Final Review
 

this was one of my recent ones as well......

wordplay exposed......this is another story ive done with a message in there


*unleashes lyrical light saber*




Insane with another blunder, raised with the luck of wonder
Father time is killin me and age is a mothafucka
Two - eight, my number and the heavens called me
Waving like the president, “get byes” more than “Kweli”
“Destiny painted” by the Creator, my life - a “framed picture”
New page written in the book of life - a saved scripture
“Shapeshifter”, life - a “puzzle” - everywhere I been, “I fit”(benefit)
Delivered the knowledge “fresh”, sometimes even “sent a mint”(sentiment)
Eminent thru my travels, touched a lot of souls
My lava flow burned hotter foes in hell - yes - Allah knows
Mamas woes, I vanquished, barely a rival of few
Been “tested” thru this journey, time for a “final review”
More “spinal” than u, im “backed” up as my text burned jaws
Peeps “trippin on crack”, but the “x turns all”(external)
Completin fates of evil states, hurled em thru the steamin gates
“Ruled” with a lightsaber to set the “crooked demons straight”(demonstrate)
Time to go and Im not even late
Rest in peace is what im seekin, it wont happen, so ill dream the state
No fear of haulin my burdens throughout my years brawlin
Buried my peers fallen, sad moments, saw so many teers fallin
Mama cried, those are real eyes (realize) filled with pride
The reason my ascension existed - it thrilled my highs
Who would’ve known this lil guy would fight and leave again
The one to squeeze the pen, release the content to defeat the sin
My fist are bawled up - im too mad to wanna wave away
High with strengths, forgot the “weaks”?(weeks) - questioned if I “saved a day”
Hope that this “payed off” or else im preachin “layaways” from home
Evaluated by the council - yet my future was unknown
Hope to be on top again, till then - demons - im dropping them
Tainted soul when it’s a known fact - im known to mock a sin (moccasin)
Flocks of men have came for this day, some made a u turn
If that day came, could ya past represent ur suitable future?



*sheathes lyrical light saber*



comments....


d.a.

*bump*

u cats wanted to see a complexed topical cat.....hered.a.
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nice shit...this was a coo drop...i was feelin the flow and shit...nice...8/10

thanx man...thanx a whole lot

still uppin this ish....

d.a.

hey its #1 from rw here....anyway nice stuff.....real good wordplay and nice flow.....keep doing it

ooh snap!!!...i thought that was u.....i looked at ur style and was like....hmmnn seen somethin like this before.......wow.....

ok ok....thanx ma.....i know u probably seen this one already.......

good looks

uppin

d.a.

nice shit good wordplay and vocab you could def do some shit in topicals here man keep up the tight ish

lol thanx b.....good looks

still uppin


d.a

^^ weerd...I think we found one...Real good shit man...good use of vocab is what stood out the most...Return the fav and leave some feed on the links in my sig...thanx...1

oooh will do man....and thanx alot.....returned the favor of course...

still uppin

d.a.

yo wet drop.....I love tha vocb usage.........
Keep spittin verse like dat an good things are sure to come
keep yo head up

sweet rhymes my nigga, vocab was tight, liked the lyrical lightsaber reference reminded me of my 9 millimeter Microphone lol ... peace love

lol thanx to all.....and yea alot of peeps like the light saber now.......thats what i slay with let alone thats what starts off my pieces....peeps kinda try and front on it.....but in the end they know not to fuck with it.....

thanx again

still uppin

d.a.

Ayo I was feel'n that, yea that was deep how u used the vocab, and how u made the words flow together to paint a picture in words, it made me think of alot stuff,
much respect keep it up

Ayo i was feeling it fam, nice vocab, good flow. Nice wordplay's too. Keep on dropping fam. Bump up your creativity.

You need 2 links fam.....or they'll close this. :thumbup:

Try my 2 links in my sig.

thanx will do...

uppin

d.a.

yo once again the drops is sick just like last time although i think the first one was better but what do i know. It was still raw. Raw vocab structure good and the multis was good. anyway keep doin ya thing it's ya boy the blackmage as usual

good shyt......eh we have a battle man check ur pm.......

still uppin

d.a