Unfinished Buisness- What happened
 

I really like this, me and wooshy have defintly gota get the audio done

What Happend

The MRB

What the fuck went on here? precious moments remain grasped/
Tight in my fist like most of my life’s just collapsed/
Four years ago i was top, one of the coolest in primary school/
Dain’t realise id become shallow like a toddler’s swimming pool/
But i proved myself wrong, New Freinds? i guess i ain’t as sociable as you/
People you once knew become distant like the hills in yo bedroom window view/
And my status suddenly became Rock Bottom/
The good times, the Joyous nearly all forgotten/
I tried my hardest to fit in with this crowd of sorts/
But rejected, all i had for company was my sick unstable thoughts/
Even though i knew the Lord was with me, sometimes i felt alone/
Gettin jibes thrown at you, then pretending nuthings wrong at home/
Sometimes i’d just explode like Japan in 45/
But others i’d keep my cool wid, or they’d beat me half alive/
And now couple years on, situations complicated like a Quadratic eqaution/
Peeps still think when my names involved it devalus the occasion/
What happened?

Wooshy

it feels like i lossed toach wiv my music/
but then i prduce a rhyme that is so sick/
ive lossed toach in skool grades slip faster than a f1 car/
but my mind come 2 grips wiv tha bitches bra/
my body is losin the battle my soul is gettin hurt/
but im still rhymin tryin 2 keep my mind alert/
i rember 2 years ago i promised id stay in toach/
but everyday my im doin sum8 that makes me thing is this a bit much/
but then i think fuck it im 2 far gone & ive lost all those around me/
but still if i surive this life who are we/
then i dont care wot any 1 thinks cuz im jus gonna still roll on/
my party neva rocked & the titanic still sunk n gone/
im bored off ya'll gettin @ me cuz ive had enuff its bout as borin as ice cube rappin/
but as my shit gets more heat im already thinkin where my next rhyme will be
happenin/
but as my soul gets torn hurt it c love 4 1 thing/ (music)
im the thorn in every1 side im the pain in every1 heart/

The MRB

What happend to us, well we fell apart/
From in touch with ourselves, our feelings, our Heart/
I never realised that this would never reach a conclusion/
Be stuck still on the results, self confidence losing/
I became an Outkast, who at Girls wouldn’t look twice/
While some peeps got the offer at half, I payed the full price/
Woosh started to become a wreck, Physically and academically/
But Hip Hop changed him for the better Mentally/
Now we gotta expand, on the advances we made/
True it may only be 1/2 a step, But Boy i ain’t gonna be slayed/
By the ignorant, the mofos, who made my territory Fire and Brimstone/
But now with the Lord and Woosh on my side, i won’t Battle on alone/
Im gonna try make things happen, my way for the good of he and she/
Imma leave this Killing ground without a scratch or scar on me/
My foes over come, the Hardships so far away/
the victory sign raised, UNFINISHED BUSINESS HERE TO STAY!/
WHAT WILL HAPPEN?//

cmon people holla @ this this is a gr8 rhyme

Damn, you guys improved a lot at the open mic shit since i saw you last!
Tight verse from The MRB, meaningful shit and he's got the vocab on lock...that means in camarac speak, he's showing that he's got the vocab and knows what the words he's saying mean, but he isnt over-doing it just to look like he knows a lot of words y'know? have you guys ever seen an N-Demik open mic piece? He just fills it full of big words to look smart but he's a bitch!!Anyways, MRB came good in both verses, Wooshy, you need to quit using numbers to shorten down words...its annoying! Plus you gotta up your vocab in your verses cuz thats what's letting you down.
Nice drop though kids, keep elevating and help the newbies out when they come wack, cuz they the talent of the future!!!!

thanx man ill work on that its kind of a habbit :( but thnx for the feed bac its much apreaatied (like all the shit u drop) uppin

stop sleepin on this yall

does any1 know wen a gud rhyme is on the open mic ???? cmon read it n reply

im not the one to sleep on someones verse..
and this was a hot verse...it made sense..and shit..
i liked it..the vocab was good...alil bit of wordplay...
not much imagery but it was good...
u niggas did well together...

uppin 4 dem

thnx man

uppin so cmon reply 2 this

yo fuckin holla atch y'a'll, This shit was off the fuckin hook, forreal, this shit was tight man. I saw it in your profile and didn't know if I should check it out, but this shit was real. Keep spittin playas - LiL D'

thnx man so come on peeps holla @ this

cmon uppin

You lots are UK heads, aint noticed theres so many on this board... Keep the UK alive, na'mean... Aight, this is a meaningful drop, it was good in some places, sometimes I werent feeling it... The rhyme scheme for both of ya verses worked well, the internals and multies showed through and this gave you a flawless style and smooth rhythm... The wordplay was aight, some of the lines were hella overplayed though, you gotta come original and knowledgable when dropping wordplay, more metaphors woulda made this piece deeper... Vocab was aight, some places it was used well to its potential, it was working throughout and ya showed a good knowledge... The concept was iLL, thats what I was feeling the mos, something original and comical, keep concepts coming like this, I enjoyed this read... Keep spitting and elevating, and make it U K everyday...

Peez...

thnx manj much aperactied uppin

cmon upppin

I concur...

"Dain’t realise id become shallow like a toddler’s swimming pool/"

I liked that line... just gave me a mental picture I guess...

"but then i think fuck it im 2 far gone & ive lost all those around me/
but still if i surive this life who are we/"

I also liked this bar it had a lot of emotion.... \

I think the two of you did a nice piece together, should try and do more, you seem to compliment each other nicely...
Keep spitin and elevatin...

...Peace...

one word, solid. good drop dawg, keep comin real.

// .01

Y'ALL HELD IT DOWN, BOTH OF Y'ALL....BIG UPS TO THE WOOSH FOR PEEPIN MY DROP, HOLLA

this was a tight post
first time in open mic
raw emotionz
good flow and nice vocab

thnx 4 the replys ye me n mrb know each other so we know each other quite well holla!

cmon uppin

cmon dont sleep yall

FFS DONT SLEEP ON THIS

uppin

up

cmon uppin