..:Logistic:.. vs RED BEAM
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 12 linez
No Recycling
No Biting

Well Lets go! :thumbup:

3-0 = Knocked Out

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 10-21-04 at 08:22 PM

Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in.

..:Logistic:.. has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-21-04 07:53 PM.

RED BEAM has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-21-04 07:53 PM.

**Trip Red Beam as he walks on the stage...**
**I Pick up the mic ... RED starts shaking!**

Your record sucks, it's about to suck worse, I'm not done,
Even if I was your dad i wouldn't call you my son.
Light you up like a candle, Somethin you can't handle,
Control yourlfow better than a fucking roman candle.
My Fam Can't stand ya face, its a discrase to my race,
Keep your soul packed in a bottle in mah briefcase.
Whys Six afraid of Seven? Because Seven "ATE" Nine,
Whys "Red Beam" afraid of me? Cuz, he knows he cant rhyme.
You aint worth a video tape, I Spitt a famous mixtape,
Last year I heard that you were filed for man rape.
You smell worse than mace, I already won the hunam race,
I took your own medacine and gave you a little taste!
Your found Guilty, for sucking, I just closed the fuckin case!

I think that was 13.... Sry... oh well...
I think that was pretty good.. i guess....
Peace!!

(decided to try something new...every bar is a different style of flow)


Yo, after i win, put me in yo respect list
just cause you a safe driver dont mean you wreckless/

check it, i flow with a cause, you flow like a hobo
always begging for rhymes, shouldve just been a no-show/

yo, Going against me, i'll put yo name on the map
Make this the worst lost for a nigga droppn verses in a rap/(you)

your a pusher, but dont push your luck
cause if you think too hard against me, yo brain might get stuck/

...kid, "You gotta feel me" as i "Flip" this "Gameover"
I'll "One take" it like "Hov'" and i'll show this flamethrower/

yo, lets not make this a "Kontroverzey" when i rip
your a 12 year old DOPE ANGEL,who said that's a "myth"

fuck it, "angelz of destuction", is that what you bring
all you niggas is wack, none of yall niggas got wings/

aiyo, go grow some nuts, its well past yo bed time
take advantage of the choice, and dont cross the red line/

dawg, ur not on my level, you 12 year old bastard
I just owned you like a "slave", start calling me "master"

BIOTCHHH....i aint done this in a while....holla back youngn

You just made 12 yr old bastard, merk you alot faster!
Ha Ha!!

Nice shit dude....
I like it!!

Respect~~~

Peace..... lets get some votes on this shit!!!!~~~~~

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Voted For: RED BEAM

ok............ not a really good battle...... Red Beam u got this man b/c of personals and punches even tho i wasnt really fealin any of em....... not much more to say, no one had a hot verse and neither of u two hit really hard with me......... both used elementary languauge...... both are prolly in elementary school......... but keep doin wat ur doin, ull get good..... both of u...... i liked the "dont cross the red line" thing if u were talkin about ur name

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i was..and good lookn for vote...i return HONEST favors...l8r

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Voted For: ..:Logistic:..

punches were the thing that got him this battle. punches flow and medium personalz.
your verse was excellent logistic.
red you need to elevate but not as bad as me lol but i thought your verse was sorta played.
vote=..:Logistic:..

Voted For: ..:Logistic:..

Aight Good battle but Logistic got this..But only Just...
L's Structure was better and the flow was aight except some lines were a bit too short...
Red Beam u had a good verse but u were tryin ta use evry one in AOD as disses....But ya verse was a bit too basic..especially for sum1 at your level...Overall Logistic came just a bit harder ..but not by Much...No hate..
V/Logistic....

Voted For: RED BEAM

red beam first: shows good talent with rhymin "list" and "wreckless" also "game over" with "flame thrower", did well with bringin everything around him to this battle an example: using "konttroverzey"''s name and workin with "flip" and "game over" thing was very creative, and the structure was great very readible and understandable.

logistic: seemed to rhyme simple most of the time through, "done" with "son" also "race" and "tast" and i did not like at all how he said "candle" twice and didnt understand the
"Control yourlfow better than a fucking roman candle."
wasnt feelin it. the structure was good.

summary: read beam came hard with evry line, logic had some that were just plain had no core and not hard at all like this one

"Whys Six afraid of Seven? Because Seven "ATE" Nine,
Whys "Red Beam" afraid of me? Cuz, he knows he cant rhyme."

thats just stupid, no disrespect intended, cause ive done it before,and also at the end of your verse you said this
"I think that was pretty good.. i guess...."
i guess! what the fuck is that you dont say that about yourself, you have to believe that you shit is good cause if you showin doubt in ya own work then that shows readers that you might not have come your hardest so why vote for him, you have to make ppl believe your good, cause that exactly what tupac did, he made sure you believed evry damn word he said, and we did.
overall it goes to read beam.

good battle

Voted For: RED BEAM

mann that was a weak ass battle and a hard decission to vote on. red gets this cuz he had better flow, punchlines and other shit
u both need to fuckin elevate

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Voted For: RED BEAM

i voted for red beam he had better flows puches meatphores timing flow all around a good verse
logistic verse was aight not very good whats with that 67 ate 9 shit that was stupid

good lookn for those votes people...lets cop some more, or is it 3 wins its over?

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Voted For: ..:Logistic:..

Logistic takes this one....his punches were decent and hit hard enough for the win....his verse flowed well....solid structure....nice inners........everything was good except the closer.....those last 3 lines.....never make your verse have an odd number of lines.....it don't sound that goood....it's like a movie that just ends and you're expecting more....elevate more....you've got better....a lot better

RED BEAM......your bverse was really tight too but punches didn't hit as hard as Logistic's....i mean your punches were decent but just not enough to take the win....ya know?good wordplay....like 1 metta and it was good.....close close battle.....kep elevating aight?

peace

i was wondering what that tupac shit was..music started playn, and i was tryna find out what it was..lol...but good lookn for the vote up on here

Voted For: RED BEAM

decent battle.

L - your verse was not bad had alright flow and some decent internals. your vocab was alright but u coulda used more words instead of candles twice in one scheme. structure was good. punches were decent but not really ne personals. i seen a lotta of rhyming just for the sake of it. u need to turn that into good punches and incorporate personals in ya verse.

R - good drop. it had better vocab and stronger punches. why did u pull out all these other rappers names tho i wasnt feelin it. what was the point of that? besides that tho u had a stonger verse. structure was good, flowed well some multis thrown in there. good drop

Vote - Red Beam