MaRVJay1009 vs Ill.Bill
 

Battle Rules:

10...lines
No Crew or hate Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

lets go fagget...check da fukk in

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-25-04 at 12:29 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Ill.Bill has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-22-04 12:31 PM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-22-04 08:46 PM.

look....

da name jay n im so sick,ill.bill's trash dis lame i just dont get
he madd cuzz i meet his "half" sista n gave her my "whole" dick
no girls know how ya penis taste,so u dont shit bout bein str8
"ill.bill" datz whut all da bitches say when see ya face.....lol
so dont bleieve dis homo when he fukkin say he sick......
he dumb he da only 1 i know dat gota "stand" up da "babi-sit"
from now when i throw a pucnh at ya bitch you stay silent...
look at ya record lol only "W" u eva got was a "wu tang album"
u got guns? punk spray me!,now i see dat son crazee......
rv is ya life fam u keep da "net on ya head" like "lunch lady's"

........................^. Funny Dude...Lets Get Some Votes.

Voted For: Ill.Bill

Marv, I Need Vaxanation, Coz I Just Put My Foot-In-Ya-Mouth.
The Digits On Ya Name Depict Ya Ranking, Ya Not Climbing,Ya Plummetin South!
Not too bad, structure off a little. Punch landed 6/10
You Fucking Stink, Coz Even Ya Own verse Needs Deodorant.
Marv Cant Hold Out, Hes a Sentimental Fool, Thats y He 'sang 4 the moment'.
Structure off again but there is apttern so your not losing marks for that. Good use of metas and good personal punch that landed 7/10
Face It Noone Likes You, Your Mom Shoulda Just Abort.
You Still Think You Ill? Just Coz Of The Ass Crack You Snort?
Nice. I liked this, good meta, hard punch, funny as fuck!! 8/10
New To Rv...Well Imma Flush Your Career Down The Drain.
Quicker Than Martin Bashir, Demoralised MJ's Fuckin Fame.
Pretty good, personal, not bad punch 6/10
Now That May Be Played^.But Ya Verse Is Bound To Be Trash.
Marvs The Opposite Of Rain Man = Incapable Of Doing The Math.
Very good playing wiv him here. meta use superb 8/10

35/50 70%



da name jay n im so sick,ill.bill's trash dis lame i just dont get
he madd cuzz i meet his "half" sista n gave her my "whole" dick
Good wordplay, hard punch. Good opener 7/10
no girls know how ya penis taste,so u dont shit bout bein str8
"ill.bill" datz whut all da bitches say when see ya face.....lol
Good but could av been better. 5/10
so dont bleieve dis homo when he fukkin say he sick......
he dumb he da only 1 i know dat gota "stand" up da "babi-sit"
Not very good actually. Maybe i dont get it but this is weak. 4/10
from now when i throw a pucnh at ya bitch you stay silent...
look at ya record lol only "W" u eva got was a "wu tang album"
Where is the rhyme????? Only reason you get marks for this is cos its quite funny. 4/10
u got guns? punk spray me!,now i see dat son crazee......
rv is ya life fam u keep da "net on ya head" like "lunch lady's"
This is much more like it. Fucking quality closer!!! 9/10

29/50 58%

Overall you do the maths. Sorry marve. Wasnt bad but lost it in the middle.

Well done Ill Bill, good win and good verse.

Voted For: Ill.Bill

Vote: mask

haha :laugh: @ marv --merked by a blatant alias

openr: mask
closer: mask
wordplay: mask
originality: mask
punches: mask
personals: mask
vocab: mask
lyrics: mask
structure: mask
multis: neitha
flow: mask

mask - 8.5/10
marv - 7/10

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

i thought this was a tight ass battle nice drop for a noob...

well the flow was preety even so i'll say tie...
punches i thought marv just edge it out with the last bar which i thought was the best bar in this battle that hit hard...

u got guns? punk spray me!,now i see dat son crazee......
rv is ya life fam u keep da "net on ya head" like "lunch lady's"
^^ that was nice creative and hit hard....

creativeness it was preety even but i have to say marv just edge it out as-well...

vote: marv not bad for a noob....

Return Da Favour!!!!....................................

No.^. Vote For Me Again yo, on My YoungSoulja Battle ;). <Honest Though,Hoe.
True Merkage Marv. Bitch. Upping For Some More Votes.

ummm uppin 4 more votes n ppl and pleez explain ya shit

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checkin pollz .....................

whut da fukk?^^^^^^ yo can we get dis shit close..vote ppl

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

he get my vote good shit he had better flow and better hits good shit
check my open battles out
chuck low vs.denied truth
chuck low vs. kkkhater
chucklow vs.

