JpMoney06 vs lilchiofthachi
 

Battle Rules:

5 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-27-04 at 08:38 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

lilchiofthachi has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-24-04 08:39 PM.

JpMoNeY06 has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-24-04 08:42 PM.

lite me up a cigarette so i can start this show/ready to begin with the illest of ill flows/drop a verse like it ain't nuttin/bitches like you r why they made up the word FRONTIN/to worried bout losin and not winnin/you shoulda known that u were gunna lose from the beginnin/wut u gotta run?/i'll take u and ya crews ass, one by one/i can't be defeated so just face it/betta take ya life and erase it/u can't reach my level of rappin/and yes that was ya gurl i just got done tappin/she was great, she gotta nice ass/do u remember that shit from way back in the past/bitch get on ya knees cause u can't last/ima give u the last blast/this battle is over, face it u suck/maybe next time u'll have better luck

This nigga Jp money think he on my level,
take his honeys and stand tall like a rebel/
This nigga jacks off 2 gay porn on da internet,
poor nigga all his shit at home is a renter set/
i dont think nigga kno he fuckin wit Chi's God,
rhymes creative thats y im editor in tha Squad/
U better post a hot verse if u wanna beat me,
ask ur sergent he gone say u gotta retreat G/
If niggas dont sleep dis battle itll be a Ko,
real cats say Chi's verse cold Jp's not even SoSo

This was feedback posted for lilchiofthachi
 

i had to go wit lilchio cuz of da flow and the way he stuck out his rhymes. jp u need to wrk on da flow and da word choice, fix those and ur set. still my vote gos to lilchio

This was feedback posted for lilchiofthachi
 

lilchiofthachi....um no...... work on your wordplay... checking polls

uppin for votes man for tha 50 character thing u gotta have

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

Second guy wins for his verse being readable. You guys need to learn what a punch is though, at least do flow if you can't throw a punch. Wordplay, wit, etc..

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Seriously wack battle.................................

This was feedback posted for lilchiofthachi
 

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uppin for some more votes i need this bitch closed

honest votes will be returned if u vote on dis battle

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

sorry, but chi takes this hands down.

chi...
you came really simple in this, but your flow was decent and your structure was on point. you had some okay ideas/concepts, but i feel that you didnt capitolize on them properly. some of your verse seemed more like self glorification rather then battling.....be careful with that. work on your punches and personals........vocab wouldnt hurt either.

jp...
sorry bruh, but you came with some played lines. your vocab was bad and your structure was horrible. no offense playboy, but i wasnt really entertained by your piece at all. try working on structure, punches, vocab, multies, flow and personals. drop some pieces in the open mic forum before you jump into battles.....it'll help you to prepare for text battles better. dont let my comments get you down......im only trying to help. hold it down pimp.

oner...

s.v.......c.s.

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

flow chi
rhyming chi
vocab chi
strucutre chi
imagry chi
personal tie
hits chi
opener-closure chi

and hey hit up on my bat in my link iam down one and be honest peace.

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

Voted For: JpMoNeY06

this is feedback for both YOU=WEAK YOUvs.LexiKon=AWINFORME

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

yeh gotta give it to chi he had the overall better verse punches flow everything jp was weak..............see me when you see me niggaz

v/chi

Voted For: JpMoNeY06

yo vote has 2 go 2 money here.......structure wack........flow good punches awesome shit......CHI ur gay ur wack get the fuk outta this site aiight..... money took this cuz of punches good opener.....and overall good shit lack of mulites......but good shit...........dope shit.......chi u lacked evrythin.....wack punches......nuff said......yo return the favour in my battle below against me and diplosive...aiight reurrn the favour

Voted For: JpMoNeY06

Good battle in my eyes. breaks down like this:

JpMoNeY06: Your structure was totally fucked up man. It took me a little while to readit but once i got used to it i liked it defo. Some nice ounces and your flow was real good. Some good personals in this two. -The best advice you can get right now is press return wen you finish a line and start a new line. Peeps wont be voting for you cos some gon be too lazy to read ya shit man. -Kay bro hope that helps ya.

best bar: drop a verse like it ain't nuttin/
bitches like you r why they made up the word FRONTIN
-This was a cool bar, there was more but i liked this loads.


Chi: Was ok man, seemed a lot more basic than ive seen of you tho. vocab was ok but could have been better. Punches were ok but could have definately come harder. Structure was good and flow was aight.

best bar:"This nigga jacks off 2 gay porn on da internet,
poor nigga all his shit at home is a renter set/"
-Cool, some might think its primitive but i liked it.

Stay up peeps.

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

you both suck... read tutorials and learn about wordplay... but im goin here because his structure was easier to read, and he didn't talk about himself as much.

rule #1
dont say your ganna win in a battle
#2
dont say i got flow i got skill, shit like that. self glorification is gay.
#3
and yo cats learn wordplay and personals, neither of ya'll had either, if one of you had just one line of worplay personal, i'd vote for you. incase you dont know what it is........ here an example
on jpmoney...
you a poser this cat aint got no flow, when he says so its funny
cuz when you say u makin papper stacks... its with (J)ust (p)lay money

Voted For: lilchiofthachi

Chi-Alright, nice flow. Punches was "eh" not good. Elevate on punches, wordplay needs elevation too. Try to use some multi'z. The only thing that stood on your verse was flow.




Jpmoney- No hate on you, but your flow was wack. The structure needs to be fixed, the one using right now is messing up the flow. Make it like

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^^ like that. You had some multi'z, but still the flow was fucked.


overall=This battle goes to chi, he had good flow'z. On the otherhand jpmoney didnt have an good structure meaning he didnt have an good flow. Punches on chi side was kinda basic neeeds some elevation and on wordplays. Jp you have good multi'z skillz fam, but i think you need flow to master it. My vote goes to chi for best flow'z.





peace