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surgical vs Reloaded

Battle Rules:
UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-24-04 at 02:34 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Reloaded has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-21-04 02:48 PM.

i spit venomus fluid/
bitch you cant step to me so dont do it/

ill unload bullets into your chest if you fuck with me/
then lil nigga it will be time for your surgery/

this fucking battle is high stakes like you and Michael Jacksons sex tapes/
Remember that evey doctor and rapper makes mistakes/

This man mad cause my rhymes are dope/
lil bitch aint even got enough post to vote/

this niggas mother is my number one fan/
bitch should decline this battle while he still can/

surgical has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-22-04 08:24 AM.

From the beginning you see this battle was mine
Cause u basic cable and im on showtime
I steal your life like cars on Grand Theft Auto
Take your breath and make it hard for you to swallow
I'll have your body like the leaves in autum its falling
You talk shit in the restroom but now your stalling
Tired of your rap shit and your little terms
Lysol need to spray your spit cause it filled with germs
An when my punches hit its heavy like a rock hit u
The devil inside of me will make jesus walk with you
You need advice so u go to Staples to find out why your mouth is stuck
They cant seem to understand you u like the Aflac duck
U got to tommorow morning 2 spit shit
Knowin all u gonna to do is copy, paste, and edit

uppin 4 votez................

uppin................

This was feedback posted for Reloaded

........................................just checkin

reloaded sucks just give me tha votez

Voted For: surgical

Emcee:Surgical

Verse:
From the beginning you see this battle was mine
Cause u basic cable and im on showtime
I steal your life like cars on Grand Theft Auto
Take your breath and make it hard for you to swallow
I'll have your body like the leaves in autum its falling
You talk shit in the restroom but now your stalling
Tired of your rap shit and your little terms
Lysol need to spray your spit cause it filled with germs
An when my punches hit its heavy like a rock hit u
The devil inside of me will make jesus walk with you
You need advice so u go to Staples to find out why your mouth is stuck
They cant seem to understand you u like the Aflac duck
U got to tommorow morning 2 spit shit
Knowin all u gonna to do is copy, paste, and edit

Comments:
well overall i think that you took this...elevate more in all areas besides structure...you just had a better verse than he did.

Marks:
Wordplay - 0/10
Metas - 4/10
Vocabulary - 4/10
Structure - 4/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 5/10
Closer – 4/10
Personals – 5/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 4/10
Overall - 39/100
-----------39%

Emcee:Reloaded

Verse:
i spit venomus fluid/
bitch you cant step to me so dont do it/

ill unload bullets into your chest if you fuck with me/
then lil nigga it will be time for your surgery/

this fucking battle is high stakes like you and Michael Jacksons sex tapes/
Remember that evey doctor and rapper makes mistakes/

This man mad cause my rhymes are dope/
lil bitch aint even got enough post to vote/

this niggas mother is my number one fan/
bitch should decline this battle while he still can/

Comments:
well i think u lost this one because of your structure and..shit well you just loss thats all i can say...just elevate and go to the tutorial...

Marks:
Wordplay - 0/10
Metas - 3/10
Vocabulary - 2/10
Structure - 2/10
Punches - 3/10
Opener - 2/10
Closer – 2/10
Personals – 3/10
Enjoyment – 1/10
Creativity - 0/10
Overall - 18/100
----------18%

V/SURGICAL

ayo return the favor aight...the battle is in the sig...much appreciated.

upping for some votes...................

uppin 4 some votez. return da favor

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Voted For: surgical

surgical came way harder than reloaded,reloaded had played and simplistic rhymes and he had a bad flow and sturcture.surgical had decent punches and was more creative with it and he attempted wittyness.so surgical gets this easily
plz return the favor in my sig with an honest vote thx -1-

Voted For: surgical

surgical why aint you come this strong in our battle?? lol
surgical won hands down,
punches had alot and were harder
multi goes to realoeded
personals goes to realoled
meta4 go to surgical
flow surgical

man surgical you alwaya self glorfiy
From the beginning you see this battle was mine
Cause u basic cable and im on showtime

but it was still a good drop

return the favors

uppin for some votez

Voted For: surgical

vote: aurgical hands down...

reloaded im dissapoint in u... I'VE SEEN WAY FUCKING BETTER WTF happen here?? u'r verse flow was OK, ya punches was WEAK AS FUCK..., creativeness was WEAK AS HELL..., all around i aint feeling it at all all around weak u should of came way harder then that... 4.0 outta 10....

surgical u def had the better verse...
1st bar was more creative then hes verse ya flow was GOOD,
punches connected well, creativeness was above average NICE DROP FAM....

vote: surgical

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=159406
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=135779
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=156157

^^ return the favor of a vote everyone:

N sergical holla at me thru PM i might have a offer for u.....

Voted For: surgical

From the beginning you see this battle was mine
Cause u basic cable and im on showtime
I steal your life like cars on Grand Theft Auto
Take your breath and make it hard for you to swallow
^^^^^^^^^^ ALL FLOW NO GOOD PUNCHES

I'll have your body like the leaves in autum its falling
You talk shit in the restroom but now your stalling
Tired of your rap shit and your little terms
Lysol need to spray your spit cause it filled with germs
^^^^^^^^^ AIIIIIIIGHT NICE PUNCH AND FLOW

An when my punches hit its heavy like a rock hit u
The devil inside of me will make jesus walk with you
You need advice so u go to Staples to find out why your mouth is stuck
They cant seem to understand you u like the Aflac duck
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ PUNCH DONT STRETCH YA LINES THAT MUCH

U got to tommorow morning 2 spit shit
Knowin all u gonna to do is copy, paste, and edit
^^^^^^^^^^^ TRUE~! GOOD PUNCH

SURGICAL- U HAD "OK" PUNCHES BUT THEY WERE CREATIVE AND THOUGHTFUL AND YA FLOW NEEDS A LIL WORK, DONT STRETCH YA LINES THAT MUCH

i spit venomus fluid/
bitch you cant step to me so dont do it/
^^^^^^^^^^ EH FLOW MESSED UP NOT AN GOOD PUNCH

ill unload bullets into your chest if you fuck with me/
then lil nigga it will be time for your surgery/
^^^^^^^^^^^^ WACK NOT AN GOOD PUNCH

this fucking battle is high stakes like you and Michael Jacksons sex tapes/
Remember that evey doctor and rapper makes mistakes/

This man mad cause my rhymes are dope/
lil bitch aint even got enough post to vote/

this niggas mother is my number one fan/
bitch should decline this battle while he still can/

^^^^^^^^^^^^ NOT AN GOOD PUNCHES NOR FLOW

RELOADED- U NEED TO ELEVATE ON PUNCHES AND FLOW MAYNE AND USIGN PERSONALS

OVERALL= SURGICAL GOT DIS HANDS DOWN BECAUSE HE HAD PUNCHES AND FLOW

RELOADED- WORK ON PUNCHES AND YA FLOW PLUS YA STRUTURE MAYNE