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Socrates vs anxiety
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20-40 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topical battle Topic=The Hardest Part Minimum posts to vote: 300 Check in by: 12-23-04 at 01:06 AM Must drop verse in 120 minutes after check in. |
Socrates has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 12:36 AM.
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anxiety has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 12:52 AM.
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She was my best freind at first, a comfortable shoulder to rest my head
We shoulda kept us between us, and yet we listened to the rest instead We will never know who caught the feelings first, a mystery till the end But I know the exact second that all my feelings had rushed in My dad had died and I found out while simply chillin at her house I started cryin and she begged me just to simply let it out I rested on her bed, bawling with no end to possibly be seen She sat down on a wicker chair at the exact opposite of me I saw her eyes tear up a bit, I threw my own selfish needs aside I got up wiped my own salty droplets, and found a seat right beside Took up my pride and found myself with my lips touching hers And yet I washed away the shock with a flood of loving words She looked up into the sky and uttered syllables I couldnt comprehend And I believe thats the moment that my love for her begins So we called eachother partners, told close friends whats up Hold hands constantly in public and behind closed doors make love It went like this for years, love turned into engagement, then to marraige And not too long after we both decided to become parents So we were the average perfect couple, left others envious Thats when the flock of vulture like rumors began to circle us Shes cheating this!, He's screwing that! came to no stop So I suppose our own weakness was to blame, our own faults That the night came that I walked home in a drunken stooper With a horny mind, saw a hooker and decided I wanna do her Bitch was cheap too, fucked for about an hour and then... My wife drove by in a Volkswagen thats holding our kids... It took me a minute to notice, how quickly she drove off angry I shoulda jumped off the ho, but a nut was why i'm paying Payed the bitch threw on my pants, and strolled home in disbelief What the fuck am I going to do? Just claim it wasn't me? Got home round midnight still a buzz was the main feeling Opened the door to find what was a dead silent building Walked up stairs, wiped away the sweat more then ready to face her dude Took a deep breath cuz the distance was merely a pace or two Opened the door smiling acting like aint shit happened And found nothing but a blood stained floor and a napkin Must I really explain what happened? Even as a drunk I can't lie That the hardest part of my life will always be saying goodbye... Well, my first is done....g'luck :) |
When you start out, you wanna get good and elevate ya game... When you elevate, you wanna get known and celebrate ya fame... So much to know in rap, so many decisions that can go each way... So much to master, to where you practice it each day... Gotta appeal to the crowd, and to other emcee's be dope too... You get to a point where a 7/10 just wont do... Provin ya self to others, seemed to have become a lost cause... But then your rippin through the seam work just like a dog's claws... Ya start to roller coaster, good and bad day... Your talent starts to seem like it could go either way... You switch it up, maybe use a multie here and there... You got writers block, ya brain doesnt have a thought to share... So you look for a vets name, gonna call him out to prove your self... And when you beat him you always remember how fuckin cool ya felt... Another win notch to add to ya belt... But somethings missin... It's that you just beat a vet but still you got no recognition... Now you go in EFL, cause you ego just exploded... Ya confident as hell, and oh fuck ya loaded... You talk disrepect to the person who answers you're bitch slapped... Cause now you can diss, but you gon get dissed back... After you're first L you think "do i wanna risk that?" Now you gotta decide, contemplate while you sit back... You decide you wanna get ya game up before you battle again... And you aint confident when you come back so you battle a friend... And you win. So ya feel like you're on top of youre game... And you tryout for a crew, so some more kids know your name... You think that now you got some brand new braggin rights... Mouthin off to real vets while you're acting tight... Now your realize your mistake and shit just gets harder... Takes a lot to do to actally propell farthur... But pretty soon you're known, you gain a name... And at first it's pretty hard to stay the same... But you still dont have the one thing you wanted from the start... It's harder to reach than anything, it's farther from the stars... It's the one thing you seeked, what you aimed to get... The hardest part of rap is to gain respect... |
Nice verse Soc... Good battle.....................
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Damn yo, I was feeling that verse of yours, same shit happened to me, no lie. Good luck homie :thumbup:
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Yeah this is mos def. the best topical battle i have seen in a while.
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Voted For: anxiety
You switch it up, maybe use a multie here and there... You got writers block, ya brain doesnt have a thought to share... So you look for a vets name, gonna call him out to prove your self... And when you beat him you always remember how fuckin cool ya felt... Another win notch to add to ya belt... But somethings missin... It's that you just beat a vet but still you got no recognition... ^^^best part of anxieties drop I liked tha angle Anxiety took talkin bot tha hardest parts of rap, werent feelin Soc's drop cos of tha theme it came from...........both drops had gd wordplay, topic coverage and vocab..but i was jus feelin Anxieties' drop about rap.. Anxiety - 9/10 Soc - 8.5/10 RETURN THA FAVOUR ON MY TOPICAL WIT REALISTIK!!!!!!! LINK IN SIG |
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Voted For: anxiety
close battle anxiety...just amazing verse in my opinion flow-anxiety, probably flawless here...u didnt come with big words that messed up your flow instead you stayed simple and it paid off imagery-socrates, the words soc used brought out more imagery and anx didnt have any since he was talking about something that cant really be described as something you see...but instead something you feel emotion-anxiety, i related to anx's verse a lot more and i felt a lot of emotion into it since the thing that i care about most is respect and im always trying my hardest to get recognition...so i related to this verse and thought it had a lot more feeling into it beginning/end-anxiety,i thought both had tie beginnings but the ending is a big part in topicals to me and i think socrates's ending felt a little too common...its something a lot of people forget about including me and it felt kind of like i knew it was going to happen...anx since it wasnt a story the ending is easier and it made me relate a lot more with the whole respect thing so anx got this aspect for a better ending no hate to nobody both dropped good shit but anx got this to me for basically more emotion, and flow his verse grabbed me more then soc's good luck to both peace |
Word, as long as I did decentyl then i'm happy....
