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Viscosity vs Acuity
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Rules: No D/R No Crew (ill blacklist ur whole crew, just incase. - you can do the same). No hate, no recyling, biting. 2 Days to Check in. 2 Days to Drop after check in. Illusionary Diplomats vs New Breed. Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 12-25-04 at 12:39 AM Must drop verse in 2880 minutes after check in. Expired battle win - close |
Acuity has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 06:02 PM.
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Viscosity has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 08:09 PM.
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Wont have time to post any other day, or write any other day..
so here u go.. Topic: Rain... *Childs perspective* Clouds black, as mother nature swallows the sky, in an eternal beating explosions in the night, soldiers fall onto the grass, causing dead plants to start breathing children scared, as the city blocks are surrounded & flood'd, as rain marches to the sewers sucked under the vexpipe, to indue new life, underground & persue a new strike... while I drink this gift from God, my dad tries to fight, to survive from sinking under its might im scared but love to sleep under the drizzle, to much is far beyond, while I love just the little crackin off my window, & splashes down the screen helping anything grow thats green I twitch when I hear a crackle smash in the sky, but as I sadden, the rain takes my pain .& does itself to cry. *Animal perspective* No where to run or ride, but love as it trickles on my warm hide sleep under the cool mist in the dawn, as my young fawn drinkes the dew off a neighborhing lawn.. Jumpy as light smashes my forrage, & causes heat to hurt the green that we've come to love & need.. but the water falling from the black extingushe's the red as it continues to bleed, & spread to fast.. the plants seem healthier & vast as I watch the water spread threw the bricks.. slurp on the tracks filled with nicks, of left behind flood.. *Rain* Far back as the dynosaurs, causing destruction to emerge before man spoke words, we replenished the fruits for the herd's beast drank to stay alive, & survive healthy, to chase the weak the meek, sank as the reptile hid in our swamps, we created with floods before there was... ...hate & knots, we flooded threw the Nile to create feared legends, by puffed milds of scarcity.. God created us, & lighting married me, coming up with me where I plunge into the midst, as clouds appear people know were near, & run to closed off places intricting fear, we keep things alive & also die We were powerful before mankind found a place to store us in this dark chamber, clean us, & leave us with waterlike creatures drink us.. & hang us on your clothes, but need us, when were tear drops... |
The Rain It's been years since something was growing, no rains, no crops showing Hard work unreflected, we're rewarded with land by God that is neglected Our families are dieing of starvation, and despite many international donations And our every frustration, nothing wants to grow on our plantations So day-by-day one more dies of malnutrition, its a terrifying daily position Awaking to see your kids rib-cage, because his skin hangs off him like he got the plague Burying many before they come of age, disease florishes, 15per day die of AIDS Fuck aid, governement keeps it, they living large cos they getting paid Our only desire is a drip of rain, we aint needing another Oxfam campaign From rain we have so much to gain, pre-domiantly the growth of our sugar cane If we grew our own food, it would spark change, simultaneously lift the mood It would break the cylical cycle of poverty, decrease our dependance, eleviate disease Give us the means, to be self-sufficient and feed, our own and buy farming machines If the rain came and then it was over, afterwards the sun would begin to glow Buds would shoot, water would flow, and our crops would start to grow Amazing the power of nature and the skies, its imerciful and knows not of compromise What do I have to do to feel and trace, rain trickle down the contours of my face Its cool liquitious form, refreshing the soul, land, allowing things to be reborn Ressurecting us with its warmth, riches falling from the sky in a metaphorical silver storm Often asked why we don't sever our ties, leave this land, say our goodbyes But this outr place of origin,to leave, in the eyes of our ancestors is a sin Moreover we settled here, its peaceful, secluded, nothing to trouble the ear It is where we belong, and we will stay here until the very last one of us is gone Sitting, dreaming of rains to come, and patter on the ground like a snare drum Looking towards the sky, praying it'll quench this baron land that is dry Hoping for the clouds to bestow ,their essential contents with us below |
ight.. uppin for votes............................
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This was feedback posted for Viscosity
checkin dem pollz up
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^wtf? why not vote.. the fuck the point o that is.. min post: 25.
lame ass |
This was feedback posted for Viscosity
checkin dem pollz
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uppin for some votes.. god damn, somebody vote....
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Voted For: Viscosity
I like his flow better no affense I just think his topic hitting teeth grinding was iight. I like his strucutre his flow his opener to the closure and most of all he made it sound like as if I was their myself. Look me up and check out my bats peace. Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Fucking Lame Ass Shit.. Yall Sleep Like Hos......damn
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Voted For: Viscosity
Wow Both You Had A Decent Drop, Both Of You Hade Some Good Vocabulary In Here Stayed On The Topic And Never Fell Of Once, Both Had Good Structure, More Thought Was Put Into V's Verse Though He Had Some Decent Shit In His Verse, More Feeling Then Acuity, Don't Get Me Wrong He Had A Decent Verse Also But I Got To Give This One To V Return The Favor Links In Sig |
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Voted For: Acuity
SHIT 4 real homie vote gotta g o2 acuity................... he had gud rhymes and it made me think of the starvin people around the world ........... the best line wuzAwaking to see your kids rib-cage, because his skin hangs off him like he got the plague Burying many before they come of age, disease florishes, 15per day die of AIDS Fuck aid, governement keeps it, they living large cos they getting paid ^^^^^^^^^^^^ gud i really liked that it wuz really eye openin,............. a 9/10 yo Visocity u had tooo many simple shit increase your vocab dawg.............................. i rest my case |
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Voted For: Acuity
this was very very close in my opinion props to both... beginning/ending-acuity, this was a close aspect, i thought acuitys intro was good because of the words used it didnt jump directly into the whole thing it shad good transition and the ending was pretty much a tie both had a good meaningful ending emotion-acuity, i thought it had a lot more emotion put into it even though this was close...acuitys story felt deeper, the vocab brought this out also imagery-viscosity, thought the words viscosity used brought out the imagery aspect really well it was a lot easier for me to see what was happening and keep me intuned with what you were talking about flow-viscosity, just had a better flow basically and i liked how everything was constructed with rain, animal perspective, and childs perspective...i thought that was good vocab-acuity, basically had a higher vocab and like i said before it brought out more emotion...but it messed up the flow in some parts this was a really good battle both had their good and bad parts but in the end i was just feelin acuity had a better verse no hate good luck to both if you have time return the favor...their in my sig no hate votes please just honest explained votes thanks peace |
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Voted For: Viscosity
acuity: hmm not bad verse from you but you kinda fell off topic a lil your stucture and flow and all that was tight but you fell off from being creative so i didnt see the picture that you should of tryed to creat for me...even tho im giving V the win you still came good just work more on being creative in making a picture for us to see...no ahte i respect you alot pz Visosity: hmmm not bad your stucture was a lil weak but you had the oppasite then acuity...lol weird names but you had a very creative verse and idk but it looked like i wasent sure what the topic was lmao...but anyway v got this i think he made me a picture it was so creative...no hate to both pz |
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rofl a vote being deleted? thas some bs... the fuck
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