Poetikal Panda vs Tstorm
 

Battle Rules:

10 Line's
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Topical Battle: Beautiful Garden-10 Line's

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-24-04 at 01:59 PM

Must drop verse in 40 minutes after check in.

Tstorm has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-24-04 01:30 PM.

Poetikal Panda has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-24-04 01:31 PM.

Here Go's
Savouring The Sweet Fruit's & Asset's Of a Glorious Haven-
Fluent In WildLife Like Butterfly's & Squirrel's & a Presence of a Raven-
Assortment's Of Flower's Emboss & Bless The Natural Essence-
The Odour Of God's Friut's Cause's a Mind Reaction To a Reminiscennce-
Ivy Leave's Curl & Trickle Down into a Twisted Heap Of Mixed Green-
It was Like Standing In the Forbidden Garden With The Holy Lord & Adam & Eve-
My Heart felt Warm, Warm because it felt like i was being Cradled In the arm's Of Mother Nature-
Angelic Figure's Watched The Development Of The Produce's Of the Creator-
My Feeling's Were Lost & My Soul Had Been Washed & was Now Clean-
Superior To The Cloud's Which Habited Heaven It was The Most Enlightening Place i had ever seen-
Again sorry the Line's Were Stretched But Oh well....G'Luck

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as the evening sunlight penetrates, so subsides the misty haze
the water fountain,the tranquill beauty of the hegerowed maze
amazed how the crazy paving adourns the lillys in all there glory
the whole place bustling with life, each creature telling a story
the pragmatic stones, entwining time and reavealing affirmation
water fountain calms the soul, frogs providing visual fascination
wind blows with surgical prescission,whistles the autumn leaves
the overwhelming riches of the magpie..mother natures thieves
poppys produce a refined divine beauty..coulors set me alight
through the day an ellegance, but its real beauty comes at night

sorry kinda fucked the post.....................

there both the same so...........

DQ Me if you want i went over the Line limit up to you..........SORRY

nah its cool.........think they were jus a lil stretched but its cool.........
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This was feedback posted for Poetikal Panda
 

oh my motherfuckin god, this is fuckin crazy ass shit lickin god damn, i was fuckin feelin every fuckin word, and i mean every word.
what i like most about this battle was that in here "rapverse" we all are dissin each other and shit like im kill this ass and fuck you dick, but ya'll are battlin about a fuckin garden that shit is fuckin tight as a fuck, now i was goin to vote but both of yours are so good i cant, tsrtorm yours was shorter than pand'as but you shouldnt lose because of that, i cant vote, you both did awsome good luck.

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Voted For: Tstorm

storm winz.....vocab an imagry plus a flat out better verse....
both cats had decent verses but i felt stroms better nice battle u 2

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Voted For: Tstorm

Tstorm - good spit, your vocab was hott.. and your flow was perfect.

Best Line - as the evening sunlight penetrates, so subsides the misty haze
the water fountain,the tranquill beauty of the hegerowed maze
amazed how the crazy paving adourns the lillys in all there glory
the whole place bustling with life, each creature telling a story

Worst Line - NONE

Conclusion - iight spit.. your flow could have been better, but good lines.

Best Line - Assortment's Of Flower's Emboss & Bless The Natural Essence-
The Odour Of God's Friut's Cause's a Mind Reaction To a Reminiscennce-

Worst Line - Ivy Leave's Curl & Trickle Down into a Twisted Heap Of Mixed Green-
It was Like Standing In the Forbidden Garden With The Holy Lord & Adam & Eve-

OVERALL - good topical battle, but I gotta give this to Tstorm. He had a better vocab and a better flow. Which to me wins Topical battles. Con you need to make sure your flows on.. and maybe up your vocab abit.

Vote - Tstrom

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Voted For: Tstorm

I liked tstorms spit better bcuz there was alot of really good imagery and it was easy to follow and understand but both were pretty good to b talkin about a "beautiful garden".
holla at ya boy

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Voted For: Tstorm

my vote has to go to tstorm....... just by looking at the verse i can make this decision..... BRILLIANT structure... flow was spot on... all bars are perfectly even...... in terms of the topik.... i would still have to say t-storm....
the pragmatic stones, entwining time and reavealing affirmation
water fountain calms the soul, frogs providing visual fascination
wind blows with surgical prescission,whistles the autumn leaves
the overwhelming riches of the magpie..mother natures thieves
^^^^^ theres some pretty deep shit in here..... and i like it
conculsion..... mate it wasnt bad..... but your flow and structure let you down... and your verse... just didnt have the feeling that t-storm had... anyway good battle
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yo man... return the favour ok... got some battles on the sig that need votes.... thx man

Voted For: Poetikal Panda

Savouring The Sweet Fruit's & Asset's Of a Glorious Haven-
Fluent In WildLife Like Butterfly's & Squirrel's & a Presence of a Raven-
Assortment's Of Flower's Emboss & Bless The Natural Essence-
The Odour Of God's Friut's Cause's a Mind Reaction To a Reminiscennce-
Ivy Leave's Curl & Trickle Down into a Twisted Heap Of Mixed Green-
It was Like Standing In the Forbidden Garden With The Holy Lord & Adam & Eve-
My Heart felt Warm, Warm because it felt like i was being Cradled In the arm's Of Mother Nature-
Angelic Figure's Watched The Development Of The Produce's Of the Creator-
My Feeling's Were Lost & My Soul Had Been Washed & was Now Clean-
Superior To The Cloud's Which Habited Heaven It was The Most Enlightening Place i had ever seen-
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ WOW NICE FUCKING SHIT HERE U HAD CREATIVITY......EMOTIONS.........IMAGINARY........ .DA FLOW WAS CHOPPED UP BUT IT WAS COOL.........AND VOCAB DIS IS AN GOOD SHIT HERE FAM NICE GOING



as the evening sunlight penetrates, so subsides the misty haze
the water fountain,the tranquill beauty of the hegerowed maze
amazed how the crazy paving adourns the lillys in all there glory
the whole place bustling with life, each creature telling a story
the pragmatic stones, entwining time and reavealing affirmation
water fountain calms the soul, frogs providing visual fascination
wind blows with surgical prescission,whistles the autumn leaves
the overwhelming riches of the magpie..mother natures thieves
poppys produce a refined divine beauty..coulors set me alight
through the day an ellegance, but its real beauty comes at night
^^^^^^^^^ O AIIIIIGHT I SEE SOME.......FLOW.......NO VOCAB..........IMAGINARY..............NOT MUCH CREATIVITY............NOT MUCH OF EMOTION



OVERALL= BOTH OF U HAD AN GOOD VERSE NICE DROP FROM DA BOTH OF YA FAM.............BUT DA PERSON WITH THE MOST POINTS IN EVERY TOPICAL CATEGORY WAS CONCLUSION DA NIGGA HAD EVERYTHING THAT MAKES AN GOOD DROP OF AN TOPICAL

TSTORM U HAD AN GOOD DROP NICE FAM BUT U DIDNT HAD THAT MUCH OF CREATIVITY NO VOCAB........PLUS DA EMOTIONS I WAS FEELING IT FAM


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Voted For: Tstorm

V/Tstorm.........he came harder wit everything multi's punchs an structure was good his flowed good...conclusion had a good flow also but no real hard punchs not really feelin his verse.....
V/Tstorm......
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