Just Fuck It
 

i know yall read summa my shit that i let git preveiwed, and i was sittin in math class 2day and i figured out the rest of the 1st verse. its raw and needs sum changes but check it:

now im not normally a violent person, unless u give me a reaspn/
but if u pop shit about me, ill shoot u, even if bitch aint in season/
so just cause im a woman dont mean i cant b violent/
in such a sick world, multiple gunshots wont even make media silent/
its like murder is a game, like a sport or a hobby/
hundreds of ppl git killed everyday, but my song aint about 2 git sobby/
i aint tryin 2 preach, i got 2 much of a backround/
but in my case, if rappin effects were like wrestlin, my lyrics a smackdown/
ive been thru tough times, haters hatin my shit/
drugs, sex, and violence, emotional relationships/
bitch u know im talkin bout u, so dont fuckin deny it/
my records out n exposed, so u cant just hide my shit/
u raped me bitch, made me pay 4 my own abortion 2/
but u aint gittin away with this im out 2 torture u/
who woulda known id grow up 2 b such a lyrical genius/
date such a fag, slice off both balls from his penis/
dangle his dick right in front of his face (ha ha!)/
am i suckin hard enough now?! blast fuckin semen all over the place/
cmon, bitch, wanna take advatnage of me now? grab my chest and use me 4 sex/
well i guess i aint got a choice, im 2 high 2 fight back, i knew i shoulda refused that X/
cause i hate u, y the fuck did i date u?/
i should rape u, all iwanted was a thank u/
i did so much shit for u, u never took the time for a glance/
that bitch swingin her thong up in ur face, the hos got u in trance/
do i not mean shit 2 u? i thought that we were sumthin?/
but im stuck another night at home, naked, watchin ur body humpin/
im sick of bein white trash, its time 2 make a come back/
u gonna git ur nuts cracked, im more than just a big rack, boy ima make ur guts clap/
squirtin outta ur mouth, unless u watch the shit u speakin/
im cut all ur limbs off, we aint even close 2 the weekend/
so watch wut u say, else ur out 4 a bitch smack/
think im playin around, but u better just watch yo back!!!

FEEDBACK PLEASE!!! :whacky:

PLEASE!!! uppin 4 feedback!!! HOLLA AT YO GIRL!!!!

cmon yall.... uppin 4 feedback. tell me wut u think....

yo is you related to yvonne + yo im feeln it 7/10.

thanx... no, i truthfully didnt even know she was on this site til she claimed i stole her name... mines pronounced (A-von) 2 clear up any misunderstandings.....

UPPIN 4 feedback, yo holla!

lol woooooooooooooooooooo YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEe that shit was funny

that good?

UPPIN!!! IVE BEEN WORKIN AND I WANT FEEDBACK ON MY NEW SHIT!!!

uppin 4 feedback please! i wanna know wut yall think of the "new" eyvon!!!

That was ill.......a lil psycho but I could feel the emotion in that verse, props. Please check my verse out.

aight, thanx. UPPIN 4 FEEDBACK! I WANNA KNOW WUT YALL THINK!!!

uppin 4 feedback please!!!

I was feeling the subject matter and you had some real depth and emotion in your words, but stylistically it was pretty basic and the flow was only ok. Keep it up though, I realize this is only a rough draft so the final piece should be dope. 6/10.

P.S. If you got time return the favour and check out "Fulcrum Shift" by me. Peace

consider it done! hey is that u in ur sig? if it is u fli boy.... btw, uppin 4 feedback....

cmon uppin 4 feedback ASAP! thanx peace!!!

i thought it was good< better then i was expecting ..*nice job*
i seen ya going for hatefull n sevear shit..lol...
some wordin issues but overall you had some nice content..
i liked the nice rack/guts clap line< flowed well.....
can ya hit up the diss in my sig??...
thanx...

uppin please! im workin on the chorus and he 2nd n 3rd verses. hoppefully i can record it eventually.... its now titled, though, however, possibly not perminently, "Just Fuck It" uppin!

uppin 4 feedback please ASAP!!!

Please Read!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

it was pretty good it had some good lines in it keep it up

*scared shes gonna cut my balls off,runs away*

lol. aight, i wanna hear more feedback so uppin!!!!

