str8_hood vs Still_Remain
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Topic: Life In Jail

Minimum posts to vote: 50

Check in by: 10-04-04 at 11:00 PM

Must drop verse in 120 minutes after check in.


Old battle close.. win given to leader

Still_Remain has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-04-04 10:18 PM.

“Behind Bars”
By: Still_Remain

Life behind bars, seeing peoples faces full of tats and scars,
Praying and peering out the barred window at the stars,
My eyes agape, in the cell I’ve seen men get raped,
Mouth taped so he can’t yell, as they pound him into shape,
I tried to get the guards but they just shut the door,
They don’t care if our faces are pounded into the floor,
It’s either life or death in here, death if you don’t join a gang,
And to be initiated they make you suck they wangs.
I’m found at night with tears streaming down my face,
Huggin the pillow I’m saddened at how the fight the races,
How many tears in jail I have cried I’m not sure,
But I wish outside I life I would have stayed pure,
I concur but is my girl still faithful…
Or will my return to her be all too painful?
I don’t wanna do something stupid to come back,
Or will I not be able to contain anger and crack,
It’s just so hard to start here when I’m alone,
God please help me, I just wanna go home,
Jail is hard; they feed you pure lard,
It’s disgusting; the exercise we get is playing cards,
So on my release date I am bleeding tears of joy,
Because the orange comes of, and I see my girl and boy.

str8_hood has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-04-04 10:47 PM.

They got me stuck in a single cell, no windows, no lights
Lonely cold nights, no privilages, no rights
Most nights spent pondering and contemplating
Mind is racing, last bit of hope I possessed is finally fading
Try to grasp it before I disapperas and vanishes
Jail life I cant handel, livin round animals and savages
We got no freedom, they makin our decisions for us
In this life im livin, meals consist of bread, water and porridge
Reflecting on my life while hearing screams of pain
Fellas getting taken advantage of screamin they cellys name
Stay busy with the bible that’s the only escape
From gang violence, fights and riots I cant tolerare
Visits they don’t grant me casue im in maximum security
My cel block is secluded police brutality look at what they do to me
Keep talkin to god casue his love is unfadable
No females around, masturbation the only sense of pleasure available
But it aint too bad here cause im doing better off than I would out
At least I got a roof over my head and food to put in my mouth
Aint talk to my family so I spend lots of time writing mail
All lone by myself in this life in jail

Voted For: str8_hood

Yo can I vote on this battle with a honesty
And I know me and Str8_hood is in tha same crew
but I just joined their crew, so can I vote, or not?

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i aint in 50th Brigade. check my sig. it says free agent. so u can vote on this

Voted For: str8_hood

i vote for st8 hood
it was stright
both of ya'll
buti got to go wit hood
return favor

check this battle out Jwill vs thechosenone
holla at me

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wow, i find it funny how people on RV say that people on RB dont explain their votes and i get this shit...

"i vote for st8 hood
it was stright
both of ya'll
buti got to go wit hood
return favor"

^what the shit is that?

oh yeah... UP~~~~~~~~~~~~~........................

Voted For: Still_Remain

Still_Remain
structure is good.. flow is on target.. good, funny way to come about goin at the topic.. very interesting.. the topic didnt allow for much imagery, so whatever.. emotion is decent..

str8_hood
structure is good.. flow falls off a little bit.. u went about the topic in a predictable way.. once again, the topic doesnt allow for much imagery.. hardly any emotion at all..

Overall
both had a good structure.. neither had imagery.. Still_Remain had the better flow, he went about the topic in a more creative way, and he had more emotion.. so basing off of that.. Still_Remain gets my vote..

VOTE - STILL_REMAIN

ok ok uppin 4 votes...................................

This was feedback posted for str8_hood
 

I came to see whether mimesis cheats

cant be bothered voting

And LMAO

Same IP

Arizona

Sig sameish

Mimesis bad idea voting for yourself

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errrrrr str8-hood got dis becuz he stood on point

still_remain i heard u aka memesis and u voted for yo self

anyway i think str8_hood should get da win becuz he had more feelings and str8 to da point

~peace~

This was feedback posted for str8_hood
 

just checkin polls

This was feedback posted for Still_Remain
 

lol you been coaught by hood.................................

Voted For: Still_Remain

vote/

topical voting sceme

imagary

str8:5.9
Still remain:9.2

flow

str8:8.0
still remain:8.7

structure:
str8:8.0
still remain:10.0(the tile thing was tight)


overall enjoyed verse

str8:7.8

still remain:9.4

winner: still remain

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ok man. still uppin for votes.........................

This was feedback posted for Still_Remain
 

just trying to see this cheating shit..................

This was feedback posted for Still_Remain
 

checkin to see if the rumors are true, 50 characters

yes, yes they are............ dumb ass, this man battles newbs and then cheats in a battle........ damn man, dont u wanna get better?????

umm.. yeah... you guys should seriously vote this is getting annoying.

Voted For: str8_hood

one i been in prison so i can relate only to the best topical here since i did almost 6 years and still has a movie topical nobody gets rapped in jail thats movie shit aint no death if you join a gang way more neutrals then gang members gang members suck each other to get in what are you talking about??!just wack you aint describe prison or jail just some little kids outlook imagery was poor as well as vocab flow and structure was ok not good either this was wack you kids shouldnt do topicals on shit you know nothing about 1/10
str8 good ass shit you showed how prison is like you really did a bid dope good flow and structure good vocab nice imagery the food was not tru though niggas eat good upnorth sun but we do get porridge for breakfast that sucks lol good ender this was real nice and a dope truth as well it made me remember some shit i like how you based on what you knew not assumptions like your oppenant did thats why i disliked his verse so much and you brought that cold image he failed to bring a 7.5/10

ok ok thanks for the vote man. still uppin 4 votes...........

oh yea both of you return my honest vote......................................... :thumbup:

Lmao @ Empire coming in and hate voting against my cousin cause i KOed him..

Hop off our fuckin nuts man..

ok uppin 4 votes..........................................

uppin 4 votes........................................