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Mentally Ill vs DrasticMeasureZ
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10-LINES No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting G-LUCK Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 11-21-04 at 11:56 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
Mentally Ill has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-21-04 11:30 PM.
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DrasticMeasureZ has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-21-04 11:30 PM.
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fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe--
dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes-- those multis you should use, or at least try thinkin fool-- draz beatin me? he pulled it off.. of his list of things to do-- you couldn't possibly defeat me, ur rap tools weaker-- cuz i'll be droppin D more than nice school teachers-- plus your a fag and you suck, so don't say you a thug-- fakeass-wearin a red shirt doesnt make you a blood-- you've been postin shit lately-beat me thats crazy-- I'ma take u out-cuz i don't need a playbook to play D-- |
YOUR UP FOR ONE KNOCK OUT PUNCH TO YA JAW Nigga think he spittin cold punches but my hottness thaw’s (it) Ya punches aint hitting me cause ur writing on an soft pad My rhymes are like an sharp scissor I’ll excrete ya rhymes to scrap Kid says he’z mentally ill couldn’t be ill if u took so many pills Calla me an quick sand cause iam leavin ya under with yo skillz If u ate an square candy still ya punches couldn’t burt me into stars ( starburst) My words like an painter cause iam using your own blood to create art Like cell-phone ya bars of punches don’t have an signal its unable to reach me Think u ill?…….. liar liar pant’z on fire I’ll give u period pains like an femine |
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Voted For: DrasticMeasureZ
open: D:"YOUR UP FOR ONE KNOCK OUT PUNCH TO YA JAW Nigga think he spittin cold punches but my hottness thaw’s (it)" -Nice meta. Likin it close: D:"Like cell-phone ya bars of punches don’t have an signal its unable to reach me Think u ill?…….. liar liar pant’z on fire I’ll give u period pains like an femine" again, good, on another level. DrasticMeasurez best line: "If u ate an square candy still ya punches couldn’t burt me into stars ( starburst) My words like an painter cause iam using your own blood to create art" this is good aswel Mentaly Ill's: "plus your a fag and you suck, so don't say you a thug-- fakeass-wearin a red shirt doesnt make you a blood--" -Probably the best line. Was all ok tho. Overall: Drastic's verse was real good and Mentally ill didnt match up. His use of personals was good but the verse just seemed weaker, with Drastc using good metaphors aswel as personals. Unlucky Mentally Ill, iv no doubt you can be as good if not better than Drastic but not this time. |
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Voted For: Mentally Ill
YO MAN I GOTTA GIVE DIS SHIT TO U UR FLOW WAS BETTA UR RHYMES WAS BETTA ERTHING U DID WAS BETA EXCEPT U VOCAB...AND U ALSO HAD SOME NICE PUNCHES..BUT YEA THURR U GO Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Mentally Ill
Mentally Ill fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe-- dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes-- Alright Punch, Good Multies 5/10 those multis you should use, or at least try thinkin fool-- draz beatin me? he pulled it off.. of his list of things to do-- First Off, Your Saying Hes Gonna Beat You.. otha Than That This Had Good Multies.. 5/10 you couldn't possibly defeat me, ur rap tools weaker-- cuz i'll be droppin D more than nice school teachers-- Nice Personal, And Good Punch, But Bad Setup 7/10 plus your a fag and you suck, so don't say you a thug-- fakeass-wearin a red shirt doesnt make you a blood-- Um, Missed Personal.. This Wasnt The Greatest 3/10 you've been postin shit lately-beat me thats crazy-- I'ma take u out-cuz i don't need a playbook to play D-- Another Missed Personal, Stayed Good Wit Multies 5/10 -= Your Verse Had Nice Flow, And Nice Multies But Your Punches Wernt Up To Par. =--= Overall <<>> (5/10) =- DrasticmeasureZ YOUR UP FOR ONE KNOCK OUT PUNCH TO YA JAW Nigga think he spittin cold punches but my hottness thaw’s (it) That Was Really Poor Man .. 4/10 Ya punches aint hitting me cause ur writing on an soft pad My rhymes are like an sharp scissor I’ll excrete ya rhymes to scrap Wasnt Feelin this At All But Multies Were Ok 6/10 Kid says he’z mentally ill couldn’t be ill if u took so many pills Calla me an quick sand cause iam leavin ya under with yo skillz Naw Wasnt Feelin This Dun 5/10 If u ate an square candy still ya punches couldn’t burt me into stars ( starburst) My words like an painter cause iam using your own blood to create art Ehh This Was Ok, Better Than Your Rest. 5/10 Like cell-phone ya bars of punches don’t have an signal its unable to reach me Think u ill?…….. liar liar pant’z on fire I’ll give u period pains like an femine Not Good At All 5/10 -= Well This Verse Could Of Been Alot Better, But It Didnt Have Hard Hitting Punches <<>> Overall (5/10) This Battle Came Down To Who Had The Best Line.. And Mentally Ill Took It With.. -==-cuz i'll be droppin D more than nice school teachers-==- Vote<<>> Mentally Ill |
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Voted For: DrasticMeasureZ
YOUR UP FOR ONE KNOCK OUT PUNCH TO YA JAW Nigga think he spittin cold punches but my hottness thaw’s (it) ^^^^no..... didnt like that intro Ya punches aint hitting me cause ur writing on an soft pad My rhymes are like an sharp scissor I’ll excrete ya rhymes to scrap ^^^^first line was nice Kid says he’z mentally ill couldn’t be ill if u took so many pills Calla me an quick sand cause iam leavin ya under with yo skillz ^^^yeah good idea but needed slightly better delivery If u ate an square candy still ya punches couldn’t burt me into stars ( starburst) My words like an painter cause iam using your own blood to create art ^^^yup.... good Like cell-phone ya bars of punches don’t have an signal its unable to reach me Think u ill?…….. liar liar pant’z on fire I’ll give u period pains like an femine ^^^^doesnt rhyme.... and last line wack... but the cellphone one was good flow....was pretty boungy but structure wasnt bad... personals....not really but punches were there.. good verse mentally ill......... fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe-- dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes-- ^^^^encridibly.............. WACK those multis you should use, or at least try thinkin fool-- draz beatin me? he pulled it off.. of his list of things to do-- ^^^^LOL.... i like it you couldn't possibly defeat me, ur rap tools weaker-- cuz i'll be droppin D more than nice school teachers-- ^^^^^no..... plus your a fag and you suck, so don't say you a thug-- fakeass-wearin a red shirt doesnt make you a blood-- ^^^^^no...... you've been postin shit lately-beat me thats crazy-- I'ma take u out-cuz i don't need a playbook to play D-- ^^^^no....... overall mantally ill only had one good line.... otherwise drasticmeasures you win this easlily with a very good verse.....well done... return the favour and drop some votes on the battle on the sig.... thx |
actually i dont have any battles on my sig.... so.... christmas is coming... be good
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This was feedback posted for Mentally Ill
just check'in the poll N how V.T newest member is doing so-far...................................
