truley missed woosh & Emma J
 

i know ive posted this b4 but ive lenghed it & me n mi gal made it a collab so plz dont sleep on this yall.

life is nothin, livin in fear, unknowning if any1 will know me 2moro,
but 2 moro ill rember u/

everyday i rember the times we had/
wen u went my life went mad/
2moro my love 4 grows stronger/
but i know that i w8 longer/
wen my life ends i know i can say i missed u/
made sure know 1 dissed u/
my soul will c god but not as i am now but as the way he made me/
people say that i want 2 be...../

{emma J}
wot is life?/
life is a guessing game gessin wen we will all die/
life is a skool learn wot u can/
life is tautre life can b wet life can b dry/

rembering the morning after/
i cried worse than a baby/
& wen where mayb ull have missed me 2 mayb!/
battling my way my mind is more confused/
wen we leaft each other i did my body harm by abused/
wen i look through old albums of us 5 always havin fun/
a pocket thresh hold i rember wen me nu fired tha gun/
as the wind wistles ur name im mind & soul weep/
i rember wen we took that leap from boy hood 2 men/

{emma J}
wot is the point/
the point is 2 live/
the point is 2 rember the good things/
the point is makes sure u dont just take make usre u give/

im on this rap thing more now/
but im rappin my h8s & how i miss u, im dedicate my life 2 u/
i wish i would have done more wiv u smoke sum weed/
but i done a few things but ur life will still be my main lead/
momma sed ill meet u again i hope we do/
& then i can say wot we went through/
but untill then ill have 2 breath ur name/
R.I.P my friend & im gonna stick in this game/

uppin

This is nice man...

Imagery was real good, flow was, for tha most part, on point & smooth...

Concept was heavy, easy to relate too...

Good shit overall...

Impressive work fella..

Keep it comen..

Peace n god bless..

thnx man uppin people

BRILL
 

Im really feeling this. I felt da emotions man keep up da gud work

thnx man i really apreciated that uppin 4 sum more

aiight drop.... keep it comin..
one

thnx very much holla up @ this odnt sleep ya'll

stop sleepin on the

Nice piece wooshy, vocab could be upped more, try busting on the cypher page, it'll help...
Like the imagery, i noticed a lot of your shits that type of rhyme so try experimenting and doing a piece that isnt relevant from you, like a made-up incident or something, it's be nice to see you pull off some new type shit, one!!!

thnx man ive started 2 get into chyper but thanx much apericated. uppin 4 more votes

im off so uppin

uppin cmon

damn sorry it took me so long to check out ya piece havent been on ina while..

I definitly was feelin it, good concept, and I like the way you ended it.. It had good emotion and pretty good flow... try using more similes and metaphors to add more to the imagry...

overall this was a nice piece though.. Keep spitin and elevatin...


...Peace...

This was decent, a good concept and the emotion was presented well... There were some powerful lines in here and it was strong in belief, thats what caught my eye the most... Saw some multies involved, lacced internal rhymes but the rhythm stayed on point mos of the time... The wordplay lacced, but I know thats not where you were coming from, some metaphors woulda been nice in this though... Vocab again was lacced, but you delivered the message that you were trying to say... At the end it was simplistic, aint a bad verse though, keep spitting and elevating, im feeling the concept...

Peez...

thanx man ill work on afew metaphors 4 it but thnx 4 replys.

uppin cmon peeps

cmon uppin