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Elemental Soul vs Dabatos
Battle Rules:
20 lines max No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3-0 = KO topic: A Plauge! Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 11-05-04 at 10:18 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
Dabatos has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-05-04 09:19 PM.
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Elemental Soul has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-05-04 09:20 PM.
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The united states,a land where evil is extolled,
Innocense is rejected,yet we refuse to sell our souls, Stuck in poverty,causing the animosity of honesty, So obviously,our only hopes are winnin the lottery, So sin spreads like a disease,but truly not caused by the poor, Dis plague kills us,cuz da government will not give us more, I speak to the lord,hoping he'll answer me with a miracle, We must learn through parables,our lives are just unbearable, Africans were enslaved,traded through the middle passage, Columbus betraded and invaded indians,death is massive, How people suffer now,reminds me of back in history, Some struggle for a dollar,we want everlasting victory, Thats it,we had enough,riots become significant, Ilegal imigrants,wheres our freedom?this is fucken inclement, Cutting the throat of the governments policys,and possibly, We can get our fucken way through theories of philosophy, I want the ones who struggle to unite,fight for your piece, I want Crips to shake the hands of Bloods,cutting your leash, Heal the poison,be inspired by those who escaped the dark, From being Jesus disciples,or the brain that Tupac sparked, |
topic: A Plauge [The Plauge] I saw a report on the Fox news, that their was a mysterious plauge, Spreading faster then a bacteria's rage, deadly in very serious ways... Too many ppl frearing wit craze, stayin home where its merely as safe N gets worst after hearin the states its reached getin near to this place.. [The Syptoms] The death rate is over ten thousand innocents, only killed in one week, Syptoms are from unkown scars to scratches dat makes someone bleed... Which will end up making one weak, to the point that they can't even see.. Bleeding out of their eyes, if this happens then they got the unkown disease.. [Fear is Gone] After two more months of fear, it's said no people has had the infection.... Death rates have lessend, but 2 be sure, everyone must get an anti-injection.. It's sed for our protection, an anti-injection would be takin the right direction... But i wish i never got that injection, cuz of dat shot, i learned a bad lesson... [The Lesson] When I arrived home from work, I saw my pale brother full of weakenss... First thing to come to my mind, is what happend to this wonderful genius.. Blink my eyes a couple times, it was just too horrific for me to believe this.. Infected with the Anthrax disease, A cure, no scientist has ever achieved it... [The End] It's been 1 year since that event, and half the country has been wiped out... I have no family alive now, and geting rid of this disease i have high doubts... At times I cry about, how i could of saved my family from takin that shot... Because that shot was givin by terrorists, which was never to be stopped... Good Luck |
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Voted For: Elemental Soul
both came good as hell but i gotta give this one to elemental dabatos u should have put all that shit together into one thing instead of dividing it up kinda lost me there altho nice flow last 4 lines did it for me elemental hot shit keep it up |
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Voted For: Dabatos
Dabatos gets this becuase his structure made it easy to know what the topic was ad keep track and not lose it. nice work dabatos. sorry elemental. but i vote honestly. peace return da favor. |
Voted For: Dabatos
Dabatos - Good verse, your flow was good.. and you had a good structure. Best Line - [The End] It's been 1 year since that event, and half the country has been wiped out... I have no family alive now, and geting rid of this disease i have high doubts... At times I cry about, how i could of saved my family from takin that shot... Because that shot was givin by terrorists, which was never to be stopped... Worst Line - The death rate is over ten thousand innocents, only killed in one week, Syptoms are from unkown scars to scratches dat makes someone bleed... Which will end up making one weak, to the point that they can't even see.. Bleeding out of their eyes, if this happens then they got the unkown disease.. Elemental Soul - iight spit, you had some good flow.. and a good vocab. Best Line - Stuck in poverty,causing the animosity of honesty, So obviously,our only hopes are winnin the lottery, Worst Line - I speak to the lord,hoping he'll answer me with a miracle, We must learn through parables,our lives are just unbearable, OVERALL - good topical battle, but I gotta give this to Dabatos, he had a better flow for topic.. and a better way of typing it. Ele your shit was iight, you just need to work on some more creative shit. vote - Dabatos Return the fav... http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=156859 |
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Voted For: Elemental Soul
this was a very close battle.... vocab was good from both of u....good multis from both of u.....elemental had more inners which i thought made it a lot more interesting to read....structure was good from both of u....but i thought elements was a bit better......i felt that some of dabatos lines were stretched.....dabatos was easier to understand but i thought that it was a bit too easy and understandable....it was too simple......honestly element...when i read this....it was like i was reading one of the best pieces of work i have ever read....it was truly a great verse....not that dabatos wasnt good....but i just think that element got him pretty easy on this one... |
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Voted For: Dabatos
v/dabatos i think this was a very intresting topic an u both went on about it good but i think dabato had this one cause he had more vocab an wordplay i liked elemental's also it was close but dabato gets tha win, no hate son return the favor.................. |
yo dabatos stop acting surprised when someone votes for me nigga......at least i spelled plague right. this battle is pretty close so just keep it cool.whoever wins,wins.
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Voted For: Elemental Soul
yo Elemetal Soul gets this one hands down. He had a better flow and a nive vocabulary. his was also easier to read so he gets my vote. Dabatos had a nice flow but it was simple. No Hate just an honest vote. |
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Voted For: Dabatos
dabtos i thought urs was more complex overall i felt es's verse had quite a few played lines i was feeling ur structure i like how u broke it into seperate peices and ur lines were really ever i personally think ur ending was great It's been 1 year since that event, and half the country has been wiped out... I have no family alive now, and geting rid of this disease i have high doubts... At times I cry about, how i could of saved my family from takin that shot... Because that shot was givin by terrorists, which was never to be stopped... however i wasnt really feeling this part right herer After two more months of fear, it's said no people has had the infection.... Death rates have lessend, but 2 be sure, everyone must get an anti-injection.. elemental soul ur verse was good ur flow was better than dabatos but i felt hers was more complex more creative and had a better structure this line was really good nice multis flowed goo and its really true Stuck in poverty,causing the animosity of honesty, So obviously,our only hopes are winnin the lottery, i wasnt feelin this line its really played I want the ones who struggle to unite,fight for your piece, I want Crips to shake the hands of Bloods,cutting your leash, ok so im gonna give it to dabatos es had a better flow but thats about it his lines were played dabtos was more creative her structure was better also but good battle to both vote - Dabatos |
Voted For: Dabatos
story - definitely dabatos.. had the killer story, ES didnt really have one vocab - ES flow - tie.. both were pretty good.. not perfect tho imagery - dabatos.. perfect imagery overall: both came well in this one, but dabatos just came crazy nice.. perfect imagery and story-telling.. reminded me of Immortal Technique.. and thats a HUGE compliment.. so keep it up both of you.. V/Dabatos |
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