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Effect 10-19-04 07:01 AM

yo help please
 
I wanna get better at multies and need someone to teach me how to do them correctly so read to see if im doing them correctly thanks.... Can someone also show me how ya work on the 2nd lineof your bar better so you get a good flow going on.


so you could have this


This rappers a fake easy to get rid of and break
he's a hoe cake and an emcee everyone hates!
this is the one I don't understand very well....

or could u do this

whenever ya talk ya always walk ur a joke
ur a bitch who lives in a ditch smokin coke


wack example I know but just explain what I should be doing and highlight ur own examples so that I can follow thanks

CounTREE Jay 10-19-04 07:03 AM

Both have multis in it, the more the better, but don't have them make your verse sound fucked up, namean? and of course have better lines.

-CJ-

Lyriclesolja 10-19-04 07:24 AM

whenever ya WALKIN ya always TALKIN-ur a joke,
ur a BROKE bitch who lives in a ditch smokin coke.<<<<there thats better
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This rappers a fake easy to get rid of and break-he's easy to beat
he's a hoe cake (faggot) and an emcee everyone hates!
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as for the second half of you bar rhyme it with any word in the sentence but make sure it makes sence!
Example:
"yo you a hoe that nobody knows,
you lose all your battles wit those wack flows."
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if you still need help PM me on aim Btracy247
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or go to the tutorials at the bottom of the main page....Peayce

Terumoto 10-19-04 07:31 AM

^none of those are multis.

Lyriclesolja 10-19-04 07:37 AM

W/E....Learn him OMB

Effect 10-19-04 07:43 AM

orite thanks that makes it more clear. I've got msn if you wanted to speak to me on that d12kings8@hotmail.com

Terumoto 10-19-04 07:52 AM

Im doin this on the phone.. so shh if it doesnt help..

Gimme a break...... these dudes are fake
watch the steps I take.. or youll make a mistake

thats a RHYME SCHEME not a MULTI


blah blah blah blah wreckem n rawtem
blah blah blah blah tekks when I draw em

^THATS a multi... multiple syllable rhyme.


just screw round with rhyme schemes... thats what those examples are doin... u can put multis into diff schemes too if u want

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 07:56 AM

jea....imma master everything..check the multi

Mayn, Gimme a break this dudes a fake Like pencils he's easy to break...
Big Mistake Money can Wait cause this time, it's your life Imma take...

La Cosa Nostra 10-19-04 08:00 AM

^Their not 100% multies.. More like internals..

Multies are sequences of rhyming words that are repeated more then once in a bar, not just the same rhyme repeated a lot.
Sinner, you were on my msn last night, I told you to read OMB's multi tutorial, did you do it or not?

KiTTie 10-19-04 08:02 AM

its good 2 have multi's but better with flow.... u can tell when it falls apart if it doesnt flow. multi's r just extra 4 flavor:)

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:02 AM

jea i know nos i forgot to put


There's some multi's mixed with some punches...holla

La Cosa Nostra 10-19-04 08:04 AM

I work on my assonance mainly. Multies are good sometimes, but if every line is full of assonance it just makes your flow insane..

Check out one of the bars in my latest topical.. It wasnt enough, but itll show you what I mean..

The morning was silent, in the aftermath of a violent night..
Many had died, and those who survived confided in suicide..

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:08 AM

jea thats a dope line...because

1) it had a good consistant flow
2) good vocab
3) multi's were there
4) it was create



thats the characteristics of a good line^

Lyriclesolja 10-19-04 08:11 AM

Be advised he a newbie at this he only been rappin 6 months

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:12 AM

that's why we trying to help him....

Lyriclesolja 10-19-04 08:15 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by ..kontroverzey..
that's why we trying to help him....



you gotta build vocab. before you can do multies that was my point.....oh and by the way you went over the line limit on our topical battle it was 15-25 lines you have like 40 that has not gone unoticed!

