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-Damn He's Back-
yup i'm bak to droppin battles an open mics again.... i ecko tha pain from tha sting like hollow wasp's... damage an carnage surpass my lyrics like hitlers houlacosts... explicit lyric stickers submerge's tha art that is purposley hidden... personals are twisted like aim convo's featuring latin kitten... kids parish in peices cause they lacked self intelligence... lyrics today disgustin like eatin feices check tha verse tha punches are irelevent let me retract your thoughts an appear unknowingly like cancerous spots... feed your brain learn the anadamoy of decompesition cause bodies rot.. serve large portions of vocab through bar by bar injections... your comebacks recieve numerous rejections..missin rhymes like c sections.. |
Am feelin this ish.....to much vocab u killin me wit......in audio...is too little confusin wit all the vocabs keep em simple but nice shit fo open mic but 2 short
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lmao weerd dv.....you know i had to come bak strong...........
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uppin this fuckin shit.........................
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That Was MAd ass Nice Mayne Keep It Up U Should Have Some Awards Unda Ya Belt
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Weerd...thanks For Tha Feed.........
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Ali Kumbala Ali Kumbali.......the Champ Is Here The Champ Is Here...............welcome Back Welcome Back.............he's Backkkkkkkkkkkkk
Watever Otha Things U Say Wen A Legend Returns, Hot Shit Mayn, Holla At Me |
weerd thanks for tha feed uppin.........
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yo he's back, yo dat shit was hot dawg
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weerd thankz apreciate tha luv uppin.........
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anytime word, no wonder u in AI, i tried out cuz my shit is nasty too but dey turned me down
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weerd up ya game an maybe one day you get in....uppin.......:)
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na son im mad good, check some of my battles, but dey was like only da best dey takin, i guess cuz i was 6 and 2 back den, and da 2 losses came from dq's
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records mean nothing an who have you beaten thats worth talkin about?.....
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dats true i havent beaten anyone recognizable, but imma face sonofis soon, he 15 and 0
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weerd...uppin.....
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uppin......this......:)
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uppin this shit once again.......
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kids parish in peices cause they lacked self intelligence...
lyrics today disgustin like eatin feices check tha verse tha punches are irelevent dat wuz hot dat line wuz a killer u r talented i lyked yo stuff u r better den me for show mane how do u set ya rhyme so it all centerd lyke dat??????????????????? |
weerd...uppin this........
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hmmm, read well but dv was on point when he
said you focused to much on ya vocab... without multi's it made ya bars seem stretched n we all kno peeps hate stretched shit...! but overall i thought it was nice intro... |
nah it wasnt rele stretched...but am back an their will be mo...:)
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didn't really get that last bar but it was aiight as a whole... first drop since ya started again?...
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tha last bar is self explanied an it was betta then aight more so then 99% of tha shit people post in here...
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r u going 2 tell me how 2 center yo verse lyke dat????????
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uppin this shit..............
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nice shit Intro guess who's back....Introspect...hits them bars...that break ur neck...lol anyway uppin this for fam...and hows our collab thread comin along?...ima up that :thumbup:
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weerd dog thankz you know i had to come back strong...:)
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decent stuff here, i've seen better from you but not bad
everything was intact for the most part..you had some vocab working and the flow was on point except for a stretched line or two, but i think you could benefit from digging a little deeper content wise..not to take anything away from yer work or anything like that. i just would have liked to have seen you tap into that real creativity to really grab the reader's attention..regardless props man n keep at it |
weerd dawg thanks uppin this..............
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Solid shit man 4 stars**** There were a couple of lines you should re-edit til you get it right but it does take talent as well as time to do this; If you put the time into it you can be a success!!!
Yo Yo Yo i'm soft as a kitten my script aint writtin I caught you beating off with your mommas oven mitten i'll piss in yo mouth while you shit yo pants passed out in seconds contempory trance wake up wreck your method then do a dance this is 4 the kids & it's time to take a glance this aint that good but yo backs pinned to the matts chewy is the best & thats just the facts not too shabby now its time to kiss my ass when I drop the beat the shit always lasts! how was that?? i'm brand new to this site just trying to get some respect it's no diss just some garbage to be analyzed |
....................Rofl..............:)
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...uppin........
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HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA! LMAO! Herbs crack the shit outta me... lmao anyway, VIRTUE........... It was good, but im only gonna state the bad things. (its constructive criticism :thumbup:) It seemed like you were making a hella effort for the vocab.. like.. the flow was a little off cos of it... I didnt read what others said but im sure its been said before.. jus lettin ya know.. and.. use bigger writing!!! |
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Can't argue with that 99% shyt... i checked ya last bar again... and again, i don't get the last part of that bar... missin' rhymes like c sections? other than that, though, i was feeling it *chew187... a lil werd of advice.... drop dat shyt in ya own thread... shyt's kinda disrespectful with that freepost bullshyt.... leave ya feedback then leave it alone...one |
drop wuz hot.vocab excellent,structure wuz good,flow wuz sik,10/10.
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weerd thanks OMB <<still betta den you...:) uppin.....
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uppin...................................
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