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Nostradamus vs anxiety
Crew Battle: A.I (Nostradamus) vs. CS (anxiety)
20-40 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Bullshit Topic: Robbing A House Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 12-05-04 at 09:25 PM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. |
anxiety has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-05-04 08:56 PM.
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Nostradamus has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-05-04 08:56 PM.
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Topic: Robbing A House -[Treading On Thin Ice]- Looking back I, remember a house on twenty fifth.. It was a crack joint, owner ran things & kept a bitch.. Joe Morris was the name, he played games to make a gain.. Anxiety’s blamed, though he remains a known name.. The home slang was crazy, involved in gang banging.. Their hanging on no hope, known for dope slanging.. I hope they don’t give in, Joe had two kids.. And every scrap of money he makes considered his.. Not a bad life to live, feeling wealthy in content.. But that was before Joe got a pipe & took a hit.. He pulled quick, addicted to the noise of the crackle.. His head was in a daze, for days it was a battle.. Rattling his hopes and dreams with taking dope.. His family watched as his head would soon explode.. One night he took an OD, Joes now past tense.. Another victim pronounced dead, round about 12:10.. That’s life for ya, so fragile before its gone.. When all decency in his mind constantly stands torn.. So as were leaving the scene, & this family’s flogged.. No one broke in, but its evident their house had been robbed.. -[Problematic Solutions]- Diamond rings & things, only meant for spotlight.. Think about it, fames a measure of what you got right? This is not hype, I’m just trying to understand this shit.. Life is crazy its true, whoever planned its sick.. An outstanding prick, standing in front of hopes door.. Blocking the average person, out of being so poor.. No more lies, look at Joe’s story & handle that.. Dismantle facts, think outside the square of your battle raps.. The same maps you see on TV stereotypes.. Happen everywhere, even on cold December nights.. I’m right, & I cant find a better way to put it.. The wetter the weather, the better we understood it.. Cause hardships is something that people relate to.. If they hate you, they probably don’t got a great view.. I’ve made two, horrible mistakes in this life.. Its shit right, but every little bit on this night.. Adds up, until we just take it like a bitch.. Knocking hard on our doors were just whores of the rich.. I morbidly twitch, my handguns what I’m about.. I love to see somebody try to rob my house.. -[------****------]- |
Demon and Angel juxtaposing on the left and the right...
Imma listen to the one who does the best in the fight... Blows back and fourth... As the demon grabs his fork... All i'm thinking bout is i'm bout to go back to court... As i recollect, we didnt collect, when we went haphazardly... Dastardly, over a year in jail not to mention a casualty... But of course the judge shook that one off casually... How you can kill a man without punishment baffled me... He was taking some paintings, tryna load em in the truck... The guy who lived their blew his brains out before he could duck... As you would expect from the judge, he didn't give a fuck... He said "he can protect his property, after that it's up to luck"... But that didn't float with us, he was one of our best men... Along with my cousin, not to mention my best friend... And nothing was done when he died, so i got a grudge... Jail was me putting a plan together, to get back at the judge... But i'm poor, so i figured i could kill two birds with one stone... Get back at the judge and get paid, all in one home... All we gotta do is wait, untill the fucker travels... He's gon get robbed blind, we won't even leave the gavel... First thing we saw was his robe, i was like "take it... If he doesnt govern fairly, then he can govern naked"... We knew that were getting into some serious mischeif... His house looked like the Hoo's house, when they woke up on christmas... We started breaking windows, busting chairs and tables... Found important looking files, started ripping out the staples... Found an antique porsche in the garage, but i couldnt believe... No matter how hard i looked i couldnt find the key's... So we busted in the windows, ripped out the seats... then fucked with his A/C to take out the heat... I saw a car pull up, ran so i wouldnt get reprimanded... But he saw us, walked up to all of us and demanded... An answer, so we all explained about our friend... How the judge didnt give a fuck when he met his end... He said, "i agree, thats a good reason, exept for... The fact that this is my house, the judge lives next door"... I had to write this in like, 20 minutes... My shit got deleted from my computer, so this is my spur of the moment shit... |
Voted For: Nostradamus
hands down... nostradamus tooks this shit with ease... Anxiety: i wasnt really feelnig yours.. ya beginging didnt sounsd like a begeginng........and it was all in and out of places.... ya flow wasnt too good.. but i felt that you put alot of effort on it.. ya ending was not that good.. dint have a good meaning too it... Nostra: yours shit was deep as fuck man......... the beggiingin and how youintroduced it was very well made and you wrote ya verse so well... you have very good flow and you was in the topic really good....i didnt feelngi the ending that much though.. i though that it could've have a better ending too it... the middle was very well writen too.. Vote/ nos... |
I feel you Paramik... Im just sick of being "deep" or emotional all the time...
