GangsStarShit vs d.j em sce
 

Battle Rules:


6-10 lines
no biting
blah blah blah
watever....you no the rules

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-16-04 at 05:04 AM

Must drop verse in 20 minutes after check in.

are you gonna except the battle or not................

d.j em sce has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-04 04:40 AM.

damn this kid is eager to get his lose..he already got this battle link in his sig and aint even checked in yet.....


your infantile style cant compete to my dexterous verbal rhapsody's
spitten at a high velocity is da only way to past your loosing capacity
you should have known im an mc who loves to kill people
you just got murdered….so theres neva gonna be a ill sequel
kid you tryna rain but im changing the forecast like a weather man
im a veteran so next time stick to battling niggas dat you better than
ur not even fully developed so how u gonna get da bigga picture
dis aint a kodak moment its ur death in sum lyrical scriptures
damn im confused its like you wanted to loose at any cost
cuz even in the rules it stated that gangsstarshit already lost


aight real fast spit..i dont want to accidently get a noshow

GangsStarShit has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-04 04:57 AM.

are you done yet....i need to go to sleep im hella tired...............

lol...got my link all messed up...oh well lol...good luck

well that was aight but i beat ambition.....but ohwell...

i know...lol...i thought ya lost against him...oh well like you im tired but lets get votes in now

yeah........but now oyu see why i put that in the rules.....lol

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This was feedback posted for d.j em sce
 

this was an ok verse a lil bit stretched at times ide suggest while your writing do it to an instremental and ull see your stretched lines but overall good job

i have to say gangstar held this one down with an all around better style he was consistant but them small letters gotsta go bra for real my eyes hurt

This was feedback posted for d.j em sce
 

why are you battlin newbs....just leaving feedback...but i thought you won anyway..

Voted For: GangsStarShit

Daym, D Was Mad Cocky For Someone Who Easily Lost...
Here's The Breakdown...

Punches: G.S.
Wordplay: G.S.
Flow: D
Creativity: G.S.
Structure: G.S.
Overall Enjoyment: G.S.

Dj Got Owned Pretty Much...
.One.

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^^^hate vote...but its coo strobe will take care of that...........

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uppin for voters............................................ .....

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Voted For: d.j em sce

GangStarShit:
Whoever said you were dope...musta been kiddin,
Coz u only cause drafts from exhailin when spittin,
Mediocre opener, punch wasn't that hard
You paid the price although it's free-hatin-me,
And u've been spittin wack...since you lost CreatiVitie,
Decent personal, setup was weak though
Face it ya overrated and people jus dickride the shit you do,
Ya spits are lame shit i seen bacon spit better than you,
Weak, concept could've been worded better
Dexterious?...u the ginger midget makin up shit all day,*
And if you think your dope?...i'd hate to sce em d.j,
Better...nice play off his name
You take stuff too serious like it's a god damn mission,
And i'm afraid i can't help ya coz ya lost ya ambition
Weak closer, punch didn't really connect since he beat Ambition

d.j em sce:
your infantile style cant compete to my dexterous verbal rhapsody's
spitten at a high velocity is da only way to past your loosing capacity
Ok opener, not much of a punch but good vocab usage
you should have known im an mc who loves to kill people
you just got murdered….so theres neva gonna be a ill sequel
Weak...
kid you tryna rain but im changing the forecast like a weather man
im a veteran so next time stick to battling niggas dat you better than
Decent, setup was good but punch could've been better
ur not even fully developed so how u gonna get da bigga picture
dis aint a kodak moment its ur death in sum lyrical scriptures
Decent, nice meta here
damn im confused its like you wanted to loose at any cost
cuz even in the rules it stated that gangsstarshit already lost
Lol this was a bogus closer 'cuz you pretty much had that planned out...

Winner: d.j em sce, for harder punches and better wordplay. I've seen better from both of you though, this one was't that good of a battle.

