Inception vs Jay-SmileZ
 

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10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-16-04 at 09:18 PM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

Inception has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-16-04 08:48 PM.

Jay-SmileZ has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-16-04 08:53 PM.

say you hold loose change in ya pocket while i find 4 or 5 dimes
but beef son ima alwayz have my handz on 2 nines like a clock broke at 9:45
dawg if you was rappin to ya heart only way you spittin acoss a beat
you aint gutta,so only tyme you nice on tha block is helpin old ladies across tha street
IF YOU WORK AT IT YOU TOO COULD B AS GOOD AS ME
DAMN EVEN IF I MOVED OUTTA LAS VEGAS YOU WOULD STYLL NV
Ignore Precision...Sikz Bout To *End Your Beginnin* Like *Jealous Sniperz*
The Desire To Fire Iz Minez...You'd Rather *Puzh Around Kartz* Lyke *Homelezz Recyclerz*
First Place Is Laced..I'm Great, You "Off Balance" Like "Fagz In Skates"
Image Of Hate..I Been Ill, You "Inherited Sickness" Like "Diseased Generic Traits"

YeLL "ROOKIE DOWN" OddS CompliED even Ya "BookIE FroWNS"
you BETTER be VD Clean CAUSE I"m gonna eat this "PUSSY OUT"// 1)

"LOOK IT NOW" as you "AWAKEN TO SEE" ya ass "DRAPING YA SHEETS"/
but U an YA rymes is like hobos in winter "BEGGING FOR HEAT"//2

"RaiD this FUCK" open his "chest up" to show his "CHARADE STUFFED"/
Even if this VIRGIN was dropped in war he still wouldnt get "LAID for BUSH"//3 (President BusH wordplay)

"AFRAID to LOOK" only time he spits from da heart is when I "SLIT'em for SCARS"/
Only time ya INNER FLOW moving places is when U "PEE IN THEM CARS"//4 (Inner Flow-pissing heh)

This TART is ahead of hip hop cause he always has his "BACK on THAT"/
He "HALF ASSES" his rymes an yet he still manages to take a "CRAP on RAP"......//5

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Voted For: Jay-SmileZ

here is a full brake down...
INCEPTION:

say you hold loose change in ya pocket while i find 4 or 5 dimes
but beef son ima alwayz have my handz on 2 nines like a clock broke at 9:45
took me a sec to look at my watch N get the punch NICE...

dawg if you was rappin to ya heart only way you spittin acoss a beat
you aint gutta,so only tyme you nice on tha block is helpin old ladies across tha street
1st line i was feeling it, 2ed went weak....

IF YOU WORK AT IT YOU TOO COULD B AS GOOD AS ME
DAMN EVEN IF I MOVED OUTTA LAS VEGAS YOU WOULD STYLL NV
ummm ok?

Ignore Precision...Sikz Bout To *End Your Beginnin* Like *Jealous Sniperz*
The Desire To Fire Iz Minez...You'd Rather *Puzh Around Kartz* Lyke *Homelezz Recyclerz*
1st line nah i wasnt feeling, 2ed was nice but this whole bar could of been re-word- it better to hit harder...

First Place Is Laced..I'm Great, You "Off Balance" Like "Fagz In Skates"
Image Of Hate..I Been Ill, You "Inherited Sickness" Like "Diseased Generic Traits"
1st line was so so ok, 2ed was nice N a preety good ending..

all around nice verse some bars was weak most were good some could of been re-worded to hit harder but all aroud not bad 7.3 outta 10...

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jay:

YeLL "ROOKIE DOWN" OddS CompliED even Ya "BookIE FroWNS"
you BETTER be VD Clean CAUSE I"m gonna eat this "PUSSY OUT"// 1)
not a bad opener... kinda nasty...

"LOOK IT NOW" as you "AWAKEN TO SEE" ya ass "DRAPING YA SHEETS"/
but U an YA rymes is like hobos in winter "BEGGING FOR HEAT"//2
decent...