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Yeah you did good... Upping.........................
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Upping yet again......................................
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Bitches viewin and not voting?
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This was feedback posted for anxiety
...checkin' the polls gentlemen...^^^UPPIN'!!!^^^
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This was feedback posted for Socrates
stupid dope both of you. i think soc took it but im just checkin to see whats up
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Voted For: anxiety
anxiety: I absolutely LOVE your approach on the topic because it's all truth and so easy for all of us to relate to. It's the one thing you seeked, what you aimed to get... The hardest part of rap is to gain respect... ^your ending says it all... Like how the story progressed: on top, down to earth, top of ya game...and so on and so forth. Found good balance with your vocab and had your flow on lock, structure was nice. Was a very good read because it kept you focussed throughout the whole thing, showed us how quick these things can change. Had this "in your face" attitude, just telling it how it is which I was feeling for sure! Tight piece... Socrates: you had a dope approach on topic as well, allowed you to use more emotion than the twist anxiety gave to it. Vocab was nice, not too basic but not too complicated either so it remained easy to follow. Story progressed real well even though everything happened quite fast in the part in middle. The ending was quite well even though you might have had somewhat stronger emotion there but overall,it was raw and good. So we were the average perfect couple, left others envious Thats when the flock of vulture like rumors began to circle us ^like these lines, especially the "average perfect couple", it's like a contradictio in terminis... In the end, my vote goes to anxiety because I liked his approach of the topic a little more because it's easier for everyone to relate to and has such a sense of reality but both did really well! |
This was feedback posted for Socrates
.................................. good both... upping for you cuz i'm bored... hey hoe's wanna battle me
Soc, In text? < You know I won't complain bout d/r or make a beef thread if I lose lol ;) Anxiety, In topical? Soc, damn, stay on msn when you get on, instead of signing off right away |
This was feedback posted for Socrates
I just wanna check the polls..
Good battle indian boys. |
This battle is now officially...
Gay |
This was feedback posted for Socrates
dayum... this shit is still opened?
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This was feedback posted for Socrates
you suk dick socrates.................................
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Voted For: Socrates
im giving this to u because i think there was more emotion in this peice and i could realate to it i guess flow was good imagery was good just work on ur vocab anx urs was good to but work on ur vocab ur imagery was there but it wasnt as powerful as soc good battle to both though props |
This was feedback posted for anxiety
checkin pollz .
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This was feedback posted for anxiety
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Voted For: anxiety
Socrates-WOW.This was damn good.Liked the concept.About the couple relationship thing.About the middle where he was going back home..we kinda saw the ending coming.Suicide is a lil played nowadays in topicals.But the rest was all good.Didn't see much filler..stayed on the topic.Good shit. Anxiety-Again..WOW.This also..was damn good.I esspecialy loved the topic.With the whole rap thing.Speccialy since all of us here can relate to that.So creativity was a full blow out..in your favor.I liked the transition in your verse too.Didn't see any fillers.But I think you got this for creativity Vote-Anxiety RTF BELOW....(It's topical as well :thumbup:) http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206909 |
Voted For: Socrates
OMFG i thought socrates was fucking invincible! OLOLOL GOOD LUCK.... |
taek that vote off
yeah yeah YES SUH......... |
This was feedback posted for anxiety
Polling this and shit like woah...................
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Voted For: anxiety
checking polls, cuz I'm helpful................... Removed |
Voted For: anxiety
this was a dope battle.... Socrates....i was most definitely feeling your verse, you flowed well and stayed consistent to the topic. the story you told is a real life situation that many people suffer with so its easy to understand....u got your point across and delivered a nice picture of the whole struggle to be a couple aspect, and then the whole struggle to stay a couple and how it all fell apart, so in actual fact you addressed the topic in multiple ways through telling a single story. your vocabs weren't that complex really, kind of basic so that could be improved upon, i feel ure biggest plus was the emotion in ure piece and the ending to it was real nice. OVERALL: 7.5/10 Anxiety......very nice piece, an interesting approach to the topic and not something i wud've expected. you did flow very well and stayed consistent to the topic also. the real thing i like about your piece is that the whole concept speaks to everyone really on RV so everyone can really relate to the verse through personal experience. u didnt go for the story aspect and went with a more definition kind of approach, defining the topic through what people must do to achieve respect. ure vocabs weren't all super complex but they had the edge in this battle, and i think that ure verse had a lot of meaning to which was a good thing, OVERALL: 8/10 overall i give the battle to anxiety, because whilst both pieces had their own good aspects and were pretty much matched toe to toe with quality, i can relate more to anxiety's piece from personal experience of my own so therefore i enjoyed the piece that little bit more. V/ - anxiety plz rtf in my young blaze battle, links in the siggy :cool: werd |
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