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Conclusion vs Limited Edition
Battle Rules:
16 - 20 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 200 Posts to Vote Topic: Burning to Death Good luck. Minimum posts to vote: 200 Check in by: 11-13-04 at 02:55 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Limited Edition has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-13-04 02:25 PM.
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Conclusion has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-13-04 02:26 PM.
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Checkin In...........................
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...I'm Burning...
The way shit is fated, we sometimes take life overated... We don't want to face it, but life's salty sometimes when we taste it The anger within, you can sense when the danger begins... People fuck wit you, have no trust in you, the flame seaps through the skin You just wish you could die, sometimes you can't survive... Everything around you a haze, a blaze, it's like your burning alive You can see the burst, of the flame, it symbolizes your pain... Oh God it hurts, nothin can save you, pray for the grave, it's insane Nothing can save you, not even the talent God himself gave you... You're just a brave fool, fuck it, your a puppet, just a stage tool Hopes and dreams? Forget it, you just ain' nothin just admit it... You don't want to live it, but it's hard when your own mom said it Don't get it twisted, happiness is somethin' truly gifted... Until the day, I pray, the tormenters' opinion that abused me shifted You don't really care, when people burn, people stare... I'm not fussy, I'm not ever fuckin' lyin, trust me...I was there... |
Inferno Blossom's and Dance;s Around My Child's Bedroom
Intense Heat Lashe's My Face, Could This Be My Doom? |
Voted For: Limited Edition
klimeted won, no reason for a vote cuz the other guy dropped two weak bars, opener and closer= le flow=le punch=le meta4=le nuff said for real |
get at mine yall......................................... :thumbup: ................
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Sorry for the late post go bitch about this and get me DQ if you want...
Scene: There is a Fire in your Household and you try to save your daughter... Inferno Blossom's and Dance;s Around My Child's Bedroom Intense Heat Lashe's My Face, Could This Be My Doom? My Offspring is Crying, Begging for another Pop at Life If I Prevail, The Stress and Memory will lead me to Befriend a Knife From The Depth's Of Hell, Satan's Produce has Rose Above The White Light's Image Fade's In, Pure like the Wing's Of a Dove The Situation is Adrenaline Packed, this is a Self-Belief Test But what if the Fume's Get at Me, Will i be Put To Rest? Smoke Plume's Into My Lung's, Bounce Around My Inside's I Need to Save Her, She could be a benefit to Mankind The Fire Tounge's Lick at my Feet i can't stand the Pain Heat Put's Pressure on My Cranium, Conscience and Window Pane's I'm Only 5 foot away from my Daughter, and i can already feel My End Eithier that or I'll be Deteriorated for life, a Life Support on which I'll Depend Toxicating Fume's Plough into my heart Life force and Soul Maybe this is my Fate, Only God Has Lease Of Life...and Control But My Fate has Abruptly Stood Before Me, The Smoke Become's To Thick The Burning Fire Has Diminished My Family, Life, Faith Quick............ |
No I ain' gonna bitch...don't worry about it. Uppin' votes for this bitch...we'll return favors.
Good luck. |
Voted For: Limited Edition
omg umm limited took this all the way with better wordplay and jus the structure and concept was hitting and plus your comp didnt even drop a full verse wha tha hell happend |
I don't think you understand topical's that much ....he had a good verse but my vocab and wordplay was better...Oh well
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2-0 for me...uppin' this shit.............................
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damn
returned honest votes are nice these dayz |
Uppin' for votes on this shit...Favors will be returned...
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Uppin' for fuck sakes...favors will be returned.....
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Fuck uppin' on this shit yet again...come on lets get them votes poppin'...
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This was feedback posted for Limited Edition
Limited Edition got this one for more lines and a better flow. No Hate. Just Honest Feedback.
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Uppin'...fuck this has been slept on haven't been on for 5 days and still no votes...
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This was feedback posted for Conclusion
Alright I was gonna vote on this but whats up with
your verse C ? just outta interest why didnt you get this closed... What up LE long time man stay up 1~ |
Fuck this is bein slept on...fuck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This was feedback posted for Limited Edition
Inferno Blossom's and Dance;s Around My Child's Bedroom
Intense Heat Lashe's My Face, Could This Be My Doom? ^^^^^^^^^^ WAS THAT IT......READ THA RULE'Z BUT I LIKE THIS BAR.......VERY CREATIVE.........AND GOOD IMAGINARY.....THATS AN THOUGHTFUL BAR......The way shit is fated, we sometimes take life overated... We don't want to face it, but life's salty sometimes when we taste it The anger within, you can sense when the danger begins... People fuck wit you, have no trust in you, the flame seaps through the skin You just wish you could die, sometimes you can't survive... Everything around you a haze, a blaze, it's like your burning alive You can see the burst, of the flame, it symbolizes your pain... Oh God it hurts, nothin can save you, pray for the grave, it's insane Nothing can save you, not even the talent God himself gave you... You're just a brave fool, fuck it, your a puppet, just a stage tool Hopes and dreams? Forget it, you just ain' nothin just admit it... You don't want to live it, but it's hard when your own mom said it Don't get it twisted, happiness is somethin' truly gifted... Until the day, I pray, the tormenters' opinion that abused me shifted You don't really care, when people burn, people stare... I'm not fussy, I'm not ever fuckin' lyin, trust me...I was there... ^^^^^^^^^^^ CHEA GOOD FLOW.....NICE IMAGINARY........AND GOOD CREATIVITY CONCLUSION- DAMN~! LIMIT STOP PUTTING 200 POST JEEZE'Z ANYWAY.......LIMIT EDITION GOT DIS HANDS DOWN CAUSE OF.........MORE.........CREATIVITY......IMAGINARY. ......GOOD FLOW..........AND MORE THOUGHTFUL........ CONCLUSION- DONT WRITE 1 BAR READ THE RULE'Z OK BEFORE U POST YA VERSE AIIIIIGHT BUT THAT 1 BAR DID ALMOST HAD ALL THE TOPICAL QUALITIES....NICE BAR~! |
Voted For: Limited Edition
The way shit is fated, we sometimes take life overated... We don't want to face it, but life's salty sometimes when we taste it tHATS THE line that won it... LOL v/ Limited Edition.. Conclusion....u need 2 elevate...as a battle verse that was WEAK AND U COULDNT EVEN FOLLOW DIRECTIONS 2 lines On a 16-20.. |
You Stupid Fuck's, Why Are You Not Reading My Entire Verse? I Had To Post Two Line's Cos I Would Have Missed The D-Line, Whore's.
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Uppin' for some more votes on dis bitch...
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Voted For: Limited Edition
i vote for limited because he followed the rules....... |
Uppin' for some more votes...favors will be returned...
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Voted For: Limited Edition
Aii first of all if your Gonna battle check out the rules LOL But N e way its very clear to see that Limited Edition Has this one bcuz he HAS punchez and He HAS personals and he HAS a verse LOL Im guessiin You didnt mean to post one bar im i riight? n e way Limited and conclusion Yall RTF!!! ********************************************** Plz Vote In My Battles Atleast Two Plz I Dont Have N e Votes At All Plz Do Me The Favor ********************************************** |
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