"RaiD this FUCK" open his "chest up" to show his "CHARADE STUFFED"/
Even if this VIRGIN was dropped in war he still wouldnt get "LAID for BUSH"//3 (President BusH wordplay)
1st line ok.. 2ed line WAS FIRE FEELING IT CREATIVE N HARD..
nice shit...

"AFRAID to LOOK" only time he spits from da heart is when I "SLIT'em for SCARS"/
Only time ya INNER FLOW moving places is when U "PEE IN THEM CARS"//4 (Inner Flow-pissing heh)
haha nice hit danm...

This TART is ahead of hip hop cause he always has his "BACK on THAT"/
He "HALF ASSES" his rymes an yet he still manages to take a "CRAP on RAP"......//5

decent ending u could of end it better but NICE VERSe...
hella drop.. PUNCHES WAS GOOD WORD-PLAY WAS SICK, flow was good some places u could of fixed up a little bit N re-wored it but all around tight ass drop..

8.3 outta 10....
good battle fellas

this guy ^ lmao

uppin though.......................

^^ whats so funny about this guy??......................

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this is gonna be open for a while i bet....................

Voted For: Inception

Damn dunny You Came Wit Nice Punches And Wordplay

My Fav Lines..

But beef son ima alwayz have my hands on 2 nines like a clock broke at 9:45 //

you inherited sickness like diseased generic traits //


Ya Shit Was on Point.. Jay Had Alot of Potetal but his verse seemed played to me.


VOTE <<>> Inception

wow the old i vote your battle you vote my battle huh?

this is easily a KO on my win i hate dickriding...i saw the post inception did on your battle kahnShienz

First Of All I Vote How I C Fit, Dumbass.. Your Shit Was Played On the Real..

I Guess I Wont Vote In Battles For People Who Vote In Mine.. }



But This Vote Stays..

Voted For: Inception

v/inception....this was a close battle ....but inception came wit more punchs an multi's wit nice creativity....jay had a good flow but it wasn't as creative an his punchs weren't that hard....but over all it was a good battle...
*return tha favor

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i aint been on in a long minute upp though

This was feedback posted for Jay-SmileZ
 

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Voted For: Jay-SmileZ


Jay SMilez
Good Verse Man You Had Some Decent Punchlines, Vocabulary Was Dope I Liked Ya WordPlay Up In Here Man Nice, Structure Was F'ed Up Though Yo Weerd, Personals Ha Ha This Verse Was Dope Man, Personals Punches WordPlay Vocabulary Only THing Wasn't Here Was Structure

Inception
Decent Verse You Had A Major Rhyme Scheme Here That Was Dope Man, Your Vocab Was Decent A Little Basic But Oh Well, Punches Was Here, I Was Digging Some Not ALl, You Did Have Some Decent Personals Man Weerd, Word Play Was Dope, Good Verse Man Your Structure Was Out To But Yea

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Return The Favor Link In My Signature Man Weerd

Voted For: Inception

I just likes inception better thats all...dont have to explain i just thought your structure was better and i like ur punches more thats all...personally yall blow....But Inception you are much more iller....

Voted For: Inception

this was omse what of a wack battle both of you need to work on strucure you both ahd similer styles but i give this to you becuase you had better multies, both need to work on wordplay alot aswell as metaphores

all of the punches where very weak...just eleavte///

Voted For: Inception

Jay-SmileZ:

Man you lost me at the first sentence, number one, you wRotE iT lIkE tHiS and number to, man you were all over the place, your flow wasn't real soild, I wasn't really diggin that man.

Inception:

"only tyme you nice on tha block is helpin old ladies across tha street"

that shyt was tight man, I laughed at that.

You had it pretty solid, but some of your verses were getting long at some points, it was coo, but I wasn't really diggin that.

Overall you both did good, but theres always room for improvement.