mag.nif.i.cent vs ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..
 

Battle Rules:

30 lines max
No Recycling
No Biting
Crew Votes Are Allowed since we in the same crew!!

3-0 is ko

Topic: Life As A Drug Addict



Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 11-04-04 at 08:22 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

..::iNgEnIuS mInD::.. has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-01-04 08:23 PM.

Mag.Nif.I.Cent has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-01-04 08:38 PM.

life as a drug addict


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My life's been wretched, ever since i messed with, drugs
its like i have no friends so acid sums up to more than hugs
crack, heroin, whatever substance i could get my fist on
getting sick, passing out in alleys, and getting pissed on
no home, no wife, no kids, my life is equal to non-existant
i stay persistant to find drugs to keep my mind twisted
so listen, to my story, see the addictiction with no glory
stay close with no hope with a bunch of drugs before me

once a rich guy, my fist rised, all the power was mine you see
unusually, i used to be a man who was confined but free
until the drugs came into sight, and my mind strayed away
no longer was i in the black and white i had swayed into gray
the drugs came freely, and the money has always been there
but a big risk to me was popping a couple pills if i dared
suddenly the change happened and i needed something better
standing on the corner for hours never minding the weather

a couple years flew by admittingly i realized i was a joke
weed wasnt doing anything for me i needed something i couldnt smoke
i moved on to crack but the change was way too weird
the adrenaline kept rushing and death was what i feared
so i sat back with a fat pack and consumed all of it
with a spoon and a lighter and the fumes crawling in
no longer could these drugs really tempt my taste buds
so i took more and more until i found some laced drugs
i swallowed a couple pills then slowly smoked a little chronic
thinking about the world not knowing it was my last day on it
i slept that night in my dreams the last word i heard was overdose
spent three weeks in a hospital unconscious and comatose
so if you payed attention closely you would see that i was addicted
but being dead at thirty one was something that i never predicted

good verse I.Mind upping for votes people ........

battles been open 10 days and still no votes... uppin will return favor

This was feedback posted for Mag.Nif.I.Cent
 

yeah... i see where this "won" is going...lol... nice drop fam... i would have thought i.mind would come with a longer piece... not bad though... i'm out

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oops.cnt vote...nice veres though peeps.
i.mind had better struc, but mayb wasnt long enough...

flow..holla at me if u wanna toical battle...wud like a rematch now ive elevated..

peace

battles been open 20 days and no votes.. and tstorm ill battle you again but i was bullshitting with this verse i thought she would no show so dont take this as an indication of my topical skill getting worse but no doubt you was dope before and if you elevated it would be a close one...

Voted For: Mag.Nif.I.Cent

okay this was a nice battle....both had great verses.....i really like flows structure.....iNgEnIuS mInD i liked your vocab...overall i think flow won because is seemed that he was on the story line alittle more then iNgEnIuS mInD but both had the shit verses...so my vote goes to flow....
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v/flow

iight thanx uppin.........................................

upping for voted drop a link ill RTF...

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Voted For: Mag.Nif.I.Cent

I thought that Mag's takes this battle becasue his
verse was more complex with greater imagenry..
With better vocab and multies. His verse was more
in depth of where the person in his verse was and
what they was doing...

D I really liked your verse, you had nice flow and
decent imagenry you also used nice vocab..

I thought that you didn't really try in this one
because I have seen better from you or you must
have rushed your verse. would have beat a lot of
people on this site but not Mags.

Vote ~ Mag

Voted For: Mag.Nif.I.Cent

aight this was a very good topic first off.... i read both twice, and i loved the stand point of Magnificent's.. his imagery was very well developed, he started from stating how it felt like he had no friends cuz the drugs was the replacement to the sleepin in the alley, getting pissed on, and getting sick.. and how he used to be a rich person and free with his mind and spirit--but u can see the transition clearly, throughout his writing.. and he came up with a conclusion--how drugs wasn't the answer and then dies at the end.. so he was speaking from a dead person's perspective-- I find that very effective to the reader.. that u can start off with an major perspective that people can relate to, but then go deeper inside the issue.. that was really nice, the word use was very creative, rhyme was nice-- even tho u didn't need any at all.. i say 9.6/10 for magnificent.. i seen no str8 flaws within this..

Dabatos-
i was feeling your stand point too.. i liked how u started off "blaming" the drug like most people would do-- so i find that very realistic.. but it's like u stated it as a fault but didn't continue it.. u went off into saying how u tried it once, but not connecting the two (in my opinion).. u had nice imagery also, but ur points didn't connect--that's my main problem with yours.. i liked the part that said:
I did know well, after one try, dat i'll stick wit this sad addiction..
I was warned n didn't listen, now wishin that blunt i was never givin...
^cuz it's like the person finally owned up to responsibility.. your flow was really nice, rhyme scheme was really good.. i just was feeling how it was going throughout- not a really good connection... but it wasn't bad.. i say 8.7/10

Good luck.. you two, but Magnif. gets the vote..

Voted For: Mag.Nif.I.Cent

hmmmm ok
wow magnif your really coming around
ur emotion and imagery were there
and the message you sent in this sounds on point
but what need work is your spelling at some points
but beside that not bad

ingenius
u had nice vocabulary and werd choice
but the imagery lacked just a little
and your emotion was ok
i couldn't quite say anything more about your piece
because i felt u should of wrote more to this topic

but anyways for obvious reasons this goes to magnificent

decent battle yall'

Voted For: Mag.Nif.I.Cent

flow intelligent took this one. better wordplay, and more creative and advanced in vocab in this one. yo verse just had me tuned in...when i read dabatos verse, i wandered off a lil, because the verse wasnt interesting to me..flow intelligent, u got skills word-up. i usually dont vote on these long ass battles, but yo verse got me hype, and dabatos, yo shit was kinda too short, and u didnt hit tha topic better than ur opponent.i think u got skills, just too simple with tha rhymes.elevate on that...yo had some good lines in there tho

overall this was crazy...dummy good verse, but only one person can come out on top, and after tha first 4 lines, i think that was decided...

plz return tha favor with an HONEST vote on battle in my sig...i'l hit up another one of yalls if yall hit this up...HONEST PEOPLE...no hate...1