Plutonium vs String9487
 

Battle Rules:

10 bars max
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 100

Check in by: 11-15-04 at 06:46 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

is it 10 bars as in 20 lines?

and anyways, good luck! :)

yea 10 bars= 20 lines ------------------------------

String9487 has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-12-04 06:57 PM.

Plutonium has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-12-04 07:00 PM.

You're done,

Like the weather...the chance of you winning is vain
like if you sold Strepsils...noone would choke in pain
your game...giving the word "failure" embarressment
claim you off da wack...when theres no comparisons
don't be arrogant...your ego's the size of a elephant
he even think showin' his 26-19 record is triumphant
I destroy you for enjoyment, so kid please don't fight
"Da Bury's Finest", that's why his corpse remains ripe
kid's not abstract...but you can't class him as object
kid's wack...no wonder Fashion's OPTIONAL SUBJECT!
fact is this kid sucks, I'll destroy him with just a fork
who's using strings...a sewing machine does the work
kid's a jerk...I'll rip him up and fucking sew him again
the only highlight of his verse is when he just began
the string's gonna snap...it don't matter how I say it
got numbers in his name...it's his wackness calculated
to ranking 9487...that's more than RV's inactive heads
name's string...no wonder he's hanging on by a thread
he can't go far in his career...even if it's his big dream...
CAUSE NOONE KNOWS HOW LONGS A PIECE OF STRING!!!

check check 1,2, 1,2...STRING IS IN THE BUILDING

this nigga just a Mule, cuz all u do is pack shit
neva heard ya single, guess u aint "radio"active
eh yo when them rifle's click
they have yo ass scramblin for safety like Michael Vick
I'll snipe this prick, got a vest thats twice as thick
but them things gon hit u, cuz lifes a bitch
im aimin at ya "bean", but nigga this aint Goya
u a ""gifted" rapper cuz i wouldnta paid for ya
Dis g wanna bitch, u can recieve a hunnid clips
those rhymes so bad, they make Stevie wonda flinch(ooouch)
dog u trippin, u need to get u some AK right
i spit Acid bars, make Plutonium, decay to Half-Life*
there aint nothin to u, u aint gon pop that
drop that, u just a pussey in a jock strap askin for is cock back(ooooh)
rap verse allowin hoes n sluts, wit no flows n such
wit crippled ass flows like they hold a crutch
unlike Jay, and Kells u the Less Of Both Worlds
n nebody that reads ya text, is gon hurl
u can exit now... , but u wont b right back
cuz u like that, in the room gettin spanked by Mike Jack..HAAAAAAAAA


*just in case yall didnt do well in chemistry, decaying is what is meant by a radioactive element becoming inactive, and half-life is how long it takes

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Voted For: Plutonium



Like the weather...the chance of you winning is vain
like if you sold Strepsils...noone would choke in pain
7/10
your game...giving the word "failure" embarressment
claim you off da wack...when theres no comparisons
5/10
don't be arrogant...your ego's the size of a elephant
he even think showin' his 26-19 record is triumphant
4/10...2 forced here
I destroy you for enjoyment, so kid please don't fight
"Da Bury's Finest", that's why his corpse remains ripe
6/10
kid's not abstract...but you can't class him as object
kid's wack...no wonder Fashion's OPTIONAL SUBJECT!
5/10...Another forcedone
fact is this kid sucks, I'll destroy him with just a fork
who's using strings...a sewing machine does the work
6/10
kid's a jerk...I'll rip him up and fucking sew him again
the only highlight of his verse is when he just began
5/10
the string's gonna snap...it don't matter how I say it
got numbers in his name...it's his wackness calculated
6/10
to ranking 9487...that's more than RV's inactive heads
name's string...no wonder he's hanging on by a thread
6/10
he can't go far in his career...even if it's his big dream...
CAUSE NOONE KNOWS HOW LONGS A PIECE OF STRING!!!
5/10