When I was young, My mom said "If you dont have something nice to say then dont say nothing"


*Says Nothing*
-Leaves Thread-

oh, so u startin that shit now? well, everybody else seems 2 think its pretty good.... mayb 7 or 8 ppl r just lying 2 me then.... i dont know.... :cussing:

i like that shit... good stuff... very good structure.. over all flow was on target and i was feelin the topic... good stuff... im glad you decided to elevate instead of leave RV... i remember your "good bye" post... you have shown improvement already... keep elevating.... i see your posting in the free agent forum... i see your on the rise and i got a spot for you in 50th brigade if you want it... you would be our 2nd femcee. if so let me know.. peace

sounds good. i got 2 tryout or summin?

ok, ok, ok, lets git sum fedback up in here!!!

Sup ma yeah I was feeling that you know funny shit their, don't worry bout
wreckage he's kool.

You come well hot in this cuting dicks off and shit haha. I not gonna get you
mad.

Peace nice verse

1~

come by the 50th brigade forum... go to tryouts and drop this song as your tryout... you will be accepted, im the leader and tecknequess is the co leader... re rollin 16 deep, soon to be 17 so come on in and drop this song as ya tryout verse!

did it, done....

aight, uppin 4 feedback ppl!!!

pleeeeaaaasssse post feedback!!! i need sum critics up in here

shit was aight....up your vocab though............

prety decent drop babygirl...
nice wordplay n humour...
a lil psycho in parts, got me thinkin you bout ready to kill the whole male race..
lol, naw just playin
decent drop eyvon, sick flow, an connected the bars well, enojoyable shit
return the fave *wink wink*

lol... yeah that's me in the sig, thanks. any chance of a pic of you??

not now..... im on a public comp..... so as i git my own, ill post 1.

uppin!!!!

not bad i say but that just me lolol i give it a 6.5/10 but just wonder if you in the crew?

ya, im in... bigpappa liked this so i posted it in ya tryouts.... from the looks of it, seemed everybody enjoyed it. most ppl said i was in, so i consider myself a member.

how u like my lil tagline 4 50th? "we weill, we will, merk u!" i can see if i can git sum cash 2gether and git a new crew sig. still_remain's r dope. im broke right now, but i can c wut i can do...

uppin 4 feedback.... any older members (vets) wut u think of my potential? truthfully, no hate

now im not normally a violent person, unless u give me a reaspn/
but if u pop shit about me, ill shoot u, even if bitch aint in season/
alright
so just cause im a woman dont mean i cant b violent/
in such a sick world, multiple gunshots wont even make media silent/
nice wordplay
its like murder is a game, like a sport or a hobby/
hundreds of ppl git killed everyday, but my song aint about 2 git sobby/
i aint tryin 2 preach, i got 2 much of a backround/
but in my case, if rappin effects were like wrestlin, my lyrics a smackdown/
alright...kinda basic
ive been thru tough times, haters hatin my shit/
drugs, sex, and violence, emotional relationships/
nice flow..i like the emotion behind it
bitch u know im talkin bout u, so dont fuckin deny it/
my records out n exposed, so u cant just hide my shit/
basic..
u raped me bitch, made me pay 4 my own abortion 2/
but u aint gittin away with this im out 2 torture u/
alright
who woulda known id grow up 2 b such a lyrical genius/
date such a fag, slice off both balls from his penis/
ewwww
dangle his dick right in front of his face (ha ha!)/
am i suckin hard enough now?! blast fuckin semen all over the place/
no comment...lol
cmon, bitch, wanna take advatnage of me now? grab my chest and use me 4 sex/
well i guess i aint got a choice, im 2 high 2 fight back, i knew i shoulda refused that X/
basic..
cause i hate u, y the fuck did i date u?/
i should rape u, all iwanted was a thank u/
nooo this was bad.
i did so much shit for u, u never took the time for a glance/
that bitch swingin her thong up in ur face, the hos got u in trance/
alright
do i not mean shit 2 u? i thought that we were sumthin?/
but im stuck another night at home, naked, watchin ur body humpin/
decent
im sick of bein white trash, its time 2 make a come back/
u gonna git ur nuts cracked, im more than just a big rack, boy ima make ur guts clap/
??
squirtin outta ur mouth, unless u watch the shit u speakin/
im cut all ur limbs off, we aint even close 2 the weekend/
wow ur bad
so watch wut u say, else ur out 4 a bitch smack/
think im playin around, but u better just watch yo back!!!
kkkkkkkk .basic shit

overall-6.5/10

it was mostly all basic with no multies and a lil creativity here and there......i see ur potential....juss keep writing.....u could of used multies and metaz to make it better....just some basic shit u wrote but....the emotional load was there.......

return tha favor and give feed on "legend is born"

thanks, uppin for feedback, im almost done with the next verse, should have it by thursday the latest

please read this and tell me wut yall think.... i could use sum critism