NeptuneHurricane vs Rambo
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-03-04 at 07:46 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

NeptuneHurricane has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-30-04 07:47 PM.

Rambo has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-30-04 07:48 PM.

Yo, I guess Ill go first

I Pack more Green than the Packers, my rhymes so cold you can call em lambo/*
This pussy Rambo is a hoe, he thinks his rhymes are bright stars but dont glow/
Let him know, cuz this battles all for show/
When you rap, it's like a time bomb, cuz sooner or later you'll realize:
You blow/
I spit faster than an autoMATIC/
I write laid back you, sir, are a faNATIC/
I flow with more art than the vATICan/

Finisher:
Elite Verbally? I send ADRENALINE** pumpin through ya veins to clog ya ''FOUR-ZONES'' (4 chambers of heart)
Lyrically RAPIN RAMBO, listen to the ''WHORE-MOANS'' (hormones)

explanations
*Lambo Feild=Home of the GreenBay Packers
**Adrenaline is a hormone

Verbally known as a monster starter of rap disaster/
Killer of tha burg rambo fuckin clapped your master//
Neptune is a planet and you cant be a scurry mayne/
Cause i had a impact on florida you aint no hurrycane//
I'm gon give you a hand and help you find da door/
And if i catch you talkin slick ya new home is tha fuckin floor/
I'll leave a mark around ya eye like peanuts on Charlie Brown//
Now that i dont like you this is what plannin to do partna/
Tear ya nuts and dick off and hand em to you partna//
I'll play more games wit chu than dreamcast or playstation/
I'll step to you wit my fist on blast and ya heart pacin//
I'll swing like a nigga wit a feirce mind he know skillz/
Cause my hits are more viscious than Jermaine O'Neal//

Yo i fucked up on tha charlie brown part tha part thats supposed to go in that is "I'll leave you dead in tha toolshead no sound" someone please put that in there cause its not a rap without all my parts in

This was feedback posted for Rambo
 

that shit was clean its hard to tell who won cause both of yall did hella good

Uppin for votes.

Actually, we haven't even got a single one.

Uppin again. Come on ppl, we need votes for dis battle.

Voted For: Rambo

vote= neptune

alot more complex, bettervocab

and that finisher pretty much decided it

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Voted For: NeptuneHurricane

Aii this Is How I feel
NT
Wouldnt Had My vote if It Wasnt For That Endin bcuz i Was Feelin Rambos verse Until That Endin made Me Jus Get Crunked LOL

RMBO
I Was feelin Ya Verse But Ya endin Couldve been Alot more betta Then You Wouldve Had My vote Bcuz Ya Verse Was nice mayne Next Time you battle Hol that Same Enthusiastim from The Begging Mayne You did Great

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Plz Vote In My Battles Atleast Two Plz I Dont Have N e Votes At All Plz Do Me The Favor
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ooooooooooh SHIT

my bad....i accidently voted for rambo

i meant to vote for neptune, his shit was 50x better


my bad....can that shit be changed?

Lol. I dont think so. Damn Chuck, read the rules and learn the system. Contact a mod.

Hey King, Ill vote on your battles man. Just returnin the favor.

Voted For: NeptuneHurricane

give this to u cuz of ur closerliekd it strongest bar outta the whoel battle first bar was kinda good some nice wordplay

rambo suxs stop rappin ~1~

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Uppin.

Damn, pppl need to vote for dis shit!

Aight well.....uppin

hahaha nice pm man rambo u funny as hell if u wanna battle set it up mayne

Ok..........
Uppin.
Come on ppl just put this one away. Sheesh.

Ok. What the fuck? Uppin. Can we plz get some more votes? holy crap....

Uppin.

omg. someone plz vote

:help: :help: :help: :help: :help:

Voted For: Rambo

My vote is for Neptunes.

Ya punches were kinda good, but the strcuture was a lil off. I can tell that you rap fast, but this is a text battle, and you may have to switch it up a lil.

Rambo, ya structure was decent, but you gotta step it up. Ya punches were decent at best, and ya personals weren't half way decent. You really gotta step it up.

My vote is for Neptunes

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Goddamnit dood. You gotta vote under the verse that you want to vote for. Holy shit, people need to learn how to do this. Is there a mod that could fix this plz?

