"Three Days of Heaven"
"Three Days of Heaven" [course 1] It's mourning at dawn, I just opened my eye's I take a glimpse out the window, I can see it out side nuttin' loud no clouds, and the sun is shinning Take a shower, go out, nevermind the timeing A pretty women walks by, so I'm sneaking a peak Aint no need for paranoia, I aint seeing no beef Aint no cheatin' this theif, lookin for someone that sales No choke when I smoke, when I'm hittin' this L No problems no crimes today, I aint being no lifer Kids spittin' on the corner so I hop in the cypha And I boast a bit, spit throught most of it Just battlin' for fun, so I roast this kid So now I'm hi as fuck, and dreamin' of females And my eyes gittin' cloudy, I aint seeing so well Crossing paths wit that women again, makin a freind And hookin' up just for that one sin....sin....sin [Hook X2] One of them days when not a moment seems worthless Can't wipe the smile, everything seems perfect No sqauds, no flags, aint no need for reppin' Oh what I wouldn't do for Three days of heaven ........Three days of heaven...........Three days of heaven Oh what I wouldn't do for Three days of heaven [Course 2] I had a good rest, and I'm feeling strong Take a breath, hit the switch, see if the lights still on Turn the fossit, water works, so the pipes still on No bugs, no roaches, and the mice are gone There aint no work today, so my pops aint leavin' He could rest a bit, and my moms not screaming No stress for her, favorite song she's singing And I aint feelin' like smokin', aint no need for feinin' And my sister lookin' happy, no more depression Stoped lookin' in the past, now I'm all progression Mom tells us to clean, so we pick up the mess and No need to question, no fightin', no more aggression We stay up all night, till real late in the mourning About 8 in the mourning, without screamin' or scornin' Just trading sad stories, and our eye's are pouring Priceless, stayin home all day, and the days not bourin' [Hook X2] One of them days when not a moment seems worthless Can't wipe the smile, everything seems perfect No sqauds, no flags, aint no need for reppin' Oh what I wouldn't do for Three days of heaven ........Three days of heaven...........Three days of heaven Oh what I wouldn't do for Three days of heaven [Course 3] Today I call up my sister, cause its time we talked Gotta find a new job and I dont mind the walk Cause I got no ride, but now I gotta reason No excuses to hide, cause now I'm thinking Filled out an application, was hired on the spot No need for conversation, proud of what i got More than I noticed, theres more to this moment An omen, the fact that i birthed it and own it Now my mind can grasp, on small simple visions No longer trapt, in these small mental desicions Now I got peice of mind, and I can read my books I can vast in knowledge, I aint being no crook Three days wit the world, family, and my self Tired of being scared, and standing with no help And so all I ask of god, is a simple blessing Please just give me 3 days.......3 days of heaven [Hook X2] One of them days when not a moment seems worthless Can't wipe the smile, everything seems perfect No sqauds, no flags, aint no need for reppin' Oh what I wouldn't do for Three days of heaven ........Three days of heaven...........Three days of heaven Oh what I wouldn't do for Three days of heaven |
magnificent.
this is the best piece that i've ever seen you drop. hold it down like only you can. one. ...s.v... |
word nice drop......
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wet drop fam.............keep doin yo thing
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thanx yall...........i appreciate it...........
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nice drop homie, i was feelin the piece.......8/10
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^^^uppin' this piece for my crhymie babz.^^^
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That was a real deep piece yo! I liked the hook too. Theres a few spots here and there that need a lil work, but really its iight i wouldn't change it. drop some more shit yo, i like readin it!!
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im loving this man, just spat out the verses to Cold As Ice instrumental, sounds ace mate. liking the rythim but i think ur choruses need some work, fat rhyme though mate, just trying to stick to feedback rules :P
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pretty good drop liked your stucture and your hook was good...but try to use more vocab to give all that emotion you used flavour...you know i hope you do..lol...but this was a good drop....i wouldnt mind a collab about something emotioanl with you...it would be good you should pm me or hit me on aim or msn w/e you got or shit w/e....but good drop i really like dyour flow and multis a few bad lines but i liked most of them...good job..
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ups yall......and thanks for all the feedback..................
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uppin.........bringing back my old shit
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