La Cosa Nostra 10-19-04 08:19 AM

No seriously, by the time I had been rapping for 6 months. I was A LOT better then that.. I think rapping is just not something he is capable of.. Full stop..

Thats not beef, or hate or anything.. Thats an honest opinion. I would tell my friends something like that if it was nessecary..

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:19 AM

no cuz the bolded dont count and in my tryout we agreed to go 20 + liens so i thought thats how you set it up..

sorry i liedd wen i sed iw asnt good at topicals LOL

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:20 AM

nos i agree...lol i was betta then that too..plus the fact i was 11 LOL

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:22 AM

and it was only 33.....

La Cosa Nostra 10-19-04 08:22 AM

I mean, I try and teach him things on MSN.. But I get fed up because he can never get his head around anything I am telling him. Its frustrating. So I usually just end up ignoring him.

Lyriclesolja 10-19-04 08:27 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by ..kontroverzey..
no cuz the bolded dont count and in my tryout we agreed to go 20 + liens so i thought thats how you set it up..

sorry i liedd wen i sed iw asnt good at topicals LOL




20+ lines? What tryout? if your talking about the bitch slap heres the link you said nothing about it check it out and by the way im not stupid i knew you were good....

K.ontroverz.Y 10-19-04 08:31 AM

oh alright LOL.........my fault......jea i meant the bitch slapped...if you know i was good whyd you battle me

Lyriclesolja 10-19-04 08:35 AM

there aint nun like a challenge to help a dude elevate.....

Effect 10-19-04 12:24 PM

what about the 2nd line because once you've said the first line you run out of shit to rhyme for the 2nd can you tell me how you space the rhymes out and how it's done properly.

Efusive 10-19-04 12:36 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Raw Material
Both have multis in it, the more the better, but don't have them make your verse sound fucked up, namean? and of course have better lines.

-CJ-


^^Wrong...To many multies makes your verse look bad
and wack...if you need help on elevating weather its multies,
meta's, punches, personals, concepts, setups, just talk to me
on a aim when im done with class...Aim = xpill69
ill be home from college around 3pm central.

pz

D-ICED 10-19-04 12:39 PM

go to my elevation forum we will help you :thumbup:

Efusive 10-19-04 12:52 PM

why is it that everyone always says that the more multies in your
verse the better...lmao you people are a joke, this is not audio
its text and there a big difference between the two...the more
multies in a text verse the wacker your shit is unless your like
superman or some shit and came make an amazing punch out it
if but then again hes dead.

pz

Effect 10-19-04 12:56 PM

efusive dude can you try and help me elevate cause I got some potentual.

Efusive 10-19-04 01:14 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Sinner
efusive dude can you try and help me elevate cause I got some potentual.



Sure i'll help, you have to wait till im out
of class 1st which is around 3pm central time(US)
you can get a hold of me on aim...xpill69
if you dont have aim...ill just download msn
pm me your SN or email whatever you call it on
msn..

pz

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Plutonium 10-20-04 04:12 AM

Mad Multis from Plutonium:

give you no mercy, I was friendly at first when I was on your side
but now I leave you used...like plants exhaling carbon dioxide
^^^Plutonium VS Mistic Rogue

..ADLIB.. 10-20-04 07:34 AM

aiight..................lets all freepost!

La Cosa Nostra 10-20-04 07:41 AM

Lets not cunt..

..ADLIB.. 10-20-04 07:45 AM

oi nostra........dont worry. keep ur weener in ur pants. :thumbup:

Abraxas 10-20-04 06:27 PM

Why you askin so many times....

Pop Lotty 10-20-04 07:06 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Efusive
why is it that everyone always says that the more multies in your
verse the better...lmao you people are a joke, this is not audio
its text and there a big difference between the two...the more
multies in a text verse the wacker your shit is unless your like
superman or some shit and came make an amazing punch out it
if but then again hes dead.

pz

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anxiety 10-20-04 08:24 PM

Makin fun of superman and shit? At least Em did it when he was alive...


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