B.I.Detained vs Premanition
 

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6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

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Check in by: 10-21-04 at 03:03 PM

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Premanition has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-18-04 03:04 PM.

B.I.Detained has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-18-04 03:07 PM.

continuous topicals on life and war leaving me with a sore~head...
brix the only thing u spittin is puss from them spots on ya fore-head...
numerous open mics but all they demonstrate is ya style transparent...
predictable bitch who's spits prove that no talent is apparent...
got r country in common…net alias not only thing getting a bad name…
ya girls gud looking so it’s a shame…
…….that wen she pleasures u wiv them hands she must cause u pain…
walkin onto rv…pants down by ya legs and ready to ‘commune’…
bitch u think u amune….u should’ve been shot in ya mum’s womb…
realise I will break u, after this I’ll have glass to communicate through…
I’ll hit you with so many punches ya eyes will not continuate ‘blue’…


His pic thread –
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=154684

1st bar = check his first pic
3rd bar = *gives country = bad name, b.i.detained = bad name
*check ‘polly’ in his pic link n look at her hands
4th bar = crew
5th bar = check pic, blue eyes > black eyes

uppin ur verse

Voted For: Premanition

Here's a straight up personal.. bitch you better believe me
That only a faggot bites my lyrics off a site like RB.
^^^^^^naaa, weak intro, 3/10
& don't deny it son.. I'll even provide links & shit
dw saw the window of oppurtunity.. but I smashed him thru it.
^^^mmm, better, 6/10
So what if I flipped an old concept?.. bitch & complain
Your punches hit hard & last..as much as erections in the rain.
^^^^^erections last long in the rain, (well they do for me, hehe) 3/10
This kids wack as hell.. shows to be the ultimate definition
But dw's future is bright.. < there goes a sarcastic premanition
^^^^^lol nice pnch, 9/10
From the Uk right?.. Shit I'm acting like I care.
Coz now I know.. I'm ashamed to fucking live there.
^^^^na, weak closer, 3/10

that premanition punc saved you, good flo but punches need working on! total, 24/50

continuous topicals on life and war leaving me with a sore~head...
brix the only thing u spittin is puss from them spots on ya fore-head...
^^^^mmm, 50/50 intro, not bad, 4/10
numerous open mics but all they demonstrate is ya style transparent...
predictable bitch who's spits prove that no talent is apparent...
^^^^^lol, nice, 6/10
got r country in common…net alias not only thing getting a bad name…ya girls gud looking so it’s a shame…
that wen she pleasures u wiv them hands she must cause u pain…
^^^^^naaaa, dont like it, 3/10
walkin onto rv…pants down by ya legs and ready to ‘commune’…
bitch u think u amune….u should’ve been shot in ya mum’s womb…
^^^^nice punch, 6/10
realise I will break u, after this I’ll have glass to communicate through…
I’ll hit you with so many punches ya eyes will not continuate ‘blue’…
^^^^nice clooser, 6/10

nice verse they by preminition, good punches mate but you need to work on your flow! total, 25/50

vote goes to preminition, better flow, punches were more consitantly good.

please return an honest vote on one of the votes below!

pssss, yo preminition, i like your still, if you want you can come and try out for dopeness defined, pm me k

thanx for the vote but thought u were very harsh on both verses handy out the 3 out of tens???

oh n no im down wiv definition....

uppin this....

Voted For: Premanition

aiight

imma break it down like this

Flow: B.I detained had the better flow...premanition your shit was almost stretched.......it was decent shit though...but i gave flow to B I detained

structure: B.I Detained had better structure premanition your shit was kinda stretched..so igave structure to bi

punches:i gave punches to premanition his shit hit harder....BI ur shit was ok u had good structure but then wen it came down to it the punches werent even that hard...so punches i gave to premanition

personals: premanition gets this cuz his shit hit harder and i like the pic shit....matter fact i dont even think b i used a personal

vocab: premanition got that one fo sho...he had decent vocab...b i was all basic....so prem gets my vote for that

return da fav
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=155760

he did use a personal but it was from way back.....^^^

peace

lol..can someone who knows how to battle vote on this?

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peace

aight sweet as, just asking man, if you change your mind, come join

Voted For: B.I.Detained

Both were pretty much god.. but prem came with streched lines..and..
BI: ya shit was good.. not the best but nice overall.. you had some punches that were strong... it was good but some lines were just dumb....like the second to the last bar... i didnt like it.....you had some nice personals...then opening was not as good... and the closing was not as good either......

Prem: nice overall but yours was streched up a lil bit..... and i ddint like the rhymes cheme... not that good... opening was horrible in my thoughs but you came good in the midle and end....nice personals you got that.... but the punches retty much not as good....

Vote Bi

RTF is my open mic...... BI you needa drop feedback....

This was feedback posted for Premanition
 

good luck.........................................

Voted For: Premanition

ok this battle was kinda close to call for me, but it wasnt really one of the best battles ive viewed........ both of u concentrated on punches and personals more then anythin else, like multies.......... but ima have to give it to prem for havin a personal he could back up with proof for every line........ B.I. was sayin "ill show u links if u dont believe me" but then u didnt show the links......... i liked the "sarcastic premanition" line, but that was about it that got me....... both of ur flows werent the greatest but the lines fit together well for the most part....... and also B.I. had sum pretty weak filler/set-up lines...... u should find better things and a bigger vocab....

This was feedback posted for Premanition
 

f.saken alias nuff said i want money word............:)

Voted For: B.I.Detained

Vote - B.I.Detained
Reason:
Better punches and wittier concepts...Premanition had alot of ok punches...but the explanations just completely ruined a majority of them for me...fact is...you explained every bar...yay...you came personal...but you had to explain it...that insults the reader....B.I. had a better overall verse...and was at least able to throw a punch that hit...

o.k

uppin......................................

come on y'all don't slepp on this shit......................

peace

Thanks for explaining and stuff.
But one thing..
PUNCHES only matter in a battle..
not fucking multis and vocab'.
If you wanna see mad multis & vocab'
go read one of my OM's.
I am a Topical Beast lol.

Anyways..

Voted For: Premanition

permanition had better punches and was more creative in hes verse, personal was good and wordplay was decent all around a tight verse 8.0...

B.I had a decent verse but lacked creativeness and some-lines took to long to get to the point u know like ya opener was ok but not hard hitting and set up line was a waste try to come harder in each line, ya flow was good wordplay aint see much, personal was decent but ya punches wasnt really there nither was ya creativeness.... 6.5

lol Cheers I think.

I can only see 3 decent votes in this whole battle lol.
& to of them are for me.
Anyways dw you were right.
Front Lines is wack..
Good idea to put it here :-)

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Voted For: Premanition

i think this was a pretty straight battle. both of you cats got down. its close...but heres how i see it....

punches- close, but b.i.
personals- tie
vocab- close, but prem
flow- prem
multies- neither
structure- b.i.
overall enjoyment- prems verse is slightly more humorous...so he gets it

honestly, i'd like to see you guys go an extra bout. i think you both have alot of talent and i would like to see what you'd come with if you spit longer verses. good luck to you both...keep doing the damn thing fellas. one.

s.v...........c.s.