Awaken'd VS Creative
 

20 bar max
5 votes, 3-0=KO
no d/r or hating
ORIGIONAL

my verse
 

ayo dont try to rebel, the lyrics i propel/
castin spells, send u to hell, lose ya wings at the sound of a bell/
torch you, tan ur lyrical complection, net nerd, get u at the star trek convention/
get cooked by my convection, i pleased ya girl, cuz i actually sustain an erection/
betta pack protection cuz she's been in your direction/
prolly got all sorts of STD infections/
i rip you with continuous blows, amazing flows, and lyrical gold/
let the truth behold/
ya bad timing is impecable, hearin my rhyme is bliss, incredible/
spray u like insectosol im tellin yall/
voting balids will be valid to prove i stay unchallenged/
try, and u'll almost touch this like a tangent/
told him i brought heat he wore a vest on his chest/
dont mind weak opponents like u i confess, god bless!/
o u got yaself in a mess, causin massive stress u so impressed/

yo try to post as soon as u can.

nice spit man..... sorry i havent seen this yet ill spit tonight i got to go do some shit...peace

ok.

Im cumin at you sicker then a porno flick wit a bitch suckin seven dicks....If ya drank 'hersheys milk' ya shit couldn't even spit 'quick'....im a 'cerial killer' 'awaken' these wack 'trix'...'penatratin' ya flows 'easier' then chicks wit silocone tits...yo you battlin me is like comparin 'playboy' to 'ranger rick'...im a 'animal' when i lyrically spankin this 'dick'(awakend)...ill take ya 'rebel' and 'rock' this 'kid' wit out a 'cause'...fuck P.M.S im rockin ya into male meta-pause...ya flow was saggin but they dont make big enough braw...i busted you i guess you got weak enough 'jaws'...this battle is over you let the 'shark' out the tank.. i ate you up and consumed you like crank.........peace

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damn dis wuz a close battle..creative wuz hittin with hard punches but his down fall wuz dis

its over u letted da shark out da tank..its time to eat ur azz up like crank/
dis wuz a blah ending

awakend:

u net nerd catch u at da star trek convention..
LOL nice diss

creativity: creative
vocab: creative
punches: awakend
most effort: creative

even thou creative beat'em in mo categoriez, dat star trek shyt just took me away..plus da girl aids infetcion part LOL

vote: awakend

aight 1-0 him


what i wrote was i ate you up and consumed you like crank but id don't matta thanks for votin at least sombody will

Borin' shit but....
 

That Awaken'd cat got this one with the better flow and punches. Nothin' great but I gotta vote on somethin'....


^^^^^^^I guess that was your best.


^^^^^^^Your best line but your flow just didn't balance out the rest of the time.

Awaken'd verse was overall just better because he worded his better.

Vote=Awaken'd

I feel Creative had better punches i really don't give a fuck about vocab Awake had a better flow so basically i got to give this one to Creative for better punches i mean awake had some aight ones though

vote=Creative

i think awaken'd took this because he had a better overall verse. he had some good punches and a nice flow. creative had some good stuff, but soe of his concepts was a lil played.
holla
~1~

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ok battle.. nothign special tho
 

ayo dont try to rebel, the lyrics i propel/
castin spells, send u to hell, lose ya wings at the sound of a bell/
weak opener
torch you, tan ur lyrical complection, net nerd, get u at the star trek convention/
get cooked by my convection, i pleased ya girl, cuz i actually sustain an erection/
lol nice punch
betta pack protection cuz she's been in your direction/
prolly got all sorts of STD infections/
weak
i rip you with continuous blows, amazing flows, and lyrical gold/
let the truth behold/
ya bad timing is impecable, hearin my rhyme is bliss, incredible/
dont talk about yourself in a battle
spray u like insectosol im tellin yall/
voting balids will be valid to prove i stay unchallenged/
more of a filler
try, and u'll almost touch this like a tangent/
told him i brought heat he wore a vest on his chest/
dont mind weak opponents like u i confess, god bless!/
o u got yaself in a mess, causin massive stress u so impressed/
weak multi...dissd yourself, sorta witht he weak opponents part
dawg asked me for my autograph, i laughed/
wut u want for ya epitaph? cuz with words i'm pure cash.
bad ending, very weak
over all a 5/6 for a verse.. need alot of work on your metaphors, and punchlines to really do more damage to an opponent.. Rhyme schems kinda off, multis werent really there, vocab seemd to be done out of a rhymeing site of somthing.. up on that is and itd be alot better




Im cumin at you sicker then a porno flick wit a bitch suckin seven dicks....If ya drank 'hersheys milk' ya shit couldn't even spit 'quick'....im a 'cerial killer' 'awaken' these wack 'trix'...'penatratin' ya flows 'easier' then chicks wit silocone tits...yo you battlin me is like comparin 'playboy' to 'ranger rick'...im a 'animal' when i lyrically spankin this 'dick'(awakend)...ill take ya 'rebel' and 'rock' this 'kid' wit out a 'cause'...fuck P.M.S im rockin ya into male meta-pause...ya flow was saggin but they dont make big enough braw...i busted you i guess you got weak enough 'jaws'...this battle is over you let the 'shark' out the tank.. i ate you up and consumed you like crank.........peace

to hard to do a bar to bar break down.. because well YOU DONT HAVE BARS.....!

over all this verse wasnt bad... Had alot of ill metaphors in it, and the punchs werent that bad either.. rhyme scheme was a lil off but at least its fixable.. Try adding bars next time and up some on your vocab, itll help a grip.. overall id rate it like a 7.8


vote=Creative

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