Chaos vs Rising Sun
 

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No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-02-04 at 01:51 PM

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Chaos has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-29-04 07:51 PM.

yo,rising son

Its Funny How This Nigga Only Comes Out At Day-Cuz He Scared To Come Out At Dark.....
This Kid Got More Skips & Scratches On His Demo-Than His Damn Avatar!!....
Look At You-Your Empty-No Crew In Ya Signature!!.....
This Kid Is So Wack-He Had To Make His Own Fake Link-Cuz No One Bother To Make Him A Graphical Signature!!.....
I'll Blow Ya Brains-Out...And Lie Them Down At Ya Stadium!...
Me Losing This Match-Is Like USA Losing Against The Canadians!!.....
I'll Pull Your Insides-Out Untill I See Your Heart Pumping!!....
Then Inject Your Blood Steam-With Air-Then Inject Water In Ya Throat-And Laugh As I See You Choking.....
You Style's Cheap-Your Not Elevating This Way!!.....
Like Cheap Mom's On Christmas Day-You Got Ya Style Off Ebay!!!.....
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1.look at his avatar
2.He's A Canadian...look at his profile
3.look at his so called signature(nothing but a link that doesn't work)
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This was one of my most rushed and quickest battle i've done in my life.....but knowing and seeing this kids battles..my personals did it...~1~

Rising Sun has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-29-04 09:26 PM.

yo...
Make your life tragic like Magic’s as you engage-with-AIDS
Your dream’s like MJ's jump shot cause they fade-away and I’ll save-the-day
As I stomp-this-fag with more punches than a rocky-match
“Tuck you away” cause you “stink” like big league hockey-bags
Much like cocky-blacks, a relationship with your girl man, I “will-forbid”
Cause I’ll put “Siemen” across-her-shirt…
Like she play for Real-Madrid
This whack hybrid just acts-black when he jack-plaques from whack-cats
But you can’t combat on flat-tracks
So I’ll teach-you-to-rap and speaking-of-facts the demon-is-back
To holla-front, you better off being a baler-son, this scholar-stunned
Spitting 90 degrees, your CD will be crushed into debris
Even if I’m skipping-a-beat, I’ll be ripping-this-Gee
Have you die in your paralysis like you Christopher-Reeves
Watch this emcee get around-your-hounds
Make your DOGS jump…
As I pound-the-ground with thunder-sounds made when I gun-the-rounds
I’ll bury you while you alive so you can listen to what’s under-ground

as promised...
 

Im going to sleep but please try to get at least one vote if possible. thanx,


Mike :laugh:

Voted For: Chaos

you both came weak and your mutlies were forced/ not there

Chaos-well you had some ok punches......nothin special... you had no multi's slim personals blah! I've seen alot better......dont do fillers....they are a waste of lines...

Rising-your verse was bad...well hockey punch was ok again you used too many fillers......use punches n personals strcitly

Punch:Chaos
Personals:Chaos
Metaphours/FLow/Multies- none
Flow-ehh no one prolly Rising

v/ chaos

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Voted For: Rising Sun

v/ Rising Sun

he had more funnier punches and all the personals were hittin hard..
chaos.. you didnt really hit hard with your punches they were comin good but then they started to fade, overall i think this was the worst battle ive seen chaos wrote.. since i know who rising sun is it was an average battle im seen him wrote.. so good battle... v/ RS

Voted For: Rising Sun

First Battle I've Seen From Choas...
I Wasnt Impressed In The Least...
Your Punches And Rhyms In General Were All Pretty Much Weak As Fuck...
With The Exception Of Like Two Bars...
Just Overall Sun Had Alot More Substance To His Verse...
Daym, I Expected Alot More From Choas, Your Rep Definately Surpasses You...
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Voted For: Chaos

Rising Sun..
meh not bad verse..i jsut feel you came weak...your vocabulary was good but you need work on your punches a lil more you have them but jsut not to great...try working on them...and then you'll be dope....metaphores were pretty dope n shit...pz

Choas
pretty good the worst ive seen from you but it was good nice wordplay and punchlines overal you had some nice lines and shit...also soem pretty dope witty metaphores in there...keep workin tho...cuz its liek whoa..but you got this simply...no hate to both iight...pz

VOTE...Choas

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Voted For: Chaos

This battle sucked!!

