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"View From A Different Perspective"
a topical I used on RB....against Lyric....now an open mic....
Never knew my dad, had no father figure Grew up Idolizing those bangin & pullin triggas Mother had to work double shifts at the factory Supporting us was her objective, not loving me At 10 joined the crips to be like my idol Dark Blue To be gansgta I had to kill to be real in tha crew I wasnt' shure what or were to do it, was it morally correct If I could take osmeone's life for brotherhood and respect At school some fool instigated some beef, mentioning my mamma After all her sacrifice and hardwork I retaliated, escalating the drama words turned to physical confrontation, he pushed me to the streets My homies evaluated my handling of this elevating beef I hit him, but he socked me in my temple, my ears rang vison went red, all I recall, is reaching back and hearing a bang seeing suprise in his eyes, his jaw dropped, children yelled Chaos surrounded me, as the gang pulled me away form the self inflicted hell Mom never noticed what happened as I lay in bed and cried She was working at the factory unaware of the pain in the room I lied His death didn't make me feel better, just could do it again No tears for death ever fell again, became used to the violence of my friends We started to rob bnaks, and turned that profit to crack Soon pulling 200 grand a week by sellin the goods to blacks Crack epidemic reached its high, the entrepenuers of cash Making the biggest deal of our lives, a mill producing coke/hash 5,000 lb the first day, Crips on top, we had a royalty mentality On top of the Underworld, but about to crash in reality Canadians wanted goods, so we ste it up, they were late Spotlights glowed, rifles revealed we were the FED's bait My trial came and went, guilty, poperties seized in place Mother found what happened at 17, she cried and slapped my face My pride damaged, soul scarred, as I headed to jail 25 to life, for murder, drug traffic & fraud with no bail as I gianed a rep in jail I became repentant to the Lord Felt as though he turned his back on me, shield to my sword THe time passed slowly, soon my bunk mate would arrive from his crimes hate advocated and possibly derrived he a child molestor, had killed innocent teens witout a reason his crimes against humanity and God, an ultimate treason I considered him my redemption as deathrow neared His demise my forgiveness, the plan became suddenly clear My toothbrush sharpened, I approached him on mop partol stabs and slashes, unleased screams, his pain my saving, I lost control As he lay dying in his ownblood of eartly sin, I was clean My perspective of death hcanged, I accpeted it, take me for Im free! |
Damn This Was Well Thought I Dont Know Why They Sleepin On This |BigChase| These Lines Got Me "Never knew my dad, had no father figure Grew up Idolizing those bangin & pullin triggas Mother had to work double shifts at the factory Supporting us was her objective, not loving me" Those Lines Even Tho They Were So Short Explained So Much This Was A Very Nice Peice Son Well Dropped I Think The Lyrics Were Straight Fire Flowed All Good And No Really Stretched Bars -1- |
thnnnnx bro........
come on this stuffs slept on.... |
nice i feel ya bra
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thnx comeobn this is slept on leave som4e feeback
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Shit was emotionalllllllllllllllllllll
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Damn son, that was dope as fuck.
BigChase vs Nostradamus = best topical ever seen. This had emotion man, lyrical content was dope. |
thnx bro...aprreciate all this shit...comeon uppin...hook me up wit more feedback..
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uppPIN
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definately flawless.nuthin' else can be said.
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Thank you lmao Thats a big big big big big compliment on my work It's not THAT good though... |
Yo SOme Good Shit Fam I Liked Tha WHole FLow Emoitons In Here Was Good Decent Shit Hommie
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pretty good,i felt the emotion and u came creative and complex about it keep it up
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Thanks.........more feedback please
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damn...this was a good topical...very emotional but some lines were a lil streched but flowed it just took your stucture down you know but good peice..
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thankyou sir
yessir uppin sirs |
uppin for feedback and maybe an award
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ey yo dis was hott had good vocab,
nice structa,erthing was good but ya flow kinda fell off juss a little though so i gove it a 9.5/10 |
thnx bro uppin 4 more....
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uppppppiiiiinn hoooooooeeeeesss
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someone...please reply with some feedback
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damn! no feedback ever!
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feedback!!!!!!!!
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this was wack...chase I'm dissapointed
8.4/10 :) |
I love you too.
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Uppin you teabaggers
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doo dooo gimme feedback
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hmmm, ppl sayin they liked ur flow??? lol this isnt audio, you cant tel his "flow" when its written. honestly i didnt like this. shit was lackin to me. seemed real basic and the regular "i wanna be a thug but i cant but ill write like i do it" kinda shyt. i mean i used to do the same thing till i realized that hip hop is sumthing thats real that comes from the heart. im sure u just gotta keep at it. i mean ive been rapping for 2 years now n if u heard my old shit compared to my newer shyt its a huge diff. like keep at it is all i can realy say. happens to everyone
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I know your older stuff may be different but it still sucks :thumbup: I'm dope look at me kid....nah thnx 4 the feedback |
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word 2 this kid |
heh. I liked the first four line cuz I could actually relate to that. But murder and gangbanging. Thats some thing my brother would rap about so I guess you can say I only like a little bit of this. But good job......
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thank yous sirs
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nice piece this had alot of potential nice vocab used this is a very good piece kinda stretched out try to cut it down or put . between verse ok cuz it just looks kinda stretched out but still good keep doin ya thing i liked the lines above from the piece it was good man ill like to see more pieces from u i see u got a lot of potential so keep doin ya thing man |
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Thank you...but This is old stuff wow I havent rapped in 4eva |
robble robble robble
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