kkkhater vs MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
 

Battle Rules:

20-Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting


TOPICAL- THE BEST ABOUT FREEDOM AND THE DOWNFALL ABOUT FREEDOM :thumbup:

G-LUCK :thumbup:

Minimum posts to vote: 150

Check in by: 12-23-04 at 02:12 PM

Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in.

kkkhater has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 01:44 PM.

MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 01:46 PM.

THE BEST ABOUT FREEDOM


I’ve just arrived onto an beautiful land where the oceans are blue, birds soaring through the air
The wind are different from my home, the big difference is its so clean, so fresh, breathing no despair
I’m so excited to start living on this beautiful land, with high hopes that everyone calls freedom
Finally I can walk down the street with clothes on, I can finally walk on shoes. I feel so welcome
I cry with tears falling on my cheeks, it wasn’t fate, it was the tears of joy. I thank god for this
I cried every night, waiting on god send me an sign. I clap my hands together and send messages
I was tired every night that we didn’t have food on the table, every night my stomach was growling
I used to hate when the electricity went out cause of the bills, tired of hearing my mom and dad yelling
At each other. But I don’t have to worry about that now, since my dad got a new job , a new place to live
like rain I can feel the joy desire falling on me, brand new life, with me and the freedom that give

*TURNS ON THE T.V.*



THE DOWNFALL ABOUT FREEDEOM


WE DECLARE WAR ON IRAQ~!


I couldn’t believe it, my heart started beating faster, I can feel the veins popping out of my neck
I looked at the T.V. in shock, my mother gottin on her knees, started to scream, making an prospect
I blinked quick making sure this was only an fairly tale book I’m listening no it was clearly non-fiction
My heart was slash into sections. They were after my birth town. They’re were going to kill my friend (s)
I ran out the door, tears falling on my cheeks, I was in frustration not at bush for declaring, but at god,
I asked for an better place, not an place that will kill my people, I can already hear there bodies drop
I threw my hands in the air asking why~! God you betrayed me. I put my hand over my face
I feel like its already my fault that I lead my people to death, I can feel there blood on my façade
I can see at night there souls soaring through the sky, I can hear my people screaming for life
What have I done. Its my fault that there going to die, NO it was god, he betrayed me, in him I don’t see no soul, NOT IN SIGHT~!


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ITS ME THE DRASTIC~!

As I sit behind this wall of shame I have nothin left to do but step down from this game that we call freedom.
But what do we call this nation that we call home of the free but I call it the home of the slave.
With every news channel passing down gossip,
I have nothin left to do in this country but to take this deadly life and just keep hoppin it,
But one day we all are gonna miss dis life,
when we have nothin left but keep on hittin our wives,
I can't stand this growing violence nation,
but instead it seems like every race can't quit with their dam bashin.
They say we have to defend dis great nation from the terroist,
but all I say is that some of the leaders are nothin but embarrassed.
I can't take what this life has to offer but instead we are stuck with the decrease of jobs in this ungreatful nation.
My freedom is my right but everday when I turn to the news it seems as if they are takin bits from me like the god dam inflation.
As I see this great nation takin steps to take the fight to our enemies,
we have others at home who say it is not right, but they do'nt know what it feels to see you're fligth go up in flames
but all this freedom that I have left is like my own jail cell,
witch for I cannot pay the bail.

I added them in both without the titles ;) But yea where upppppin dis battle!

This was feedback posted for MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
 

This aint half bad for ur first....BUT u could use more complez multies to keep the floe goin ya kno...but like i sed this aint bad att all...stay with this~!~

O Alright Yo Uppin For Some God Damn Votes Holla At Cha Boi

This was feedback posted for MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
 

checkin pollz.......damnit work on structure lol good job

Fuh-q Lol Anyway Uppin For Some God Damn Votes Holla At Cha Boi

who da talkin to lol upppin for votes come on peeps do'nt be scared.

ok upppppin dis one once again come on peeps and vote peace.

iight do'nt be scared now to vote upppppin dis battle once again!

ok as I see we have no voting going on upppin dis bitch uppin for votes.

werdness yo uppin for some god damn votes holla at cha boi

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^uppin dis battle it has been ope a while vote please.

can we please get some honest votes please uppin this battle once again.

Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

yo mr aunthentik took this no doubt....like hell yeah nigga yo u had punches for ex.....Awaking to see your kids rib-cage, because his skin hangs off him like he got the plague
Burying many before they come of age, disease florishes, 15per day die of AIDS
Fuck aid, governement keeps it, they living large cos they getting paid
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^6 that wuz really makin me think wat life really is aiight..yo kkk hater dawg u need better vocab...................... overall good drop just need to elevate a weee-bit more you'll b a lot better homie................ holla bak wif a vote below against me and necro pyronix....honest vote aiight return the favour

This was feedback posted for kkkhater
 

checkin polls..

uppppppppppppin this battle again please vote on this peeps.

upppppppppppppin dis battle once again peeps!!!!!!!!!!

Chea w/e yo uppin for some votes holla at cha boi. Uppin.

uppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppin^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^

Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

I vote for Mista cuz he set up so u can follow it properlly,,,,,,,,,,,,an his drop wuz cold

ok yo got to explain ur votes better or they are gonan get dq'd but upppin!

Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

mista won this battle he had split hes verse into 2 different parts....
which helped out a little bit i thought it made it a easy follow ont he good-points N the bad point insted of trying to figuer it out reading hes verse......

but i thought u started off kinda weak well not weak just a slow start and u slowly build it up which was good, u focus and it showed u'r emtiona nd all was tight N i was feeling it
the other guy isnt to bad just he wasnt prepared word but its cool hes verse started off slow picked up but then droped again N it wasnt a stedy hot drop just some places was there and other wasnt u stood on topic and all but just think outside the box....

return the favor N vote in one of my battles....

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^^^^^^^^^^^^^^uppppppin dis battle^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

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This was feedback posted for MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ
 

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Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

mista nice structure nice vocab everything kkk um you had a few streched lines which really fucked up yo verse elevate and your structure wasnt da best either i think you can do betta

iight thnx babe upppppppppppppppppiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiin dis!

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^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^uppin dis^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Voted For: MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ

aight yall this was a tight topic first of all and it was a good overall battle...

Mista- shit was tight... it was meaningful and it shows u put some thought into the subject. flow was good even though there were a few stretched lines.. you stayed on topic the whole time which is a great thing... vocab was really good, i liked some of the mattas u used... overall nice drop dawg, 7/10

50- ya shit was aight for a beginer (no hate)... good flow, you put some thought into it i can tell, structure needs work tho... even ya shit out.. you stayed on topic and used some ok metas.. up on the vocab and shit tho.... you will get there
overall... not bad 5/10

not a bad battle.. no hate to either of you...

Vote- Mista