JaeBurnz354 vs RapVerse
 

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Your # of lines must be the same as mine, or less
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-05-04 at 03:20 PM

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RapVerse has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-05-04 02:53 PM.

Man this is stupidity. he wants to win?? He-just-can't.
There's more shit in his verse than sewage treatment-plant
I'll beat the man, he's in Dan-ger, I make this gay-hurt
only by spittin pure fire and watching as 'jae-burns'
and You'll never-Win-this, you're dead-and-finished
I'm gonna wreck-this-bitch as he gets-diminished
Judging by his text alone, I can tell he's not-clever...


(last line was in a PM)

JaeBurnz354 has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-05-04 03:16 PM.

Why in the hell did i think of battling this new be...
You not talented, i can see right thorugh you like rubies/
Spit to complicate what you anticipate to be wack...
But wait in suspense if truthfully think or feel like that/
Nobody is layed back, I'm especially fierce here...
Ya style has lyrica gaping hole like pierced ears/
You's a nobody why even step up to the plate...
Please call barry bonds for some steroids to take/
There that should give you more of a punchline...
I'ma leave u liek six packs, when it's crunchtime/(Hurting)

Voted For: RapVerse

vote rapverse verse was more harder and alot better to read more clever all around

^ Will that vote be DQed??

Damn these votes coming in slow today. ^ing.

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

This was an overall good batle but im goin to have to give this one to ..........
I really like the flow to both verses
there was a nice touch to RV flow but it still could have been a little better with the wordplay, Nice sructure to both verses, JAE had some GREAT line too
i really liked his flow but ur metas werent visible but punchlines were sick
nice battle


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At last, a vote. the first vote this week.

I hope all the other votes don't take this long.

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Voted For: RapVerse

ok rapverse had a better flow and structure dope bounce to it jae had a good shit too but not as good punches and disses were tied as was vocob also here so all i have left to place a vote is flow which rapverse won hands down

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

I gots to give this to Jae his punches were hardhittin' remind me of some shyt I wrote lol.....

I liked both verses but one stood out more....

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

Man this is stupidity. he wants to win?? He-just-can't.
There's more shit in his verse than sewage treatment-plant
I'll beat the man, he's in Dan-ger, I make this gay-hurt
only by spittin pure fire and watching as 'jae-burns'
and You'll never-Win-this, you're dead-and-finished
I'm gonna wreck-this-bitch as he gets-diminished
Judging by his text alone, I can tell he's not-clever...

Quote:
Originally Posted by JaeBurn354
i replied to your open 5 w/e call out and or w/e
^^^^^^^^^ YOUR PUNCHES WAS KINDA PLAYED OUT FAM....NO HARD DECENT PUNCHES CAME FROM THIS VERSE EXCEPT THAT LAST BAR WITH THE PM QUOTE OTHER THAN THAT THIS WAS AN WEAK VERSE



Why in the hell did i think of battling this new be...
You not talented, i can see right thorugh you like rubies/
Spit to complicate what you anticipate to be wack...
But wait in suspense if truthfully think or feel like that/
Nobody is layed back, I'm especially fierce here...
Ya style has lyrica gaping hole like pierced ears/
You's a nobody why even step up to the plate...
Please call barry bonds for some steroids to take/
There that should give you more of a punchline...
I'ma leave u liek six packs, when it's crunchtime/(Hurting)
^^^^^^^^^^^ O OK PUNCHES WERE OK NOT GOOD THOUGH ELEVATE ON THAT FAM...FLOW WAS GOOD...HAD AN LIL WORDPLAY THERE.......REMEMBER TO USE PERSONALS OFTEN IN YOUR BATTLES AIGHT


OVERALL= THIS BATTLE WAS KIND ONE-SIDED RAPVERSE HAD NO GOOD PUNCHES EXCEPT THE LAST LINE WITH AN PERSONAL...BUT OTHER THAN THAT HIS VERSE WASNT GOOD NO HARD PUNCHES, GOOD FLOW...ITS JUST THE PUNCHES U LACKED IN......JAE BURNS CAME ALRIGHT HE GOT MY VOTE BY AN LAND SLIDE...JAE ELEVATE ON PUNCHES HIT HARDER NEXT TIME AND USE PERSONALS...HE GOT MY VOTE CAUSE OF HARDER PUNCHES....LIKE I SAID JAEBURNS WON THIS BY AN LAND SLIDE