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Voted For: GangsStarShit

This goes to GangStarShit. Structure str8 punches str8 creativity str8. I'm not sure but that looks like a personal. str8.
DJ you had played lines. No hard punches coming from that. Nice creativity though......

Vote GGS

Voted For: GangsStarShit

Ok, this was hard to vote on. You both have real different styles in battling. I feel that GSS has a more text style with his punches and DJ has a more live battling style.

Its hard to choose which one I like better aswell. If I'm gonna vote on this soly as text, then I think GSS might take it. His style used wordplay even from the first bar.. dj, ya shit aint weak by any means, but I picture it more like a freestyled live battle where as GSS took more time comming up with wordplay text punches.

Its not easy to choose on this shit man, but dj brutha, I think ya might of underestimated his shit. He was able to make better use of personals even tho the last one didnt really work..

To keep this vote short though, Im gonna go with gss on this. Creative man it was good, just was more of a freestyle.. Lacked punches in some areas.. Would of been better audio.

Peace.

Here is my vote.

GangsStarShit had this because he had more hard hittin punches and nice structure and creativity. Flow was off but the rest of the verse made it dope. The personal wasn’t good. I looked at it as a punch. Not hard htting though.

DJ you had played lines. Flow was there but ya need to ap about beating them lyrically not physically. :D…. Punches were weak. Structure need to work on that but like it really matters I could read it. Wordplay was nice but they needa be connected with punches.


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Voted For: GangsStarShit

aight this was a pretty good battle, tough one to judge so imma break it down for yall right here:

DJ- you came pretty hard, structure was pretty good although one or 2 lines were a little stretched but not too bad... flow was good throughout the peice and thats a pluss... punches and personals tho i feel could have hit a lil harder than they did... creativity and vocab was good so all in all this was an aight peice man.... 6.5/10

GSS- aight you came hard as well... structure was great which made the flow great as well, you used pretty good vocab in there as well which made for a good read... punches and personals i feel won this one for you, they were just to good to ignore, i would have wanted to see more multis from both of you but thats aight......overall 8/10

this was a tight battle.... both of you came hard as fuck and i def. respect that. DJ no hate bro but i think GSS got this one on the punches and personals, the rest i would have to say that it was a tie pretty much all around................. so overall good battle and no hate to either of you...........

VOTE-GangsStarShit

DAYUM...shit went from 1-0 to 4-1 like a mutha fucka...

im gonna have strobe go over some of these votes....in a lil bit..bvut yeah uuppin........

Voted For: d.j em sce

this was a good battle....when i first read gangstar's verse i thought that he was gonna win..but then after reading dj's i had to think about it.....here is the breakdown
opener:tie(both good)
wordplay:gangstar
punches:dj
vocab:dj
flow:tie
closer:gangstar's
*the categories were tied so it had to go to the person wit better punches*

gangstar-very good opener, liked the wordplay in it alot, good flow, basically good flow throughout the whole verse..also ended it good with the link.......you could have improved on your vocab, and came wit some better punches...other than that it was all good.

dj em sce-good opener, good vocab, punches could also be improved a little, but they were better than the opponents...also had a good closer.....could have improved on wordplay..

both-both people could improve on their punches...dj didnt have very many multies, but he had more than gangstar....gangstar is very good in the wordplay part of battles....dj is very good with vocab and word choice in battles...
overall; a very close battle....my vote goes to dj

v/d.j em sce

Voted For: GangsStarShit

GGS:
nice verse, good structure, good flow and punches.