Punches were a lil simple and plain
ya personals were good
ya wordplay and structure is wha won u this





this nigga just a Mule, cuz all u do is pack shit
neva heard ya single, guess u aint "radio"active
6/10
eh yo when them rifle's click
they have yo ass scramblin for safety like Michael Vick
2/10,,Played and stretched
I'll snipe this prick, got a vest thats twice as thick
but them things gon hit u, cuz lifes a bitch
2/10
im aimin at ya "bean", but nigga this aint Goya
u a ""gifted" rapper cuz i wouldnta paid for ya
4/10
Dis g wanna bitch, u can recieve a hunnid clips
those rhymes so bad, they make Stevie wonda flinch(ooouch)
4/10
dog u trippin, u need to get u some AK right
i spit Acid bars, make Plutonium, decay to Half-Life*
6/10
there aint nothin to u, u aint gon pop that
drop that, u just a pussey in a jock strap askin for is cock back(ooooh)
5/10
rap verse allowin hoes n sluts, wit no flows n such
wit crippled ass flows like they hold a crutch
2/10
unlike Jay, and Kells u the Less Of Both Worlds
n nebody that reads ya text, is gon hurl
2/10
u can exit now... , but u wont b right back
cuz u like that, in the room gettin spanked by Mike Jack..HAAAAAAAAA
4/10..Mike jackson lines played

Ya punches were tryin 2 hit but didnt deliver
ya wordplay was non existent
ya meta;s were ok
ya personals werent there
kinda like it was jus a freestlye

Plu 4 better punches and wordplay

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Voted For: Plutonium

plutonium - u had a nice verse..you had a lot of personals in it and you had some good punches..your structure was definitely on point seeing as though all ur lines are even..you had a good flow..your opener was kinda weak but you built up and finished it with a good closer..

fav. line -I destroy you for enjoyment, so kid please don't fight
"Da Bury's Finest", that's why his corpse remains ripe

overall - 8/10




String9487 - i've seen other battle where you came harder than this..you didnt really have any hard hitting punches that caught my eye..all of your (ooooh)'s and (oouch)'s messed it up because i really dont wanna know what you think sounds good..you had some good wordplay with the radio line..and your personal wasnt too great...

fav line- this nigga just a Mule, cuz all u do is pack shit
neva heard ya single, guess u aint "radio"active

overall 6/10




vote - Plutonium

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Voted For: String9487

aight u won this battle....

plu-okay your verse was good..punches werent that hard though......structure was good.......vocab was aiight coulda been better to me..you had okay personals...you had okay flow not any multi's....which was dissapointing..i feel oyu coulda been beter

string-damn man i never herd of you before but u had really good flow man....your punches were very humerous...which is good i like humer in a verse...your personals were pretty good.....you had an off structure kinda.....you had multi's which i liked and you had good vocab also
good drop man

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Voted For: String9487

Like the weather...the chance of you winning is vain
like if you sold Strepsils...noone would choke in pain
first lines decent, not worded very good, second line is garbage Ive never heard of the word strepsil, cuz it doesn't exist in the english language. so the punch is non existant
your game...giving the word "failure" embarressment
claim you off da wack...when theres no comparisons
first line would be decent setup if it went somewhere but second line makes little sense punch is weak and its forced rhyme.
don't be arrogant...your ego's the size of a elephant
he even think showin' his 26-19 record is triumphant
realy forced rhyme, decent first line again but again the punch is weak, its decent for the fact its personal but could be improved.
I destroy you for enjoyment, so kid please don't fight
"Da Bury's Finest", that's why his corpse remains ripe
decent punch, its not very hard hitting but decent.... very simple rhyme scheme and rhyming fight with ripe is amatuer.
kid's not abstract...but you can't class him as object
kid's wack...no wonder Fashion's OPTIONAL SUBJECT!
crap rhyme better scheme than before but very simple rhymes, this is probly the most clever bar though so props for that, it was a weird punch but creative.
fact is this kid sucks, I'll destroy him with just a fork
who's using strings...a sewing machine does the work
o.k now your bars starting to look better, kinda funny punch here.
kid's a jerk...I'll rip him up and fucking sew him again
the only highlight of his verse is when he just began
weak punch here... it was goin good up until that.
the string's gonna snap...it don't matter how I say it
got numbers in his name...it's his wackness calculated
lol, thats a funny personal- I liked this.
to ranking 9487...that's more than RV's inactive heads
name's string...no wonder he's hanging on by a thread
decent punch, probly could have been worded better but you still goin personal so it helps.
he can't go far in his career...even if it's his big dream...
CAUSE NOONE KNOWS HOW LONGS A PIECE OF STRING!!!
wow this is probly the wackest closer Ive seen in a long time... the punch goes no-where, the first doesn't setup well-- boo.


