LyLWuN vs L.I.
 

Battle Rules:

8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No Feeding

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-27-04 at 11:36 PM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

L.I. has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-27-04 11:07 PM.

Quit ridin on L.I. I'm tired of it.. just simply lay off me bitch...
But since sex makes a winner.. its no wonder she's all over my dick...
Battling the best.. you gotta be crazy if you plan on makin a name...
Cuz you made it prefectly clear that your name describes your brains...
Cut the cockiness bitch.. your ranked high among the greats, still takin flight?...
Cause last time I saw.. you didnt even make it into Legends on yo Home Site!...
Sorry I had to merk the "best" from RW.. cause this "vet" aint even alright...
Bitch, the only time you were on top.. was in bed wit strobe last night...

LyLWuN has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-27-04 11:12 PM.

LyLWuN has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-27-04 11:13 PM.

[Cheese]
*Lets Go*


this kid like an angry mexican, cuz 'I' see is this 'L' in this battle comin up short in form,
u messed with the wrong girl, or u didnt know who TO-PIC, oh yea....ALMOST PORN//
remember that? perverted it seems and a topical head? u a false-rhymer,
battlin me? i guess u didnt know 'what u was in for' like IN-MATES with ALZHEIMERS//
this aint ya day, pimpin....wow this man can do topicals! seems he stay bitchin,
52 and 9? but check this out imma 'scratch ya record' like dj's mixin//
how u conjure up them wins? i guess 'gatorades' not all thats in u, u stuck with the pipe inside-ya//
no wonder why this site is called RV, [url=http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=168603]yall got nothin but ridaz//

This was feedback posted for L.I.
 

Wow...like 20 words for 1 link for LyL...that's sad...

FB

VOTE.....upppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp ppp

This was feedback posted for LyLWuN
 

Are you fucking serious?
Your whole verse was a link....
Meh @ this battle.

Meh at not voting....VOTE BITCHES.....................

This was feedback posted for L.I.
 

L.I. took this shit wayy too fuckin easy.......... Lyl Wun got lyrically torn up... smh........ i can't vote cuz this is fam...

hands down, stay up fam...
pz..

Well First Of All....It Was A Link I Added But That Was Only For My 2nd Line And For My Last Line.....
It Got Messed Up When I Posted My Verse....It Suppose 2 Look Like This.....

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this kid like an angry mexican, cuz 'I' see is this (el)'L' in this battle comin up short in form,
u messed with the wrong girl, or u didnt know who TO-PIC, uh yea....ALMOST PORN//
remember that? perverted it seems and a topical head? u a false-rhymer,
battlin me? i guess u didnt know 'what u was in for' like IN-MATES with ALZHEIMERS//
this aint ya day, pimpin....wow this man can do topicals! seems he stay bitchin,
52 and 9? but check this out imma 'scratch ya record' like dj's mixin//
how u conjure up them wins? i guess 'gatorades' not all thats in u, u stuck with the pipe inside-ya//
no wonder why this site is called RV, yall got nothin but ridaz//


Explainations:
1st Line - L.I His Initials.....El Is A Spanish Term 4 A Boy And Of Course Mexicans Are Short And So Is His Name
2nd Line - He Posted In A Porn Topic.....Of Course, This Is A Rap Site Not A Porn Base.....
3rd Line - He Claims 2 Be A Good Battler But Yet Makin Dumb Posts
5th Line - Bitch Bitch Bitch....Thats All He Do About His Battles And What He Can Do Cuz Of His Record....
8th Line - RV Is A Name Of A Car Of Course, RV Is The Name Of This Site And After The Topic He Posted About Me Had Some Posts Of People Backin Him Up......Ridaz They Are.....

Is That Simple Enough? :gfy:

^either thay...u lost anyway :|
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This was feedback posted for L.I.
 

checkin the polls............................................. .......

Voted For: L.I.

aight this was a very weak battle

LI aight i have seen you come way harder than this....i want to say your alwashed up but maybe you just where not trying....well you had no metaphores no actaul punches ...hella played lines adn i fucked up structure.... best line was the strobe line....that was at least half way decent....but yeah this was not a good battle


wun: well your structre was offffffff that is wat fucked up your whole battle i could hardly read your bars...and you all had hella streched lines adn no real punches at all.......you had some aight personals and some shit like that but if you are the best on rw then i feel sorry for them........but stay up adn keep doing what you do...

vote=li

Voted For: L.I.

flow li
lyrics li
hits li
multis li
personals none
vocab li
opner-closure li
imagry tie
over all li and hit up on my links and leace honest votes peace.

