Parallel vs oreo
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
only vote if you know punches & wordplay

due in 3 days after check in

ill check in as soon as i see you do

Minimum posts to vote: 390

Check in by: 12-26-04 at 05:01 PM

Must drop verse in 4000 minutes after check in.

oreo has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 10:16 PM.

keep telllig yourself your better than me cuz its hardly so,
winning will take longer than your mom giving back your audio,
you fell safe on the net, thats why you come home for lunch,
do you get bullied on the playground,i know that aint a hunch,
mop the floor with you but i can only aford a glock and broom
explode your brain and let your intelagance spread round the room....................{not much spreading}
undergraduate, step up or stay in your place,
young and ugly, quit blaming it on your babyface,
xclusive aint fit you, 2by4 did so so well,
you could never touch dopeness, no wonder your parralell

Parallel has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-24-04 04:59 PM.

YOU BETTER SEE MY WORDPLAY..

No use using punches named off-played-cookies
The wack thing is u get merked by-tricky-rookies
Do you get problems with your best-friend-epic
And then you still love to watch a first-person-flick
Go back to the minors cuz it wouldn’t surprise-me
You have ur own kid & still u’ll always despise-me
Fuckin around when u don’t understand-punch lines
Can u sympathize-pokes instead of little boys wine
Why do u bother with the net when you claim to say
Kanye west said u are as fast as twista, well okay, lol

Voted For: Parallel

Decent battle here...Parallel u had a nice drop..punches were on point, structure was good..flow was good too..and nice wp too..wow..:)..but overall nice drop from you tho

oreo..ur drop was aight nuttin much hea..punches were kinda weak tho..ur structure was aight there & the flow was good wit it..overall decent drop form you..but much of it i hardly was feelin ur drop tho..

RTF Parallel

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Voted For: oreo


Oreo
Alright Mang, Your Verse Was Creative, You Used His Personals And Played A Little Of His Name, Your Vocabulary Was Pretty Decent, And Had Some Good Punchlines In This Verse, But Your Structure Fell Of Toward The Ending And, You Didn't Have Much Mult's In Your Verse, You Had Some Meta's In Here, But It Wasn't Much, You Need Some Work On Your Multi's Meta's, Structure And Some Vocabulary, Over All You Had This Battle Over CreativeNess, And Punches


Parallel
Damn This Was A Hard Decision, But You Verse Was As Well As Oreo's Verse, Punches Was Decent I Liked Most Of It, You Had Some Multi's In Here That Was Good, Meta's Nicely Done, You Was A Bit Creative But Not Much, Vocabulary Was Decent, Always Come With Some Fresh Vocabulary,Some Lines Was Kind Of Played But Others Made Up For It, Your WordPlay Came Better Then Oreo's And If This Was Based On That You Would Of Won This, Your Structure Lined Up That Was Another Good Thing About Your Verse, Also The Fact That, You Used A Good Opener Was Decent But Closer Wasn't Feeling It Over All This Was A Close Battle....Parallel I Know You Can Do Better Mang

Vote=Oreo
No Hate To AnyBody Here

welll can we close this now............uppin......

Voted For: oreo

oreo came with an all around bettah verse in my eye that parallel closer line was highly creative and funny the verse flowed really well...
para's verse was well i'd gottah say weak really it seemed like you was goin on and on about nothin you obviously need punches unlike what your first line said...

lol uppin this shit, just noticed you dropped, i dropped mine as soon as i acepteted lol
and your was like three dayd late and it was that shittty

lol wack newbies that obviously dont understand punches...haha...uppin..people im not a bitch that explains punches

Voted For: Parallel

Vote: Paralell

Oreo = meh ur verse was aight nuttin special...u only hit hard in your closer which was dope, work on makin ur enture drop as hard-hitting as that.

Parallel = as u won ill break it down:
No use using punches named off-played-cookies
The wack thing is u get merked by-tricky-rookies
meh..ok opener...standard punch - 7/10
Do you get problems with your best-friend-epic
And then you still love to watch a first-person-flick
nice wordplay on epic n flick and a good punch - 8/10
Go back to the minors cuz it wouldn’t surprise-me
You have ur own kid & still u’ll always despise-me
wordplay, if there was a personal here i dnt know about it...worked ok as a filla-7/10
Fuckin around when u don’t understand-punch lines
Can u sympathize-pokes instead of little boys wine
humour, gd wordplay, nice filler and punch - 7.5/10
Why do u bother with the net when you claim to say
Kanye west said u are as fast as twista, well okay, lol
if this was a personal then well dun...err didnt get it basically, (maybe us me bein thick) - 6/10

RTF ON WACK METHODS BATTLE - LINK IN SIG

and thats weerd i deserve this i had the better verse...uppin

didnt have the better verse, you still sick e only tied

didnt have the better verse, you still suck we only tied

and thats weerd i deserve this i had the better verse...uppin
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This was feedback posted for Parallel
 

On The Real Son.. Parallel Killed This.. Whoa...

Oreo.. That shit was... uncomplex and just really weak son..
step that game up..

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ok w/e people....................uppin..................

Voted For: Parallel

i think parallel took this one........

personals.......pretty much a tie....parallel had a couple...and oreo had a couple....i kinda felt that parallels hit a little harder though

punches........both had decent punches....but again...parallels hit harder....and they were worded better where they hit good.....i felt that oreo could have came more witty with his punches than he did....but some of them still hit ok....just not as hard as paralles....

structure....parallel wins this....oreos stucture fell of at the end a little bit......

wordplay....again parallel gets this....he had some nice wordplay all throughout his verse....where as oreo only had a couple of lines......

multis...both were decent

ok so my vote goes to parallel for his verse just being better....his punches hit harder....he had better wordplay...and his personals hit a lil harder.....

return the favor parallel....links in sig....preferably vs. eastcoast or vs. pictureperfect....thanks

why do you copy me wtf...go away you loser...uppin

yea fuck you.. uppin

im to sexy for you man, get over it...................................

yea fuck you.. uppin........................................

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Voted For: Parallel

Hmm...don't wanna vote this...nice verse...keep up both of ya...its just to hard for me to tell who won...no hate...

Removed

alright uppin.......................................

Voted For: Parallel

I felt parallel more in this battle I think his hits where harder,
his vocab was better his opener-his closure was iight and his multis need a little working on but it was iight and I think his vocab was better.

parallel
No use using punches named off-played-cookies
The wack thing is u get merked by-tricky-rookies
Do you get problems with your best-friend-epic
And then you still love to watch a first-person-flick
7/10 keep elevatin


oreo

winning will take longer than your mom giving back your audio,
you fell safe on the net, thats why you come home for lunch,
do you get bullied on the playground,i know that aint a hunch,
mop the floor with you but i can only aford a glock and broom
5/10 and same to u

hit up on my links peace.

ok uppin oreo pulled bitch again.......................

how you d/qed all my votes last battle bitch.............

ok uppin oreo pulled bitch again.......................

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This was feedback posted for Parallel
 

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