Lawless (Hs) vs Tarik Donovan
 

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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-15-04 at 04:57 PM

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Tarik Donovan has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-12-04 04:59 PM.

Lawless (Hs) has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-12-04 05:28 PM.

it's ironic how he pussy and can't find it where it be no price/
knowin' damn well he couldn't get blown if he was casino dice/

my rhymes are heavy like comedy punchlines from eddie/
i'm battlin' you? i'll fucc around a burn a mic(Mike Jackson) like pepsi catch me/

Tarik like to fake like he seen obscene things/
when the only tyme he could spit sumtin toxic was from a bottle of mean green/

I show no love for any man approachin' me/
naw betta yet.. he couldn't spit fresh if he was a can of popari/

ain't no way lil' T is meltin me/
his fuccin brain must be slower then the elderly/

I ain't a newbie you can't remove me wit failure/
only time he seen 'a clip' was on a movie trailer/

i'ma go head and finish em Mr. T your ended/
and ya image is now smaller then a premature infant/

this bitch lawless been here since august but still is wack...
he tries to hide it but I ain't liein' man no tryin' cuz it is fact...
cant use a personal on him cuz he has no personality...
hes a robot speaking jiberish its shit... hoe tot with split anatomy...
he couldn't be wacker if he changed his name to sinner...
no way he'd be a winner in a battle cuz he gets ate for dinner...
By another guy... why... he's gayer than gay porn...
get your head severed like jesus when he got suck by thorn...
and I ain't bein' demonic i smoke herbs like you like chronic...
you suck dicks while I shoot off more bricks than the supersonics...
Next time you fuckin' step up to face tarik donovan...
your momma will be cryin' tryin' to pick out your coffin...

I murdered him... my rhyme got out of hand... I meant to go easy..lol
oh well...

Voted For: Tarik Donovan

Lawless:
it's ironic how he pussy and can't find it where it be no price/
knowin' damn well he couldn't get blown if he was casino dice/

my rhymes are heavy like comedy punchlines from eddie/
i'm battlin' you? i'll fucc around a burn a mic(Mike Jackson) like pepsi catch me/
2/10

Tarik like to fake like he seen obscene things/
when the only tyme he could spit sumtin toxic was from a bottle of mean green/
4/10

I show no love for any man approachin' me/
naw betta yet.. he couldn't spit fresh if he was a can of popari/
2/10

ain't no way lil' T is meltin me/
his fuccin brain must be slower then the elderly/
5/10

I ain't a newbie you can't remove me wit failure/
only time he seen 'a clip' was on a movie trailer/
2/10

i'ma go head and finish em Mr. T your ended/
and ya image is now smaller then a premature infant/
1/10

Tarik:
this bitch lawless been here since august but still is wack...
he tries to hide it but I ain't liein' man no tryin' cuz it is fact...
4/10

cant use a personal on him cuz he has no personality...
hes a robot speaking jiberish its shit... hoe tot with split anatomy...
6/10

he couldn't be wacker if he changed his name to sinner...
no way he'd be a winner in a battle cuz he gets ate for dinner...
3/10

By another guy... why... he's gayer than gay porn...
get your head severed like jesus when he got suck by thorn...
4/10

and I ain't bein' demonic i smoke herbs like you like chronic...
you suck dicks while I shoot off more bricks than the supersonics...
5/10

Next time you fuckin' step up to face tarik donovan...
your momma will be cryin' tryin' to pick out your coffin...
7/10

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it is what is I underestimated you my nigga... good flow there

thanks for the vote...

for the record.... when I came in august I was representin' RA we was gon challenge this site to a Ultimate battle.... but whateva' I jus came back today and I only had what 2 posts when I came and I been on here since 1 o clock battlin' but whateva....

thanks for the vote parallel

appreciated.......

Voted For: Tarik Donovan

Easy Easy win for This Tarik guy.

Not the best verse I'v seen from him, and thast bein nice, but he pretty much killled you dude.

Lawless, that was the biggest bunch of randomness I ever seen, you had no punches, no nothing really, you may aswell have written wack 100 times over.

Obvious Win.

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damn cuz.... I didn't know you felt that way tward me?

n e wayz I don't give a fucc thanks fa ya vote... looks like LAW gon take his first....

I need it....
I boast too much
n e ways thanks for the comments I didn't think my shit was AWFUL damn... I guess I gotta elevate....

yeah i thought you had one man good battle tho....

Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

ight battle but lawless took it good verse by both but lawless had betta punches n flow um......tarik pick up on yo punches u had ight ones but dey was kinda played elevate both

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Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

ay homie dat was hard,dem punches,were actually punches

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thanks for all the positive feed back I thought I was through... I atually thought these niggas was crazy but I reviewed his verse and he was ill but I still don't think I should lose.... but I guess it's first to four...

yo vote on this it is a very good battle ppl there will be no dissapointment

upping...

yeah.....
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Voted For: Tarik Donovan

Tarik won this one for me.... Definately had better punches and wordplay... The personals were better in Lawless's but i definately liked tarik donovan's personals better...
Best Line:
he couldn't be wacker if he changed his name to sinner...
no way he'd be a winner in a battle cuz he gets ate for dinner...

Please Return Teh Favor @ http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165710

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upping we need some votes on this...

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Voted For: Tarik Donovan

Vote for Lawless
Lawless:
Your metaphors were crazy and you had a nice flow. your similies were good. ur punches hit hard. eg..
"it's ironic how he pussy and can't find it where it be no price
knowin' damn well he couldn't get blown if he was casino dice"
The bad thing is you had no personals.
Tarik Donovan:
your flow wuz hot but some of your lines were just filler. your first line wuz hot, but it seems you were more concentrated on making the second line ryhme, that you didn't add in another punch. you had plenty of hot lines, but too many lines that were useless. eg.. and I ain't bein' demonic i smoke herbs like you like chronic. your flow is good, but you need to work on your content more. I liked the line, "you suck dicks while I shoot off more bricks than the supersonics."

Both of you were good, but lawless won. Holla at ur boi

-freddy p-

vote for lawless (Hs)
 

Vote for Lawless (Hs)
Lawless:
Your metaphors were crazy and you had a nice flow. your similies were good. ur punches hit hard. eg..
"it's ironic how he pussy and can't find it where it be no price
knowin' damn well he couldn't get blown if he was casino dice"
The bad thing is you had no personals.
Tarik Donovan:
your flow wuz hot but some of your lines were just filler. your first line wuz hot, but it seems you were more concentrated on making the second line ryhme, that you didn't add in another punch. you had plenty of hot lines, but too many lines that were useless. eg.. and I ain't bein' demonic i smoke herbs like you like chronic. your flow is good, but you need to work on your content more. I liked the line, "you suck dicks while I shoot off more bricks than the supersonics."

Both of you were good, but lawless won. Holla at ur boi

-freddy p-[/QUOTE]

tha computer's fuckin wit me cuz i voted 4 lawless

nks for the vote it doesn't go unnoticed aye if you voted for me or tarik none of that shit counted cuz you didnt do it battlewise in otha words you freeposted your votes so we would appreacite it if you would come back and do your votes in categories...
thanks ppl....

until voters return to this topic to restate their votes it's
(LAW)0-0(tarik)

upping... I should have changed the post count to 100 cuz these damn herbs don't know how to vote.

tarik, holla at tha kid. i set up tha battle, post ur verse

-freddy p-

Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

Lawless:

Flow-8/10
Punches-8/10
Wordplay-7/10 (too basic man)
Personals-6/10

Tarik:

Flow-6/10
Punches-6/10
Wordplay-4/10
Personals-0/10

Lawless-29/40

Tarik-16/40

Both verses were pretty basic...Lawless, I've seen much more creative punches from you in the past, so I was a little disappointed when reading your verse, but your shit still struck harder than his.

Tarik, your verse was weak man...Way too much self-glorification. When you are in a battle, don't waste time talking about how good you are...You gotta go straight for his throat. Your punches were basic, and you had some shitty-ass wordplay...Elevate though man...You'll get it...1

2-0 me....

THAT DAMN SYSTEM THING IS FUCKIN' UP.... that guy voted for me...

Voted For: Lawless (Hs)

Aight......
not a bad battle

Lawless ya came alot harder, wasnt as basic within your flow as your oppenet, only flaw is the way u structured ya flow, dont seperate bars like that man....

ya had better punches, an metaphors, ya played off famous people in ya rhymes too, thats cool, i do that alot too, good verse...
ya get my vote

Tarik, ya verse was aight
it flowed an the structure was alot better than Lawless, but ya didnt come as hard with the mats n punches, they was less witty so i cant vote for u on the fact ya structure was better
just be more creative with ya wordplay

No hate an RTF In any of my battles ya see on front lines or whatever

Thanks

Peace n g'luck y'all