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

Voted For: LyLWuN

Good Battle.I Saw Some Tight Personas Coming From Both Sides.But Im Gon Wit LylWun On This.She Had The Stronger Punches And The Personals Had More Effect Too.LI Personals Were Good But They Seemed Typical & Expected Since He Was Battlin A Girl.

Vote-LyLWun

Voted For: L.I.

Aight...LI Took This One..

L.I. Just Plain Out Dissed Her Harder and Took The More Personal Approach...

While LyLWun Tried To Use A Lot of Diffrent Scenarios From This Site To Use Against LI.

Plus Sum of Her Lines/Bars Didn't Rhyme..and Your Structure Is Horrid.

Vote - LI For Better Overall Verse, Especially Punches.

~R~

this kid like an angry mexican, cuz 'I' see is this (el)'L' in this battle comin up short in form,
u messed with the wrong girl, or u didnt know who TO-PIC, uh yea....ALMOST PORN//
(1sr line yes....2nd nah)
remember that? perverted it seems and a topical head? u a false-rhymer,
battlin me? i guess u didnt know 'what u was in for' like IN-MATES with ALZHEIMERS//
(nice wordplay points)
this aint ya day, pimpin....wow this man can do topicals! seems he stay bitchin,
52 and 9? but check this out imma 'scratch ya record' like dj's mixin//
(k)
how u conjure up them wins? i guess 'gatorades' not all thats in u, u stuck with the pipe inside-ya//
no wonder why this site is called RV, yall got nothin but ridaz//
(weak ender....but k)

sum- u had some wordplay in there....few personals.....flow was off a lil.....no multis...u had some lines that made me go ooh...complexity was there....punches were above avg....



Quit ridin on L.I. I'm tired of it.. just simply lay off me bitch...
But since sex makes a winner.. its no wonder she's all over my dick...
(k...weak opener)
Battling the best.. you gotta be crazy if you plan on makin a name...
Cuz you made it prefectly clear that your name describes your brains...
(k...nice one)
Cut the cockiness bitch.. your ranked high among the greats, still takin flight?...
Cause last time I saw.. you didnt even make it into Legends on yo Home Site!...
(ehh...k)
Sorry I had to merk the "best" from RW.. cause this "vet" aint even alright...
Bitch, the only time you were on top.. was in bed wit strobe last night...
(weak ender)

sum- wheres the complexity....wheres the thought in the rhymes??? oh well whateva...eh ur verse was pretty basic......u had personals but nuthin strong or what i havent seen before......no multis...no hard hittin punches......no wordplay.......nothin made me go oohh or wow......flow was cool tho

its evident lylwun took time to put thoughts in her verse....had complexity and personals......cool shyt....


v- lylwun

d.a.

Voted For: L.I.

decent battle and pretty close but ima give it to LI since he had better punches and had a better flow and was wittier with his personals.lyl wun has to fix her strutcure cuz its really hard to flow with and its like if u went over the line limit. so both came decent but LI takes this

oh yea...return the favor in my sig. thx............

This was feedback posted for L.I.
 

me no vote.................................I just wanna see who won:) and up

Voted For: L.I.

LylWuns Verse
this kid like an angry mexican, cuz 'I' see is this 'L' in this battle comin up short in form,
u messed with the wrong girl, or u didnt know who TO-PIC, oh yea....ALMOST PORN//
i get it but it was just weak like ...ok...

remember that? perverted it seems and a topical head? u a false-rhymer,
battlin me? i guess u didnt know 'what u was in for' like IN-MATES with ALZHEIMERS//
i liked this one...

this aint ya day, pimpin....wow this man can do topicals! seems he stay bitchin,
52 and 9? but check this out imma 'scratch ya record' like dj's mixin//
no...dj mixin shit is played and setup was eh...

how u conjure up them wins? i guess 'gatorades' not all thats in u, u stuck with the pipe inside-ya//
no wonder why this site is called RV, [url=http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=168603]yall got nothin but ridaz//
nope...

overall had 1 good punch in my opinion but weak verse...

L.I.s verse
Quit ridin on L.I. I'm tired of it.. just simply lay off me bitch...
But since sex makes a winner.. its no wonder she's all over my dick...
eh it was ok in my opinion nothin too great

Battling the best.. you gotta be crazy if you plan on makin a name...
Cuz you made it prefectly clear that your name describes your brains...
...ok gettin better

Cut the cockiness bitch.. your ranked high among the greats, still takin flight?...
Cause last time I saw.. you didnt even make it into Legends on yo Home Site!...
lmfao...best punch and personal of the verse...

Sorry I had to merk the "best" from RW.. cause this "vet" aint even alright...
Bitch, the only time you were on top.. was in bed wit strobe last night...
wasnt as good as the last bar but good closer and punch none the less...

overall had better punches and hit harder then lylwuns...

no hate good luck to both
peace