DJ:
You didnt even try... lol... other shit of yours > this verse..
very weak.. -_-

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Dunno why your bitchin consider it 41-11 :thumbup:

Voted For: GangsStarShit

Whoever said you were dope...musta been kiddin,
Coz u only cause drafts from exhailin when spittin,
^^^nice opner.... flowed well
You paid the price although it's free-hatin-me,
And u've been spittin wack...since you lost CreatiVitie,
^^^^still flowing well.... an aight punch
Face it ya overrated and people jus dickride the shit you do,
Ya spits are lame shit i seen bacon spit better than you,
^^^^good meta
Dexterious?...u the ginger midget makin up shit all day,*
And if you think your dope?...i'd hate to sce em d.j,
^^^^hahaha lol... good hard htting personal
You take stuff too serious like it's a god damn mission,
And i'm afraid i can't help ya coz ya lost ya ambition,
^^^^an aight closer
Good verse here.... it flowed well al through out...

your infantile style cant compete to my dexterous verbal rhapsody's
spitten at a high velocity is da only way to past your loosing capacity
^^^^mmm.... an aight opener... bit of self glorify
you should have known im an mc who loves to kill people
you just got murdered….so theres neva gonna be a ill sequel
^^^^na..... weak...
kid you tryna rain but im changing the forecast like a weather man
im a veteran so next time stick to battling niggas dat you better than
......^^ you aint a vet... dont self glorify....
ur not even fully developed so how u gonna get da bigga picture
dis aint a kodak moment its ur death in sum lyrical scriptures
^^^no..... most likely a prew ritten punch....
damn im confused its like you wanted to loose at any cost
cuz even in the rules it stated that gangsstarshit already lost
^^^^na..... weak... no real wordplay anywhere
Pretty simple verse by you so my vote goes to
gangstershit

Voted For: d.j em sce

lol dj one this... it was kinda close.. im just not feeling m-dogs style.. i wasnt feeling the overusage of vocab by create but he still took this with better punches.. flow was about even.. but structure goes to GSS... so this was a close one DJ just edged with his punches.. no hate.. just elevate..

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Voted For: GangsStarShit

open:GSS: "Whoever said you were dope...musta been kiddin,
Coz u only cause drafts from exhailin when spittin," -Good opener, hard punch, good use of metas. I think em sce was trying too hard to get good complicated vocab in there he forgot about making it actually good!

close:GSS: "You take stuff too serious like it's a god damn mission,
And i'm afraid i can't help ya coz ya lost ya ambition," -Pure genius!! Personal, hard-hitting punch line, metaphor.
-em sce's close was ok but im afraid doesnt even compare.

GangsStarShit's best line:
"Face it ya overrated and people jus dickride the shit you do,
Ya spits are lame shit i seen bacon spit better than you," -i dont think ive seen many verses as good as this in a battle and this line just topped it off I think.

Em sce's Best line:
"ur not even fully developed so how u gonna get da bigga picture
dis aint a kodak moment its ur death in sum lyrical scriptures" -This was quite good. But to be honest i dont think even this line came close to GSS's worst in this verse.

Overall: GSS wiped the floor with DJ em sce. Anyone who thinks otherwise is a liar!!!! This isnt opionion it is fact. GSS's use of metaphors, personals, punchlines and overall entertainment of the verse was far superior to most battle verses i have seen on this whole site.

-Keep it up.

DJ em sce: you are obviously good. Your vocab was good, you did have a good use of metas but mainly your pnches were weaker. Dont take this as hate, i am just saying wat i think

Voted For: GangsStarShit

Best battle I have seen in a while though you both come
nice, Gangsta's personals and punches hit harder I though.
DJ come nice but G won this on the personals...

Ganstas best bar:
You paid the price although it's free-hatin-me,
And u've been spittin wack...since you lost CreatiVitie
^This punch won the battle for me,.. Hard hitting
personal, Nice Vocab, Nice flow.

DJ's best Punch:
kid you tryna rain but im changing the forecast like a weather man
im a veteran so next time stick to battling niggas dat you better than
^Good set up hard hitting punch, OK vocab, Nice flow...

I feel Gangsta won this battle, he had much better personals
which made the punches hit harder for more...

Dj come nice but I didn't really see any personals.

Vote ~ Gangsta