there:)
holla:laugh:

yo i cant help with this my bad but i got a battle forum and i gotta work on that to keep my battles toghther :thumbup:

^ya i need porsanals help right here:)

heres a verse and tell me what you think of it its from my battle verse Nutz-B in my sig but heres a little verse:)

I’ll Re-write yer life with my punches and you’ll be the first to act-up…
After then you’ll need to go to the doctors office to get yer close-up/
Its yer first time to lose to me, cuz im a straight up hardcore emcee…
Out rule you fast ill get another “K.O” cuz yer verse sucks, well I disagree/
Ill turn yer life around from this point on you’ll be known as a handicap…
You will be walkin around like that cuz my verse was like a pimp-slap/
I hit bitches and stunt muthafuckas like you around the place…
Even everyone in “RV” says that yer bitch-ass is a disgrace/

I’ll Re-write yer life with my punches and you’ll be the first to act-up…
After then you’ll need to go to the doctors office to get yer close-up/
No punch..thats really just a statement...

Its yer first time to lose to me, cuz im a straight up hardcore emcee…
Out rule you fast ill get another “K.O” cuz yer verse sucks, well I disagree/
Saying you disagree is stating that his verse is good and your gonna lose...word you shit better...

Ill turn yer life around from this point on you’ll be known as a handicap…
You will be walkin around like that cuz my verse was like a pimp-slap/
Come on man...just gay punches...

I hit bitches and stunt muthafuckas like you around the place…
Even everyone in “RV” says that yer bitch-ass is a disgrace/
Your trying to form a punch but ur just stating your concept...get creative!

Now what you need to do is say what u wanna say to him in a creative way...so u wanna say they are gay...well heres sumtin u could say...
You ride all over my dick.. well now ive straight up had it...
Cause this fag has hit more balls.. then a tennis racket...

While sumtin you would spit is...

Everyone claimin you suck.. your lame and hey...
This whole site pretty much thinks your gay...

You see what I'm getting at?...you gotta let your mind think of creative metas to make that concept hit hard...or else its pointless to even try to form a decent concept...

oops^^ i forgot to change that instead of disagree, wha ti ment to say is:

Its yer first time to lose to me, cuz im a straight up hardcore emcee…
Out rule you fast ill get another “K.O” cuz yer verse sucks, well I don't disagree/

well its gonna take a while for me to elavate im only 12

It's okay man...ur going in the right direction...just work on it...its not like it happens overnight...im just trying to help...dont take it the wrong way

alright kool ya i kno ill try harder next time:laugh: elavation elavation aka. practice practice

hows this tell me feedback on this:

Ill battle anyone over you cuz you wack, is what I meant…
Just from this punchline you lost and I got more then 100 percent/

LI is cool.

A battle I had vs for$aken, but I changed some words and shit to make the strucuture better, can you plz show me how this verse coulda been better, then original battle is in the sig, and if I posted it the same way I did in here^^ It woulda been hella lot better, cuz it was sloppy in there

Anyone???

^^were you the one sayin u were gunna murk errbody and there were no vets on this site and shit????


L.I. I Need HELLLLP!!!!!!!! Hook Me Up Playa....What Do I DO?

hmmm, kinda, nah, I just said that I had I different opinion about what vets are, and that I didnt think a lot of peeps here were vets, but I nevr said I was gonna merk everybody, just that Forsaken and G: Deuce were the first mc's on my list that I wanted to battle anyways, L.I gat at this plz

ok I just fixed it the best I could, original verse in the sig link, this one I fixed, L.I., can you fix it more??? show me what I coulda done better

I feel bad merkin you after L.I. just fucked yo ass up/
Way you get beat, it's like you 'wear to much makeup'/
Didnt see this merkin comin, like I murdered you in stealth/
I dont like insultin you but 'For$aken' you do it to yourself/
You can ask you crew for 'salvation', but there laughing to/
And I'd say pray to 'god', but he has already 'Forsaken' you/
Tryin to battle an mc like myself, why'd you even bother/
Battle is lookin like starwars 'For$aken I am your father'/
My rhymes like hot sauce, leave you scared and 'shakin'/
Yo physcick, saw ahead a time an named yoself For$aken/

If you post that shit again, Ill hop on a plane to Canada to smack the shit outta you.

Exclusive ill giv e you feed on that this afternoon...same with you philosopher...i have a cross country meet...but dont worry....ill help u guys out

Well its really just a statement...go at them full force...make up a metaphore...get creative with it...

wrod....want me to hlep these cats elevate???

I feel bad merkin you after L.I. just fucked yo ass up/
Way you get beat, it's like you 'wear to much makeup'/
Nah..links are worn out now a days...dont use em...dont use 'these' things around ur punches...the meta is weak...

Didnt see this merkin comin, like I murdered you in stealth/
I dont like insultin you but 'For$aken' you do it to yourself/
Meh...its just not a punch..ur just stating...

You can ask you crew for 'salvation', but there laughing to/
And I'd say pray to 'god', but he has already 'Forsaken' you/
Decent...made me smile...this was the best bar so far...sorta witty...good bar...

Tryin to battle an mc like myself, why'd you even bother/
Battle is lookin like starwars 'For$aken I am your father'/
Noooooo...never again...horrible...if u think about it...it doesnt even classify as a punch...

My rhymes like hot sauce, leave you scared and 'shakin'/
Yo physcick, saw ahead a time an named yoself For$aken/
Nah...just not working...already tried so many personals with his name...

You really forcused on his name alot...which isnt good...go at him from all aspects...onlky had one good bar in there...but thats sumtin to work off....keep elevating

i think i got it handled so far...