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Ebonicz vs OptiKaL
Battle Rules:
6 - 12 No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting no feedin off whoeva drops first Minimum posts to vote: 30 Check in by: 12-08-04 at 09:13 PM Must drop verse in 145 minutes after check in. |
OptiKaL has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-08-04 08:14 PM.
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Ebonicz has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-08-04 08:41 PM.
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if optikal think he got a chance it all an ilusion
i got more advantage on him then the big L and tupac fusion i will go on whit this punk and till i get sued for verbal aubsion if he still got a shot then he better take it quick cuz im fully load and im readdy to empty my clip unless you wanna catch a sulg you better run or youll be bleeding on the rug you life is done see ill fuckup every thing you will ever love or charish evan his dream to make it big will fuckin Parish see i got aint the shit to audio so ill be text in ya i got ya mind so boggled you be have'n dilexia now that he all fucked up my word will be infectin ya |
gave you 3 hours but u prolly need a month to write ya verse.....we all know ur ryhme gonna be played out if u diddnt try n bite it first//
literally i attak cuz u cant hak it wit my raps lyrically... madda fac; u remind me off pizza hut wit no drivers the way u lak's delivery// U.......fuk's wit me?NAH u aint got the ability...to compere wut such a real emcee...who'z lines spark electricity to burn hiz competitors wit wordz so brilliantly// yo' my punchlinez bloody ya mouth like if you were spittin glass...cept'ya spitz is wak,n breakin c.cd.'s be the only way this cat iz rippin traks// keystylin n u still bout to die....the worst part iz u tried ya hardest while i diddnt have to try// |
Voted For: OptiKaL
voted for optikal because............. optikal....you had some nice mataphors in your verse....punchlines killed him....nice multis.....the only thing wrong with your verse was that your structure is fucked......work on that and you will be a very good battler....overall a nice verse.....u hit harder ebonics.....your verse was kind of simple...no multis...no vocab....meta's.......it was a decent verse but those are some of the things you should consider working on....no hate... i voted for optik because...punches hit harder...he had more multis...metaphores were there....and overall his whole verse was just a lot nicer.....no hate to either one of you....good battle.... |
well w/e as you can see i took me 10 minutes to wright this shit
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Voted For: OptiKaL
flow: ebonic just cuz it flowed alot better off the toung punches: optikal hes punches was alot harder and was more direct and raw... creativeness: optikal cuz hes punches was original and hes verse wasnt basic or average all around preety good drop just fix ya structure...... vote: optikal |
fa show im not use to this site yet thats y my structure iz fuked
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up up and away lets get this ova with............/.
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come on people i votwe on all the battlez up in here so return the favor
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one last time fuka'z vote please..................
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This was feedback posted for OptiKaL
just checkin da polls.........uppin dis for optikal.....
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Voted For: OptiKaL
man this battle straight sucked. Flow was ebonics was off a little bit because of the 1 syllable rhymes you should mix it up with multis ya need to elevate. Optikal you were alrite nothing hard hitting but kept it decent. ur ryhme gonna be played out if u diddnt try n bite it first |
K.o............................................... .......
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funk now what up wit this ko you never said ko votes ther can still be 5 other votes dude man i new i lost this but shit fuck the K.O
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aiyo c'mon people i guess i need 2 more votes hook a nikk up
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Voted For: OptiKaL
OptiKal takes this one. Good punches and jokes in the beginning, and good choice of words. |
Voted For: OptiKaL
This was an overall good batle but im goin to have to give this one to .......... I really like the flow to both verses there was a nice touch to EBONIKZ flow but it still could have been a little better with the wordplay, Nice sructure to both verses, OPTIKAL had some GREAT line too i really liked his flow but ur metas werent visible but punchlines were sick nice battle -Please return the favor on my battle I know its a lil weak but its ok Please return the favor http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=163680 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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