this nigga just a Mule, cuz all u do is pack shit
neva heard ya single, guess u aint "radio"active
nice wordplay, better opener than your opponents, strong rhyme.
eh yo when them rifle's click
they have yo ass scramblin for safety like Michael Vick
first line kinda short, you probly could have thrown some wordplay or something in there to set up better, decent second line but I think a better setup would have really helped the punch.
I'll snipe this prick, got a vest thats twice as thick
but them things gon hit u, cuz lifes a bitch
kinda filler... sound better in an audio battle as far as text its not very clever.
im aimin at ya "bean", but nigga this aint Goya
u a ""gifted" rapper cuz i wouldnta paid for ya
decent wordplay, nothing stellar, but decent- solid rhymes again.
Dis g wanna bitch, u can recieve a hunnid clips
those rhymes so bad, they make Stevie wonda flinch(ooouch)
decent punch, but stevie wonda kinda played concept line
dog u trippin, u need to get u some AK right
i spit Acid bars, make Plutonium, decay to Half-Life*
again personal on the name, decent job, but could have been worded better.. probly weakest rhyme in ur verse so far.
there aint nothin to u, u aint gon pop that
drop that, u just a pussey in a jock strap askin for is cock back(ooooh)
this was doo doo for text... i dont wanna read bout any gun reference in a text battle on i-net, kinda filler bar all in all punch wasn't very clever it just rhymed well.
rap verse allowin hoes n sluts, wit no flows n such
wit crippled ass flows like they hold a crutch
said flows twice in the same bar, if this was worded better it'd be a nice punch here.... decent as is.
unlike Jay, and Kells u the Less Of Both Worlds
n nebody that reads ya text, is gon hurl
blah... filler
u can exit now... , but u wont b right back
cuz u like that, in the room gettin spanked by Mike Jack..HAAAAAAAAA
another weak closer...... you started stronger than ur opponent but fell off at the end dramatically with played concepts.... Ima vote String but barely, both had some weak points and some strong points but at least String wasn't inventing words...1

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Voted For: Plutonium

damn..... plutonium takes this!

man check that structure..... so even damn!

punches..... plutonium!!!
to ranking 9487...that's more than RV's inactive heads
name's string...no wonder he's hanging on by a thread
he can't go far in his career...even if it's his big dream...
CAUSE NOONE KNOWS HOW LONGS A PIECE OF STRING!!!

those were very nice!
mmmm string you had a few nice punches.... not going to paste them cause plutonium cleary won this.....
flow was amazing by plutonium.... string..your bars are not even and you syllables are bouncy.... straighten your shit up man!