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Anxeity: need to work on how ya write it... it has to have a good beginging and a plot and an end that fits good with the topic...you reaslly lacked the beginging...the ending was better..buut it ddint give a good..one on my mind
Nos: your was good overall but you ddi lack some flow in ya verse... you staye on the topic better...ya ending kinda fell off a little but then got back up..... extra info |
Voted For: anxiety
Ok this was a pretty dope topical battle : Anxiety: Your verse was almost perfect... The imagery was amazing .. probably the best i have seen on RV.. everything was so descriptive.. your verse also flowed well and that doesnt mean much to some people but i like being able to read a verse and have the words roll of my tongue and thats what your verse did.. wordplay was pretty good... everything stayed consistent... good structure.. you stayed on topic the whole way through... and the ending was pretty good i expected something completely different so a twist at the end definately helped this verse out.. overall : 9.7/10 Nostradamus: Your verse was also good... but the biggest problem i had with your verse was that i didnt feel like it followed the topic in the first part and halfway through the last part.. i understood where you were coming from when you wrote this but the way that you wrote it deleted all possibility of good imagery.. there were a couple spots where the imagery jumped out but nothing consistent.. you had the better wordplay and flow.. structure was good but i dont think your verse was as good as anxiety's overall : 9.1/10 please return the favor on this battle : http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=162611 |
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Voted For: Nostradamus
alright..honestly...at first....i thought anxietys verse was better..the rhyme scheme was better i thought...it flowed better..story SEEMED better...because it was serious...but somewhat humerous in a "oh shit that sucks" sort of way....over all..i thought it was real good..and wasn't sure if nostra could beat it...as i started readin nostras first segment of his piece...i thought anxiety had won for sure..but the last bar of the first part..won it over...the depth..and the meaning....that was incredible.........jesus man...I'm asking God to show me a day where I can vote against you...fuck.... Vote readded... last post in AI forum was on 11/30, which 1 week has passed at 12/7 |
Today was the day:thumbup:
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Voted For: Nostradamus
Anxiety Your verse was good had some aight flow and the struc was a lil stretched try and shroten it down. Anyway topic was kinda simple to go on but you did well regardless wordplay was good i liked reading but nothing real special ya know was a good piece though Nostradamus Nice piece flowed decently and structure was dope see the switch to audio has had the right effect on the writing sid eof things. Topic the way you handled it was dope kept it real smooth and the way it flowed...dayum put this shit on audio...i think you took this the way it flowed and the strength of the topic i think you won it on...both cats rhymes were real strong lots of metas internal rhymes props to both but only 1 guy can get a vote. |
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Voted For: Nostradamus
aight this was a tight battle right here........ both of yall came hard... gotta respect that........... breakdown: Anxiety- good shit dawg... good flow and structure was tight... u stayed on topic and used ok immagry... like i said you stayed on topic and told a pretty good story... could have used a little better wordplay but all in all this was a fairly strong verse... not bad homie.. 7/10 Nos- as usual tight ass verse dawg... i liked the flow and structure, it all flowed togeather almost perfectly... stayed on topic and used great immagry.. shit was creative and a good read... was fun to read.. wordplay was good and u used great vocab... great drop dawg.... 8.5/10 overall TIGHT battle... nos takes this one but no hate to anxiety... u came hard as fuck... no hate and good battle to both of yall........... VOTE- NOS........................ |
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checking polls........ good battle here....... come on CS
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uppin this for Cs and Ai
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Voted For: anxiety
wow, both of y'all had sum nice content....... :) I was feeling anxiety's stand point on "Robbing a House" more than Nos because he stuck to the topic completely through... I thought the demon and angel concept was creative... Nostradamus I was feeling your imagery... As you would expect from the judge, he didn't give a fuck... He said "he can protect his property, after that it's up to luck"... ^^Anxiety u stayed on topic very well, I feel like after this bar.. U went deep into the topic, that's why I feel you won.. although both of you had nice pieces... I feel you had the more effective verse.. good luck to both............ my vote/ anxiety :) |
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Voted For: Nostradamus
WHOAAA this was a nice topical by topical he murdered anxiety in every way, form, shape possible, the imageinary was CRAZY and the vocab and wordplay was off the hook. i liked the structure and creativitiy in the words and with the colors and shit. this was a dope piece from u fam anxiety. ur shit was alright but after readin nos shit u already knew u lost. ur shit was alright bad vocab but the visionary was koo. keep it up fam, i think ur better at topicals then u are battles vote:nos Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: anxiety
vote/anxiety.. pros/cons of anxiety Ok...I liked the whole..'job' heist thing... the srtucture was aight..but the multis were great and so was flow..but I was lookin for emotion and relation to the topic and being..and you had it.. very enjoying to read..and no tactics for advangtage.. Nostradamous okay,you had good vocab and structure..but your emotion..and your commitment to stick to the topic wasn't there..it actually was all over the place.. but the oen thing I did like..is how you seperated the two chapters..with great titles..but it didn't win this battle vote/anxiety.. |
Voted For: Nostradamus
this wasnt hard to vote on anxiety: i read yours and i liked how you used a lot of descriptive words cuz it helps put a picture in your head. the only real thing i didnt like about your verse was that you didnt go very deep with the topic of choice. you approached the topic with almost a sense of humor about it, which to me doesent really effect me in any way. it sort of seems like comic relief. the words you used were all used well thoughout your peice and im not saying it was bad, im just saying i wasnt really feeling how you handles the topic. nostradamus: wow............. this was good shit, i couldnt really work out where you were going with this untill almost the last bar of your first verse, but after that it got really interesting. the way you described the emotions people would go through after their house was robbed of a family member was dope.. and it shun light into the problems created by drugs.. overall i think this was a really dope ass battle, props to both.. but i def think nostra has got this on lock.. so: v/nostradamus peace |
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