Uppin so hopefully a mod can see. and ppl need to vote. Correctly this time.

This was feedback posted for Rambo
 

checking this shito out............................................... ....

Voted For: Rambo

This was an overall good batle but im goin to have to give this one to ..........
I really like the flow to both verses
there was a nice touch to NEPTUNE flow but it still could have been a little better with the wordplay, Nice sructure to both verses, RAMBO had some GREAT line too
i really liked his flow but ur metas werent visible but punchlines were sick
nice battle


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Uppin, this shit has been going forever. Plz somebody just vote and finish this!

Voted For: Rambo

Voted for Rambo

Gave this one to Rambo but not easily i liked both real good but I found Neptunes punches a lil humerous and not hard i mean i laughed after i read some of them but wit Rambo i was like whoah so everything else was good

flow was a lil more easier to read on Rambos as well

Good Battle to Both
take a look at my battles n hook me up on my battles or sumtin!

Voted For: NeptuneHurricane

opener: neptune hurricane
vocab: nept
structure: rambo
punches: nept
multis: nept
overall: nept

neptune gets my vote

Uppin.
If someone would finish this up, we could move on. This battle is so old. People is sleepin.

Voted For: NeptuneHurricane

Nept- Punches was ok, flow was fucked......Strucuture is fucked......Punches though was ok....i like the closer...aint nohting to say about your verse, except elevate on structure.





rambo- Punches was ok , still need elevation, flowed pretty nice...aint nothing much to say





overall=This battle was weak, Rambo you flowed an pretty good verse, punches was ok...keep doing ya thang, add multi'z next time. Nept you had an pretty bad flow, punches on the other hand (the closer) was nice. Rambo sorry fam but nept closer beat you. You had some fillers in your verse saying "partna" the same time. Punches was ok,nept punches was hard hitting and effective (the closer)

Voted For: Rambo

Rambo
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines.. its mad newbish.. structure is good.. flow is pretty good.. no multis.. wordplay was decent.. a few of ur punches connected.. no good personals..

NeptuneHurricane
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines.. its mad newbish.. ur structure is very inconsistent.. flow falls off due to the inconsistency.. u had a few multis.. wordplay is weak.. none of ur punches connected.. no good personals..

Overall
NeptuneHurricane had more multis.. neither had good personals.. Rambo had the better structure.. the better flow.. better wordplay.. and more connecting punches.. so basing off of that.. Rambo gets my vote..

VOTE - RAMBO

Voted For: NeptuneHurricane

NH wins this because he actually had punches...

RAMBO...that was a self glorification verse...u cant do that in a battle...battles are about punches...and taking shots at the other guy...

NH...nice overall verse...ur wordplay was ok...and ur punches hit nicely...work on flow and rhyme scheme...

plz return the favor wit an honest vote\/...

Voted For: Rambo

I think that rambo had a better verse overal because he used personals, and had a better flow and better structure

Neptune you tried to pack to much into one verse hoppin all over the place and your punches were a little out of context and stretching... the packin green had nothing to do with battling this guy and niether did you flowing with art..

try to come wit a battle rap not a song verse

Uppin....plz somebody just vote on this...

Voted For: Rambo

Rambo got this.. you faggots dickride.

Neptune's structure was garbage.. and his punches and concepts were fucking wack.

v/ Rambo

easy.

Voted For: NeptuneHurricane

aight breakdown:
Rambo
i wasn't feelin your first half of your verse, it wasn't hot.. this bar wasn't too bad tho:
Neptune is a planet and you cant be a scurry mayne/
Cause i had a impact on florida you aint no hurrycane//

also some of your lines didn't even rhyme.. you had some aight punches..

NeptuneHurricane
your opener was hot-
I Pack more Green than the Packers, my rhymes so cold you can call em lambo/*
This pussy Rambo is a hoe, he thinks his rhymes are bright stars but dont glow/

the second bar was pretty decent as well-
Let him know, cuz this battles all for show/
When you rap, it's like a time bomb, cuz sooner or later you'll realize:
You blow/

your verse seems as tho you spit audio tracks the way it flows smoothly.. you write the way you prolly spit.. but for this battle, that was not the right route to go.. the lines wit automatic, fanatic, and vatican were unnecessary.. however you had a nice finisher to end the battle.. you came harder and was consistent overall so i give the win to you.