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

here is my feedback and vote

flow mask
structure marv
opener-closure tie
rhyming marv
personals marv
imagry marv
multi marv
overall marv

and please hit up on my link and leave an honest vote peace.

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Voted For: Ill.Bill

awwwww fo' sho' shit -- mask u have fukin phat lines dawg..................... both u homies came hard here.like shit... mask my vote goes to you because u had way hard punches wack flow... alrite i guess but some nasty rhymes best lines were ....Marv, I Need Vaxanation, Coz I Just Put My Foot-In-Ya-Mouth.
The Digits On Ya Name Depict Ya Ranking, Ya Not Climbing,Ya Plummetin South!
You Fucking Stink, Coz Even Ya Own verse Needs Deodorant.
Marv Cant Hold Out, Hes a Sentimental Fool, Thats y He 'sang 4 the moment'
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ lololol funny shit.... yo keep it up aiight

now for Marv oyur good i saw your other battles you have awesome rhymes just need t oelevate ,,,,no hate or beeef aiight ..... spit in our battle........... yo holla bak wif some honest votes below.............. agaisnt me and unknown,,,,,, thnx

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lol^^^...uppin 4 more votes

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Aii this is how i feel

MJ1009
This Is Very Good verse i really wasnt lookin for mistakes to tell you were you did wrong but youll look over your verse and see whats missin...................im voting for you bcuz you came harder wit the punchez and meta's and so there

ill.bill
Like you said you dint even try bcuz you wouldve came better than that mees you posted but n e ways i cant say i liked ya verse but i can say work on ya style bcuz that was seriuosly messed up and i Hope you do elevate in the future

*********************************************** The Favor Better Be return or else lol j/k***************
* but plz do im askin as a favor plz do return the favor....peace************************************

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aight uppin lets get dis shit closed 2day ppl

uppin 4 some more votes dis shit been up 4 2 long now

uppin...damm dis nigga aint even tryin da help me up dis shit how fukkin long does it take da close a battle..lets go ppl

Voted For: Ill.Bill

OK MARV STRUCTURE OFF NO GOOD PUNCHES REALLY DISSES LACK AS WELL ONLY GOOD LINE WAS THE WU TANG SHIT PLAYED PUNCHES AND WEAK VOCAB A 3/10
MASK GOOD ASS VOCAB STRUTCURE WAS OK GOOD OPENER PUNCHES WERE AIGHT ALSO AND DISSES HIT WELL AND WERE WELL WORDED AND THAT GOT YOU MY VOTE5/10

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uppin 4 some more votes lets go ppl

Voted For: Ill.Bill

mask took this easily....

marv - ur verse was blah cos ur punches were plain n basic nothin really behind them, structure was o.k but even ya flow wasn't great, no complexity n thats why u lost here

mask - lol i loved the opener original n funny, flow was very gud n most of ya lines were original which makes this an easy choice, feel like i've read ur stuff b4 under another name, other than the ill.bill n mask.....hmmm any nice

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

lmfao damn marv dat last line was da deciding factor nigga...i thought i was gon pick ill til i read dat line nigga...

uppin 4 some more votes ppl

uppin 4 some more votes

Voted For: Ill.Bill

Opener- Marv
structure- Mask (much easier to read and understand)
Punchlines- Mask
Multis-Marv (both need work though)
Creativity- Mask
Personals- Mask (Marv u didnt have many personals at all)
Vote- Mask

^^^ Up there instead of mask i meant Ill bill
srry
That was the last name on the list and i got confused my bad
Not mask ill bill

return the favor vote on my battle
Vs String

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

i wasnt gonna give my vote to MARV until the later half of his verse. the first part was pretty wack to b blunt. but then it got 100% better with the punches and their creativity. Mask's verse wasn't all that hot so it didnt take much to roll over him

uppin 4 more votes

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

flow-marvjay
multies-tie
punches-mask
vocab-mask
overall-mask

both verses were pretty good, mask just barely got this one

uppin 4 more votes

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yall both wack & if any of yall wanna c me call me out an ill bitch slap ur ass

lmaoo^^^^^ shut up nigga uppin 4 more votes

Voted For: MaRVJay1009

NarV got this cuz his structure was perfectan his punches came bac to bac. Bill yo verse was cool but yo punches wasn't dat hard an yo structure was kind of off.
So this is MarRVJay win