Chaos: Your verse was wack again man!! 2 many verses are wack that i've read of yours!! lol.. j/p.. but yea, your structure was very bad, especially your flow man!! But there we're 2 bars from your verse i really liked..

I'll Blow Ya Brains-Out...And Lie Them Down At Ya Stadium!...
Me Losing This Match-Is Like USA Losing Against The Canadians!!.....
Lmao good one

and

You Style's Cheap-Your Not Elevating This Way!!.....
Like Cheap Mom's On Christmas Day-You Got Ya Style Off Ebay!!!.....

lol, very original!!

Rising Sun: Dude! It seemed like you mostly worked on multi's then actually dissing him??Your multi's we're alrite, but anyone can do that, it's the punch you really gotta work on, you should also work on some metaphors which I really recommend you do!! Your best line is:

As I stomp-this-fag with more punches than a rocky-match
“Tuck you away” cause you “stink” like big league hockey-bags

and that bar was still kinda wack, due to hockey bags?? It's like trying to dis on someone else sayin you smell like gym socks!! Really old, but good job and much props on the multi's..

Vote: Chaos

Voted For: Chaos

Chaos:

Its Funny How This Nigga Only Comes Out At Day-Cuz He Scared To Come Out At Dark.....
This Kid Got More Skips & Scratches On His Demo-Than His Damn Avatar!!....
^^maybe the dopest bar in this battle good way to start 9/10
Look At You-Your Empty-No Crew In Ya Signature!!.....
This Kid Is So Wack-He Had To Make His Own Fake Link-Cuz No One Bother To Make Him A Graphical Signature!!.....
^^wack + stretched 4/10
I'll Blow Ya Brains-Out...And Lie Them Down At Ya Stadium!...
Me Losing This Match-Is Like USA Losing Against The Canadians!!.....
^^dope bar lmao and true 9/10
I'll Pull Your Insides-Out Untill I See Your Heart Pumping!!....
Then Inject Your Blood Steam-With Air-Then Inject Water In Ya Throat-And Laugh As I See You Choking.....
^^decent but stretched 5/10
You Style's Cheap-Your Not Elevating This Way!!.....
Like Cheap Mom's On Christmas Day-You Got Ya Style Off Ebay!!!.....
^^lmao good close 8/10

overall : 35/50 (70%)

Rising Sun:

Make your life tragic like Magic’s as you engage-with-AIDS
Your dream’s like MJ's jump shot cause they fade-away and I’ll save-the-day
^^first line good, second line filler 4/10
As I stomp-this-fag with more punches than a rocky-match
“Tuck you away” cause you “stink” like big league hockey-bags
^^dope ass bar 9/10
Much like cocky-blacks, a relationship with your girl man, I “will-forbid”
Cause I’ll put “Siemen” across-her-shirt…
Like she play for Real-Madrid
^^ehh decent meta wasnt feelin this 3/10
This whack hybrid just acts-black when he jack-plaques from whack-cats
But you can’t combat on flat-tracks
So I’ll teach-you-to-rap and speaking-of-facts the demon-is-back
^^stretched as fuck and kinda weak decent multies 4/10
To holla-front, you better off being a baler-son, this scholar-stunned
Spitting 90 degrees, your CD will be crushed into debris
Even if I’m skipping-a-beat, I’ll be ripping-this-Gee
Have you die in your paralysis like you Christopher-Reeves
^^decent wordplay played concepts decent punnches 5/10
Watch this emcee get around-your-hounds
Make your DOGS jump…
As I pound-the-ground with thunder-sounds made when I gun-the-rounds
I’ll bury you while you alive so you can listen to what’s under-ground
^^wack closer played bars been used 1 million times multies were decent but wack fucking closer 3/10

overall : 28/60 (47%)

vote: chaos

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Voted For: Chaos

Rising sun:
You lacked the personals... flow was ok... structure was good... but you needed personals.. ya punches were pretty on and off.. metaphors eh..

Chaos: Personals won you this battle.. it was basically a verse of personals.. Flow was a little wierd.. but aight.. structure was messed :thumbup: clean that up.