addicted from birth *dedicated to dagrlrmqable*
 

momma 15 on her knnes with the morning sickness....all hopes lost......
trying to get hte feel of what medication can soon take as a loss......
she kneels and prays to the needles filled with sin that she swears is holy'er than the cross............
in te hhospital her blood hits the floor with wrist wet from sweat with the voodoo charms....as th enurse puts hte 4lb baby in its mommas arms.........
Baby Trell is his written name....but this baby has no chance cuz his mommas the numbre one player in the heroine game.........
with 15 perscriptions to help him live his life....he is thought to reclaim his crib....
while his momma now 16 wonders tonight why the father wont come back and help raise this baby boy right...........
she lays her baby down to rest.....only to come back to find no air rising this baby's chest.........
shes screams n she cries LORD WHY YOU KEEP TRYIN TO TAKE MY BABY TO THE SKIES..........
her body bleeds n convulses as teh withdrawls set her into alarm....not with hte needle in her arm did she think it would ever bring her baby this much harm.........
the small casket is laid into the ground........never again will this addicted baby breath another sound.........

dedicated to dagrlrmqable..............this is ya peice and no its not about hre its just for hre.........so no dumb ideas.........gurl..............hope yo ulike it HAZY

a deep piece i felt it, u could improve it by checking your grammatcial mistakes though, please coment on my work thanks

Damn gurl
this is tight
heart breakin
piece this is
a sad but true piece

madd luv and respect

~illest~

thanks peeps uppin for sum RB luvin

Ay Hazy baby..First off, I wanna say thank ya for the dedication..Means a lot, that you took the time to write a piece for me..n a damn good one at that..Just that ya cared enough to incorporate me into it..My name always sounds good when its comin from you, just wanna tell ya that I notice it, and i really do appreciate..also i wont forget it neither..

As for the piece...The imagry was mad vivid and made for a captivating verse..Your choice of words and rhyme scheme made it all flow together nicely.

>trying to get hte feel of what medication can soon take as a loss......
she kneels and prays to the needles filled with sin that she swears is holy'er than the cross............
in te hhospital her blood hits the floor with wrist wet from sweat with the voodoo charms....as th enurse puts hte 4lb baby in its mommas arms.........

Somethin about those lines^..You always have a certain descriptiveness, where if someone was to throw those bars at me, im positive i could indentify them as being yours.

>the small casket is laid into the ground........never again will this addicted baby breath another sound.........

^That was a very tight way to end the piece..the imagry of the "small casket" sums up the entire emotion of the piece..Also by writing this "addicted" baby, instead of maybe just "baby", said a lot about how much the innocent child suffered from the troubled mothers mistakes..That one word made a big difference, in my eyes..another example of your word usage contributing to the illness of your verse..

Anyway..Overall this was a very tight piece..Flow, imagry, emotion, everything was represented nicely..I was very much feelin it...had a good message also, and youre delivery was so strong that youd actually think twice about picking up a needle after reading it...Youre pieces are always eye openers...Well gyrl, i got nothin but propz n luv for ya, n you know this mayun...thanks for the dedication once again...keep shinin hazy baby..
Peace.

Oh yeah..If ya didnt already know..
The P.U.R.E. collab is just about the crew reuniting..so if ya can, do that..we all want ya to be up in there...

dagrl that reply was better than my whole verse.......i kno i make alot of mistakes typing and my owrds get jumbled ....i could take my time to fix it but i see it as my signature mark.......lol.......so thats why my verses always look like a game of scrabble......but thank you for teh reply ima print it and frame it.......teh feelings are mutual.......id love to join teh collab but my time is rare.....i work too jobs one at teh forest service from 6 to 4:30......teh second from 6 to 9.......my moms kickin me out the day i turn 18 since that is soon ima need soem money.......im usually only on for a couple minutes a day......cept tonight i dont have to work.........i really appreciate you keepin me in pure even thuogh im not active......means alot for reals......please tell keezy thanks as well.......ima try to get that verse tonight so hopefully i can.......meanwhile thanks again for teh erply......i put this on HHT where i mod the poetry room with g boo and another guy and ppl jumpin on the peice .......you got replys from young foul mouth.......verbal eyekon and slowhands....they thinkin it was nice......and i agree its a peice that i put alot of effort into......hope you enjoyed it........luh always HAZY
shaynea lee terra evans

damn... this was deep, jay was right about you, flowing with madd skill, madd feeling, much props for this HAZY, i wanna collab with you some time when you're free, cuz it sounds like you're busy a lot, so whenever, peace 'n' keep spitting

much respect


signed,
~madd

thanks preacher and a collab is in line to due...but on hht cuz i dont post that much ere alright/////////anyways upin for some luh.....and jay said i was good?.......weird i miss that crazy ass

^'n fah Hazy..

Supz Gurl ...
I was diggin dis piece ,
reminded me of something ud
do before a track a skit ...
dope!
Keep doin ur thang ...

Yo, get off ma back to gurl ...
i been in hospital and away fo` 3 weeks,
and i had no way of getting on the net!
Im back to do the job ...
as i always do!

Respect/1

Who are you talkin to Dime...

this was on point!! keep droppin hottness!

peez


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this was nice hazy....but also very dark, grim and hard hitting in a way...you depicted stromg emotions...and some very good imagery...had to read it twice (not too reader friendly...but its all good..)....

...but yeah...i definetly felt this....you always have a good deep flow to all your pieces (i dont mean rhyming, even though that is a bit of it....but more so continuity and structure of the words and...well i cant quite explain it fully...but i think you know what i mean...)....

anyway....respect...

thank yo umuch darneck as for reader freindly none of my peices or replys are its my trade mark i tyoe to fast for my own good..........so i leave it how it comes out yea .........but thank you for the reply

I wanna say something. I aint sure what to say. But I'll see what I can conjure up to describe my thoughts on this peice.

I started reading the first to lines and I didn't feel a thing. And I wasn't sure wether or not I should continue reading. But what you lacked in capturing my attention in the beginning, you more than made up for in the middle and end.

It put a little dose of fearful discomfort in me though. An "addicted baby". Suffering. A type of suffering I can't relate to, so I get kind of scared of that kind of stuff.

Incredible peice babe.

Momentai.

'uppin' for Hazy...

uppin