PEACE

Ok I See Too Many Dr's Hurr Fam So I'll Be Pm'ing Strobe About This Peace...people Explain Your Votes...stop Dr'ing

Peace

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

V/JaeBurnz....he had better punchs an multi's an structure...Rap.. ....ur verse had sum punchs but u didnt come consistent wit the diss's.....
punchs=Jb
multis=Tie
vocab=jb
structure=jb
overall=jb
*RETURN THE FAVOR*

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

JaeBurnz definately won this one with better punches and wordplay... You could work on ur structure, but every thing else was near perfect...
Fave/Best Line:There that should give you more of a punchline...
I'ma leave u liek six packs, when it's crunchtime/(Hurting)

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

that was just plain better had better every thing man rv you need to elevate and then you go and send one of your lines as a pm wats up with that

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I didn't send it, HE sent it to ME, you Fucking Moron.

I swear you're the only person who couldn't understand that.

DaMn people have voted but not in the polls waddup??

Voted For: RapVerse

JaeBurnz354
decent punches, nice structure
vocab was good, flow was aight
didn't see no wp from you, overall
ur drop wasn't good..yo punches didnt
make no sense..

RAPVERSE
decent drop, punches were hard-hittin
structure was blah, flow was aight..and
ur vocab was aight..decent wp...overall
decent drop..could've came harder tho
but u took this win..

forgot return the favor linkz in sigg

Is this a joke? The battle has been open for 36 days and has only recieved 2 decent votes.

Voted For: JaeBurnz354

i gotta give this one to jae burnz because his punches were just better but rapverse almost took this one. Had rapverse been able to come up with a better opener for that "watch as jae burns" punch he'd a won because both verses had holes in their punches. rapverse's 5th and 6th lines were weak as were alot of jae's punches. you both only had 4 good lines to me but jae's 4 were better than rapverse's 4

Nobody is layed back, I'm especially fierce here...
Ya style has lyrica gaping hole like pierced ears/

There that should give you more of a punchline...
I'ma leave u liek six packs, when it's crunchtime/(Hurting)
and

Man this is stupidity. he wants to win?? He-just-can't.
There's more shit in his verse than sewage treatment-plant

I'll beat the man, he's in Dan-ger, I make this gay-hurt
only by spittin pure fire and watching as 'jae-burns'

Like i said had rapverse been able to spit that jae burns joke better he proly would've won but i have to give it to jae burnz

oh yea and here are some of my battles check em out it's your chance criticize me for my lyrics

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=169162 me vs. youngsoulja

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=171308 me vs. nightmare

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=168874 me vs. magical

Lol...





http://s3.-----------------/fernoe/...c=28&st=0&#last

Rhyming crunchtime with punchline...
http://www.google.co.uk/search?hl=e...nchline&spell=1
^523 results.

So much for all the votes on those 2 punches.

Voted For: RapVerse

LOL Damn aii This Is What I feel

I give My vote To Rapverse Bcuz Basically He Came way Much Harder with Punchez and personalz And Jaeburns Lines Were Played And weak (sorry buT the truth is the truth) so thats Just How I Feel and Im Pretty Sure Others Feel the Same Way

Peace

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Voted For: JaeBurnz354

dam i give this vote 2 jaeburnz he ha dbetta punchez n flow.....hiz structure was betta also i give hiz freestyle a 8/10 n RapVerse got a 6/10 i didnt like rapverses vocab no hate man return a favor dawg

Voted For: RapVerse

you took it mayne, i like ur shit good punchlines u just brought it harder than jae return tha favor

Voted For: RapVerse

Judging by his text alone, I can tell he's not-clever...

Quote:
Originally Posted by JaeBurn354
i replied to your open 5 w/e call out and or w/e
Man this is stupidity. he wants to win?? He-just-can't.
There's more shit in his verse than sewage treatment-plant

RV obviously won. Those two bars were OK but the rest from both were shitty to the max. Both need to elevate. Learn what punches are. Stop-doing-this-trying-to-make-multis. And add more complexity to your verse. Even simple wordplay can be effective yall. Throw more personals also. But basically RV wins easily.

v-RV

Voted For: RapVerse

punches-RV
metals-none
persnals-RV
stuckture-RV
flow-tie

RV take this came harder with punches and persnals he get my vote easy 1 sided all the way