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Voted For: DrasticMeasureZ
fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe-- dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes-- (weak ass line...5/10) those multis you should use, or at least try thinkin fool-- draz beatin me? he pulled it off.. of his list of things to do-- (weak, way played, no creativity, 5/10) you couldn't possibly defeat me, ur rap tools weaker-- cuz i'll be droppin D more than nice school teachers-- (i know wat u mean, but weak and no flow, 5/10) plus your a fag and you suck, so don't say you a thug-- fakeass-wearin a red shirt doesnt make you a blood-- (decent puch for a NEWB, 4/10) you've been postin shit lately-beat me thats crazy-- I'ma take u out-cuz i don't need a playbook to play D-- (last and best line...but isnt creative...6/10) yo man, u need 2 elevate if you want to run wit guys like drastic...work on punches, creativity, wordplay, and for god sakes, battle people who arent as good.... YOUR UP FOR ONE KNOCK OUT PUNCH TO YA JAW Nigga think he spittin cold punches but my hottness thaw’s (it) (decent opener, could be better, 7/10) Ya punches aint hitting me cause ur writing on an soft pad My rhymes are like an sharp scissor I’ll excrete ya rhymes to scrap (nice bar, good wordplay, and creativity, and metas, 8/10) Kid says he’z mentally ill couldn’t be ill if u took so many pills Calla me an quick sand cause iam leavin ya under with yo skillz (str8 up decent punch, creative, connects and hits 9/10) If u ate an square candy still ya punches couldn’t burt me into stars ( starburst) My words like an painter cause iam using your own blood to create art (feelin that one, 9/10) Like cell-phone ya bars of punches don’t have an signal its unable to reach me Think u ill?…….. liar liar pant’z on fire I’ll give u period pains like an femine (feelin that as well, ecept it doesnt flow right...8/10) drastic your verse was weak compared 2 the shit ive seen you do, so i guess stay elevated, dont let up on shit, and stay str8 up fire...you used good wordplay in ure verse, the punches were all decent, and the flow was ok...the structure seemed a lil bit off tho...vote drastic... |
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i was doin good, then they took a couple votes from me. but i guess it's goin aight |
Voted For: DrasticMeasureZ
IP: YOUR UP FOR ONE KNOCK OUT PUNCH TO YA JAW Nigga think he spittin cold punches but my hottness thaw’s (it) Ya punches aint hitting me cause ur writing on an soft pad My rhymes are like an sharp scissor I’ll excrete ya rhymes to scrap Kid says he’z mentally ill couldn’t be ill if u took so many pills Calla me an quick sand cause iam leavin ya under with yo skillz If u ate an square candy still ya punches couldn’t burt me into stars ( starburst) My words like an painter cause iam using your own blood to create art Like cell-phone ya bars of punches don’t have an signal its unable to reach me Think u ill?…….. liar liar pant’z on fire I’ll give u period pains like an femine 6/10 Not Very Good Verse By DrasticMeasureZ Shit Kinda Feel off at the end and bar 2 and 5 din't even rhyme ------------------------------------------------------------ fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe-- dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes-- those multis you should use, or at least try thinkin fool-- draz beatin me? he pulled it off.. of his list of things to do-- you couldn't possibly defeat me, ur rap tools weaker-- cuz i'll be droppin D more than nice school teachers-- plus your a fag and you suck, so don't say you a thug-- fakeass-wearin a red shirt doesnt make you a blood-- you've been postin shit lately-beat me thats crazy-- I'ma take u out-cuz i don't need a playbook to play D-- 5/10 And Mentally Ill you spit was more basic than DrasticMeasureZ spit But your flow was better Work on comin in wit a stronger verse and get big on vocab |
Voted For: DrasticMeasureZ
fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe-- dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes-- ^very nice opener, but that was basically it.. you started to fall over within your verse.. u had sum decent punches, BUt u didn't come hard enuff my opinion.. DMZ i wasn't feeling ur first bar, u coulda worded that better, the parentheses shit ain't kickin' it, but it was minor, so it didn't have a huge effect on your verse.. i don't like how u used the same word in one line "ill"-his name, couldn't be "ill".. blah but not bad.. the starburst bar was kinda funny, lmfao, with the line using his blood to creat art.. ur last bar didn't rhyme, lol, however u had hard the harder punches in this battle that's why i think u won this one.. ur structure was better sumwhat.. vocab wayy better than mentally ill's only thing is ur choice of rhymin' words, and ur flow sumwhat.. good luck, u won this one.. |
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