Youngun vs yeska
 

Battle Rules:

6 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
g'luck :thumbup:

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-28-04 at 08:52 AM

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Youngun has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-25-04 08:52 AM.

ill give you all the time you need, you'll prolly pre-write,
this kid acting and thinkin he black, well he's white,
imma murk you easy in 6 lines flat, you say "fuck a rookie"
your master's here and imma bout to crumble a cookie,
yeska's your name, being bummed and bullied is your aim,
ive got the glock locked, dont think i wont shoot, im insane.

Yeska has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-25-04 08:56 AM.

Damn.. Sick of these low live mutha fuckas..
Look..
Number one, yeskas tired of textee's that know dick..
Illest ever..? Dude you here since august with no wins..
I run rings, around little shits........And the games on..
Young-un? Nah, this dickhead just spelt his name wrong..
I'm aimed on, findin why you aint made a big splash pal..
You know ya nobody, even YOU blacked ya name out..*

*His set his name to be blacked out color wise.**
*Explenation is so this wack fuck doesent change his color and ruin my punch.

Peace.

Vote or die.

This was feedback posted for Yeska
 

weak weak weak weak weak weak weak weak ASS BATTLE....
can't vote here both verses are HORRIBLE yall should rethink ya careers

^Wow.. Your wack as fuck kid..

How about you go and pretend to be a crip somewhere else..

Voted For: Yeska

Yeska
Number one, yeskas tired of textee's that know dick..
Illest ever..? Dude you here since august with no wins..
coo personal
I run rings, around little shits........And the games on..
Young-un? Nah, this dickhead just spelt his name wrong..
decent
I'm aimed on, findin why you aint made a big splash pal..
You know ya nobody, even YOU blacked ya name out..*
aight...but i too much wasn't feelin this

Youngun
ill give you all the time you need, you'll prolly pre-write,
this kid acting and thinkin he black, well he's white,
decent
imma murk you easy in 6 lines flat, you say "fuck a rookie"
your master's here and imma bout to crumble a cookie,
aight
yeska's your name, being bummed and bullied is your aim,
ive got the glock locked, dont think i wont shoot, im insane.
kinda weak

aight battle...both had a weak closer...the rest of the lines were either coo or decent...i'ma go wit Yeska cus his closer wasn't all that weak...Youngun came too weak on his closer

Uppin.

Uppin.

Voted For: Yeska

young...
ill give you all the time you need, you'll prolly pre-write,
this kid acting and thinkin he black, well he's white,
^^^not feelin' it. sorry.
imma murk you easy in 6 lines flat, you say "fuck a rookie"
your master's here and imma bout to crumble a cookie,
^^^nice try...but no. pretty played concept.
yeska's your name, being bummed and bullied is your aim,
ive got the glock locked, dont think i wont shoot, im insane.
^^^nope.

yes...
Number one, yeskas tired of textee's that know dick..
Illest ever..? Dude you here since august with no wins..
^^^ok. could've hit harder though.
I run rings, around little shits........And the games on..
Young-un? Nah, this dickhead just spelt his name wrong..
^^^simple...but effective.
I'm aimed on, findin why you aint made a big splash pal..
You know ya nobody, even YOU blacked ya name out..
^^^nice concept.

my vote would most definately have to go to yeska. both verses could have been better, no hate. you guys got down...but it seems like y'all rushed this and wasnt really trying. young...work on your punches, metas, personals and vocab bruh, that should help you up your game some. yes...fine tune your punches/personals more and try to clean up your rhyme words. dont get me wrong....i think they work...but i've seen cats get voted against for not using words that sound 100% exactly alike. both of you battlecats continue to hold it down, ai-ight??? i look forward to seeing more from you two in the future. one.

...the super...

Voted For: Youngun

Both Verses whack but Young Gun came Accually Basic his punches hit better u need work on ur punchens personals all u stuff u because with that kind of shit you wont get no where u need alot of work u had better wordplay and i think this 1 got the win

Yeska i dont know what the fuck you're talking about cause ur Verse made no sence at all you have to have atleast 1 decent puncheline u need to work on punches, Personals, Structure,Wordplay,Flow, and all that i resp3ct u trying to win but u need help

Flow: Yonug
Punches:Young
Rhymes:Young
Wordplay:Young
OveraLl:YOUNG

^Kids wack as fuck..

Get a brain, maybe shit will make more sense to you.

Voted For: Yeska

gotta go wit yeska......punches were harder then youngun

yeska......

Number one, yeskas tired of textee's that know dick..
Illest ever..? Dude you here since august with no wins..
Decent attempt to make a personal
I run rings, around little shits........And the games on..
Young-un? Nah, this dickhead just spelt his name wrong..
Ok...second line couldve been reworded better
I'm aimed on, findin why you aint made a big splash pal..
You know ya nobody, even YOU blacked ya name out..*
lol....good....didnt rhyme to well tho

v/Yeska

yall plz return tha honest favor.....i hate gettin slept on.....

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Voted For: Yeska

both verse were okay...not the best i've by far....
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Youngun:your verse was aight...you had some okay punches,...your flow wasn't really that good but read-able....your vocab was good....your opener was probly your best atempted at a personal....but what really threw you off was your structure.....it was fucked...overall:6/10
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Yeska:i liked you verse....you had nice punches....good flow....alsome personals....your structure was nice....and your vocab was good....the best line in your verse..i would have to say is the first.....good personal....overall:9/10

Uppin.

Voted For: Yeska

Yeska took this one..punches were harder..had a decent structure & flow..vocab was good..and persona's were pretty decent..overall Yeska had a decent drop nuttin much tho

Youngun...i wasnt feelin ur drop..punches were weak..and the structure was aight..but overall elevate more

RTF Yeska

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