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T.empting N.atural T.alent (T.N.T.) {Hot}
people been requestin' that i do a solo open mic since peepin' some of my other works.. so due to that request, here goes.. ENJOY..
T.empting N.atural T.alent [TNT] [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent [verse 1] like freestyles in short-hand, your visions lopsided got heavy-weights hiding, false numbers confided rockin' stilletos, knockin' knees back like flamingos look to Ouiji cuz your W doesn't lie in palms of Cleo metas taken dimensions outta ya strict x- n y-axis ya record low rated like porn films payin' an actress hard to elevate when ya verse's never brought up fuck with Fiya to get grace marks leakin' stigmata [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent [verse 2] like the divorced n prenupts, I'm pushin' minds broke you overflowin' to dodge reprecussive breast strokes cast de-voting cuz ya critiques are viewed with laughs ya rib cage collapsed, pass plates 'til ya vocab run laps valves malfunction, ya pass bladder stones in ya kidneys underestimated but I give verbal comas like shock therapy war fought barely, scales at fault cuz ya votes carry costs rep overreact, after the fact I smoke ya damn near exhaust [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent [bridge] stay challenging my logic like vaseline plus fluids ya verse hot, my name + gaseline set off next to it ya ruined egos in vain, ya vein catchin' blood clots loose digits go to letters cuz ya losses playin' slots [chorus] my wit's infinite, this femcee survived the fittest words hard-hittin', like windshields n pigeon shittin' sympathy's forbidden, shutdown extra room 4 critics ya loss sealed in manilla like results from your clinic verse balancin', cuz you spare prewrits like rations go rushin' like Stalin just to tempt my natural talent aight leave feedback, pz.. i'm out.. |
Damn... You ripped the shit in the verses... Loved that Cleo Line... Chorus was kinda off, but chorus's are the hardest thing in my opinion... Also, make your verses longer, your verse and your chorus are almost the same length... I'd give it a 6.5 outta ten with the chorus, and an 8/10 without it... Good shit.. Work on hooks...
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that's why i need to put this shit to audio, cuz i can make those exact words sound too sick... thanx for the opinion... uppin'............ like whoa.............
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This was dope fiya, yea, i think the chorus was a little off too, but everything else made up for it,it flowed very well, and your lyrical content was hot, a self glorification type piece i guess, this would sound dope in audio....8.5/10
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yea, can't wait till you do audio. :D
This peice was hot. Loved the flow. Hot shit. Nice imagery. Damn, sick. The chorus was pretty ice too. Damn, feelin' this shit,g url. I give it 9/10 Your next om should be one about me. :D lol j/p You don't need to do it if you don't want. :( :) |
wanna do a remix, SPuL...?
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nah, I don't like this topical stuff. But we can do some other type of song. :)
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alright.. i'll consider that.. :) pm me with a topic.. aight,
~uno~ |
i don't kno, you can choose. Like braggin' type, love, hater diss, blah blah blah. :)
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i ain't into love songs and shit, too many people do them, i'll pick a topic sumtime and have it due next week.. (the next time i get near a comp.) lol..
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i'm talkin' to you about this and i forgot to up this again, here it goes...
uppin'................... :) |
Loving your verses gurl ignore any other niggaz that hate. Because this piece was very very dope.
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thanx, pushin' my weight around here.. :)
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I might drop an audio tonight or tomorrow...
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^word, do ur thang kuniva...
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Whaaaa.... That's fiya fa shiggaty. U should holla at me fa them collabs y'undastan. but that's killah.
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I need to get u that mic fa real so u can hit up that audio.
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^ya thanx babes............ nice support.. :)
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damn Fiya you almost as good as me ;) you ripped it ma...you good enough to go mainstream in my oppinion... and since I said that it definetley means something...I gotta deal ;)... I give it an 8/10 due to flow and meta's which you seem to be the Duchess of....peace |
:) nice, feedback thanx a mils.. :thumbup:
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I enjoyed this piece and am serious ma...
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All I got to say is DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!you ripped this gurl.....nice...chorus was a lil eh but still nice...but the VERSES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!was like whoa!!!!!!!!!!!just stop playing around an get on a mic cuz this wit a beat is a monster
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Ya thats my baby girl holdin it down 4 ya ni99az
Sho sum fuckin respect ....Nuff Said..... |
that piece was definately Fiyah.keep em comin'
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word, i heard y'all thanx peeps, uppin' this shit...
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UPPPPPPPPPPPPPIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN NNN' the shit outta this one.. :)
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push them uppin' like a bitch... whoa, shit, don't sleep folkz... :)
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metas taken dimensions outta ya strict x- n y-axis
ya record low rated like porn films payin' an actress ^^^ thats dope as hell, nice wordplay n punch... cast de-voting cuz ya critiques are viewed with laughs ya rib cage collapsed, pass plates 'til ya vocab run laps ^^^ dope as hell again, last line was pure ''fiya'' wasnt feel the hook tho, that pidgeon shit thing, i thought that was a lil lame... hook could have been better nice wordplay in the verses, an the brdige was okay...maybe a lil pointless to be honest, but overall not a bad drop |
^^^ werd fell the same way babygurl
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^ey, oreo- i accidentally erase the pm you sent me for the collab, i tried to pm you one day but ur pm's were too full...
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uppin' this shit, before i'm out... like whoa.. move bitch... lol
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Hott dropp!!! I would compare your style to Nas.. Remind me to check out your audio!! :shoot:
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thanx, uppin' this shit like whoa..
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givin' it another up, like what.. bitches don't sleep.. aight.. pz
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get off that sleep mode, peeps, up..
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hey...gotta go i'll drop feed back a little later
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aiight.... like I was tryna say before I was rudely interrupted in the last post... lol... yo, i love how you be wording ya shyt and keeping the metas coming. verses were fiya .... but short... you had kats looking for more in every verse... i agree with those who said they were about the same length as ya hook.... i almost mistook ya hook as a verse...lol... but, yeah, ya shyt was butta, baby! keep droppin it like it's hot... werd... and lengthen ya verses on this shyt if ya can... i wanna see what other madness comes outta that brain of yours!
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^if you got aim or yahoo messenger, i can give u a sample prolly.. get at me..
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