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It Takes Time To Make Shit Rhyme But It Aint A Crime Dying For Lying/
But My Mind Is Sleeping Height To Nine So Im Trying To Figure How's Working/
Sheet Of Paper On My Desk,My Mind Is Gonna Accomplish The Rest/
Pencil In My Hand Ready To Writt,But The Light In My Head Wont Shine Bright/
Signt,But I Might Try To Hide Cuz Of My Dumb Shit That I Post Is Like.../
Now About My Personal Life,Just Thinking About It Teres A Tear From My Eye/
Behind Teres A Story Who Hide's,About Me A Letter And To Help Us ...A Knife/
What I Talk Is All About Lies Or Rumours,Me Myself And I Are Ennemy's/
Double Personality's,Wich Dosint Help Me To Get Out Of The Emergency/
S'only A Crazy Dream Each Night And Wake Up Almost About To Cry/
Lets Stop This Now Before I Do Something Bad Enough To reach The Sky/

Peep This PLease...Just Forget The Thing About Rv Member's That I Posted not Long Ago

please give me feedback!

Shit.................and That's Word....:)

More feedback peeps

yo. dont worry i aint dat kind a dude/
but imma hustler dat hav feens on da rock like a bramma bull/
i dont know who imma whine up shoot/
but if my burner confused den i hav to let my llama choose/
so i swear im like hannibal/
cuz da way i be eating these fake rappers niggas swear imma cannibal/
i'll grab da hammer fool\
den clap at u n make u disappear like abra-kadabra fool/
niggas hating now cuz we role in hummers/
cum in my hood dog i'll show u snow in da summer/
i eat every track cuz my flo is like a runner/
so my bank account got 7 0's in da number/
i'm stucked in da hood wit my mind on these streets/
i'll put ur brain on da curve n leave ur mind on these streets/
c whatever u want its mines in these streets/
put sum braces on so u dont get outta line when u speak/ M.E.R.C.Y.

yo u wanna loose to a battle

just shut the fuck up i want some feedback not some shit like that

this go to da feds u need to stop trippen cops/
cuz i aint gon never stop slangin pitching rocks/
so listen ock, keep on snitching n watch/
n c if red dots wont be all over u like chicken pox/

cock sucker , man lover, femal hater,
i only want feedback you motha fucker,
just battle someone else,you better,

Now feedback please and get the fuck out of here Mercy

wat happen to ur bars this cat got ur cat got ur tongue

yo stop poppin all da shit fr canada
now tell wat feedback means cuz i jus got introduces to this website

feedback is when you want peeps to tell you how was your text or your song

so NOW can i have REAL feedback please

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need work on ya RYHME SCHEME N STRUCTURE..
WORK ON YA CONTENT IN YA BARS N IT'LL READ BETTER ..

thanks man finaly someone ,,,ill work on it

DaZ is right, you need to work on ya rhyme scheme and structure big time homie...

the / after every bar dont cut it, shorten ya bars, dont stretch them out so much and also work on ya rhyming. overall i think you could have some potential if you work at it and dont stop elevating... dont wory, youll get there... PM me if you want help elevating and id be glad to give ya some pointers. ~1~

"It Takes Time To Make Shit Rhyme But It Aint A Crime Dying For Lying/
But My Mind Is Sleeping Height To Nine So Im Trying To Figure How's Working/"
LYING AND WORKING DON'T RHYME.U WERE KINDA OFF FROM THE START.I GOT THE JIST OF IT BUT U GOTTA MAKE IT SO I DON'T HAVE TO WORK SO HARD TO DO SO.
UR WORDS DIDN'T FLOW TOGETHER WELL EITHER.I ENJOYED READING THIS BUT U DIDN'T GIVE THIS UR ALL.NEEDS IMPROVEMENT.5/10.KEEP EM COMIN'.

aight u strectching ya lines too much...

you should have two rymes lines to complete a bar it dont sound like a rap it sounds more like poetry...

i got WHAT U SAYING THO

thanks too everyone...i got to admit that it looks like poetry :s..anyway thanks too all of ya