anyway... vote=plutonium!
return the favour aight and drop a vote on one of the battles below k... thx

cot damnit i wish people would stop hatin on my structure uppin for votes

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Voted For: Plutonium

string9487 :

this nigga just a Mule, cuz all u do is pack shit
neva heard ya single, guess u aint "radio"active
^^dope opener 9/10
eh yo when them rifle's click
they have yo ass scramblin for safety like Michael Vick
^^lol good bar nice consistency 7/10
I'll snipe this prick, got a vest thats twice as thick
but them things gon hit u, cuz lifes a bitch
^^good shit nice multies 8/10
im aimin at ya "bean", but nigga this aint Goya
u a ""gifted" rapper cuz i wouldnta paid for ya
^^weak 4/10
Dis g wanna bitch, u can recieve a hunnid clips
those rhymes so bad, they make Stevie wonda flinch(ooouch)
^^ lol good meta decent punch 6/10
dog u trippin, u need to get u some AK right
i spit Acid bars, make Plutonium, decay to Half-Life*
^^ i like the concept and meta 7/10
there aint nothin to u, u aint gon pop that
drop that, u just a pussey in a jock strap askin for is cock back(ooooh)
^^good multies 6/10
rap verse allowin hoes n sluts, wit no flows n such
wit crippled ass flows like they hold a crutch
^^decent bar good multies 6/10
unlike Jay, and Kells u the Less Of Both Worlds
n nebody that reads ya text, is gon hurl
^^just no 1/10
u can exit now... , but u wont b right back
cuz u like that, in the room gettin spanked by Mike Jack
^^wack 2/10

overall : 56/ 100 (56%)

Plutonium:

Like the weather...the chance of you winning is vain
like if you sold Strepsils...noone would choke in pain
^^good meta decent opener 7/10
your game...giving the word "failure" embarressment
claim you off da wack...when theres no comparisons
^^lmao good shit 9/10
don't be arrogant...your ego's the size of a elephant
he even think showin' his 26-19 record is triumphant
^^doesnt really rhyme but i see what u mean 4/10
I destroy you for enjoyment, so kid please don't fight
"Da Bury's Finest", that's why his corpse remains ripe
^^decent meta good punch 6/10
kid's not abstract...but you can't class him as object
kid's wack...no wonder Fashion's OPTIONAL SUBJECT!
^^wack 3/10
fact is this kid sucks, I'll destroy him with just a fork
who's using strings...a sewing machine does the work
^^lol good shit 8/10
kid's a jerk...I'll rip him up and fucking sew him again
the only highlight of his verse is when he just began
^^again began dont rhyme 0 points 0/10
the string's gonna snap...it don't matter how I say it
got numbers in his name...it's his wackness calculated
^^dopest bar of your verse good flow 10./10
to ranking 9487...that's more than RV's inactive heads
name's string...no wonder he's hanging on by a thread
^^dam hot 8/10
he can't go far in his career...even if it's his big dream...
CAUSE NOONE KNOWS HOW LONGS A PIECE OF STRING!!!
^^just stop 3/10

overall : 58/100 (58%)

v/ Plu

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Voted For: String9487

Pretty Close Battle:The Factors Of Thi:String Your Vocabulary Was Decent Andvanced A Little But Your Structure Wasnt To Decent...Alot Of Stertched Lines And Short Lines Didnt Make It Look Decent Punches Was Alright.......Personals Hmmm....
Over All This Was On Vocab And Punches.......8/10

Economics:
Very Good Structure It Was Decent I Liked How All The Lines Lined Up......Vocabulary Was Some What Basic Some What Not....Punches Was Decent And Personasl Was Alright........WordPlay Was There And Was Also Decent.......OverAll I Give It A 7.5/10

Reason:
Vocabulary Was Kind Of Basic.....Personasl Wasnt Too Good But It Was There And Punches I Wasnt Feeling.......

Vote/String

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Voted For: String9487

String remindss me of Nore for some reason. LOL

Pluto- you didnt really have any punches, really needa work on that, stop focusing on structure because it is fucking your verse up day after day.The nameplays you did were iight but did'nt hit very hard and definatly werent creative.
String-stop talking about guns. aother than that you brought some good shit, it had a lot of multis and flow, even though it didnt help and a couple punches were good especially the half-life one, creative shit.and also stop making comment after "hot" bars and stop using quotations.

V/String

RTF.....or I will kill your mom by putting a skin eating virus in her pussy

ya dig?

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