ho's
 

HOOK:
If you got a ho as a wife, abuse her
if not then u's a loser
cuz ur da one who choosed her(2x)



VERSE:
Bout time u gets a life
cuz that'll ho slit ur throat wit a knife
and like everyone says u can't make a ho a housewife
cuz once she starts undressin'
she'll be waitin' fo' u to start coressin'
but now u just learned ur lesson
wit' sumthin u always been guessin'
she let's off AIDS like hand grenades
and who woulda guessed under all that make-up and braids
that she'll be carryin' a disease between her legs
and now it's way too late
it starts to infect in ya at a faster rate
while it inclines at every state
now all u could do is sit and wait
ur too depressed to even hate
so as time goes by
da symtoms just multiply
and no matter how much u just want to try and deny
u just know dat she's out there infectin' another guy
so no matter how much u ask why
one day ur just gonna cry til' u die


HOOK:
If you got a ho as a wife, abuse her
if not then u's a loser
cuz ur da one who choosed her(2x)

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i liked it shit....my ex bitch was a ho i aint get a dieses though but rhymes were tight...
the couple metas u had were good 6.5/10

lmao nice nice...kinda reminds me of someone i hate but w/e...nice rhymes still...8.5 on 10 cuz of the vocab

this is ok, topic is allright. you could of explained things a bit better.

Try keeping your bar's the same length.

for instance.

Bout time u gets a life
cuz that'll ho slit ur throat wit a knife

^^
this bar is 16 syllable's long.


and who woulda guessed under all that make-up and braids
that she'll be carryin' a disease between her legs

^^
24 syllable's long.


so as time goes by
da symtoms just multiply
^^
12 syllable's
feel me?

if they ar eeven the flow will be alot better.
content is ok, could of elaberated alot more.
props to dropping consitent open mic's.
keep them coming

lmao dat was kool Fam. an wah a nice drop........great wordplay.............an hella fi-d punches 8/10....keepp doin ya thing Fam.

lmao...hood that was good!!...that would fit only one person i know...but fuck it ya shit was hot...a lil advy make ya lines of the same length so it flows better...and i repeat gd job!!!

1 bruh

To use force is habit but like coarse fabric my patience
Wears thin who dare win in battle? Victory has fragrance
Scripts expand like strips of land unplowed make a farmer
Get a tractor become stormier than a nuclear reactor I’m a charmer
Like Dentzel sprint well like Flo Jo but murders like Jeffrey Dahmer

some broken promises a fauther couldnt keep, tha mistakes he mad his son he prayed didnt repeat, tha riskes he'd take to teachem how to lie, steal, an cheat, it gave him tha chance to sit there an cry him self to sleep, ever herd of a man wit a heart that wont beat. mentaly an emotionaly scared he ran away on his own 2 feet
CB83

THA WEIGHT OF THA WORLD ON MY BACK/ WOUNDERIN WHEN WILL THIS BE OVER / ALL IVE GOT IS MY LITTLE GIRL AN RAP/ I AINT AFFRAID TO DIE LEAVEN THA WHOLE WORLD BEHIND WOUNDER WHY I DIDNT FALLOW THA RIGHT PATH/ EVERYBODY NEEDS A PRAYER NOW EN' THEN/ MOMENTS WE SHARE TA TRYEN START OVER AGIAN BEIN PUNISHED FOR WHAT /CUZ I STOPTED BELIEVEN IN GOD AN I DONT GIVE A FUCK/ LOOKIN INTO THA CRIMINAL MINDS LIKE BLUEPRINTS TO DARK FOOT STEPS/ IM A be tha person you learn to love to hate aint it great tryin so hard ta concentrate
CB83

......:wtf:

sorry for the freepost!!

dat ok..........

dat alrite except y u leave da freepost

yeah, i feel what u saying about hoes and housewives, i know your structure wasn't the best but it didnt stop me enjoying what u wrote.
i got the gist of the chorus but if i was writing it i maybe would have put a lil more work in, but it wasn't bad tho! you should make a tune out of this verse.
your style is good, i like it, it just need a lil polish, u know in the more technical aspects e.g. bars. i don't know why everyone is giving points out of ten, but...
when in rome:
ima give you a 8/10
keep up the good and RETURN the favour!
thanks

hood dawg,,,,,,,,,i WANNA SAY ONE TING............ DAMMM U R RITE, I TOTALLI AGREE WID YA, SINCE IM A HOES WORST NIGHTMARE LOL, HATE DEM BAAAAAAD COZ BIN ROUN EM ALL MY LIFE................N E WAYS FUK DAT,,,, FEELIN YO SHIT.....WUD BE NICE IF IT WER A LIL LONGA

yeah cool i'm surprised this even got feed this is one of my old ones