FlOw InTeLLiGeNt vs d.j em sce
 

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Topic: A poem to the love of your life



Minimum posts to vote: 300

Check in by: 01-10-05 at 04:56 AM

Must drop verse in 30 minutes after check in.

damn 30 min after check in........oh well....good thing i really do love her that gives me hella emotion.........lol

d.j em sce has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-10-05 04:28 AM.

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FlOw InTeLLiGeNt has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-10-05 04:39 AM.

damn i thought you where gonna decline....but i see what you where doing.....tring to get more time.......

damn i might not make it............................damn

got 9 minutes hurry up...............................

alright my name is SEAN and her name is SHEA
(pronounced..SHAY)
we broke up and now we are back together forever....


Sean and Shea forever

Sentimental thoughts keep me reminiscing on the day we first met
Every thought attacked my emotions, but still I try not to forget
As our eyes locked I would soon believe in love at first sight
Not knowing my heart would be broken, I kept your smile bright

Approaching a new level in a relationship, it hurt once “WE” became no more
Now that the truth was spoken I was wounded in a way I had never felt before
Despite the demise to my first real relationship, you still are the one I adore

Sensations would almost immediately grow stronger day after day
However, I would hide my love but every night I would pray after Shea
Exiled from my own passion, I would shed tears before I would sleep
Awaiting a phone call that would guarantee Shea’s affection to keep

Formulating a love that will last forever, I set my soul for this mission
Obstacles lie ahead, but our love shall stop, as I await shea’s decision
Reasonable doubt lingers on, as the question remains in her mind
Extreme measures dwell in my midst, but love has left me blind,
Visions of eternal love wonder in a maze, so this I must confess
Ever since the first day, I did nothing for you but try my best
Real love is what we now have, Shea I thank you for saying yes



my SIG is not part of this poem but i wrote it just write now...it goes with this poem but if i added it i would exceed the number of lines i can use....


PS I LOVE MY GIRLFREIND

nice poem man...that shit is good.........
i woudl have made mine better but i posted it kinda fast becuz i hate no show L's

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This was feedback posted for FlOw InTeLLiGeNt
 

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Voted For: FlOw InTeLLiGeNt

OK DJ GOOD DROP YOU HAD GOOD POEM HER NICE VOCAB WAS KINDA STRECHED BUT THATS NICE IN A PEOM I LIKED THE WAY YOU USED THE NAMES YET YOU FAILED TO USE THE FREEFLOW OF A POEM TO YOUR FULL ADVANTAGE TO WIN HERE YOUR IMAGERY WAS GOOD IN SOME PLACES BUT LACED IN OTHERS BADLY A 7/10
FLOW GOOD DROP GOOD VOCAB GOOD STRUTURE AS WELL GOOD FLOW TO IT WOULD MAKE A NICE SPOKEN WORD PIECE AS WELL GOOD ENDER HERE BUT DJS WAS ALSO GOOD STILL YOU HAD A IMAGE ALL THE WAY THROUGH I COULD SEE THE LOVE AND WHY ALL THROUGH YOU BASICALLY WALKED ME THROUGH YOUR HEART THIS WAS A VERY NICE PIECE A 9/10
BASICALLY FLOW HAD BETTER IMAGERY AND THAT WINS IN PEOEMS EMOTION AND IMAGERY BOTH HAD EMOTION BUT LIKE I SAID DJ WENT OFF A LITTLE AND THAT HURT HIM IN MY VOTE BOTH ARE GOOD POETS BUT FLOW HAD THIS.

BOTH PLEASE RETURN A HONEST VOTE BACK LINKS IN THE SIG

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Voted For: d.j em sce

I Think D.J Came in this one with a Little Slide.

He had good lines and nice good story. It Told about a good relationship making me read more. I noticed some pretty good Vocabulary and you didnt try to go alot of it in their. It was not more like peomly like to have me thinking and pretty good flow but not to good. Scheme was pretty aight also.

Flow Intelligent
You had a good story and yours was more peomly like. But his told me more about the relationship to let me know whats really going on and how deep emotions are being delt. You had better voabulary and nice good flow and scheme and some Motion going on their in the movement of how it goes. But yall was close and if it is really for me to decide I would say it is a tie. But for me I think D.J. Won This

v/D.J.

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Voted For: d.j em sce

this was really close...much props to both

i picked dj because of the amount of emotion...flow had a lot of this too but dj had a more detailed look on everything...it was like a story and he played it off well with the little letters on the left i forgot what theyre called...anyway he pulled that off great and the emotion was really detailed in every line...flow your shit was dope too this was really close but it was just like a tiny difference when i read it and its hard to pick it out...i think it was the vocabulary and the detail but you both had great emotion but flow it just seemed like something was missing that DJ had...and i cant pin point it out but i think its something with that vocab and detail but both did incredible none the less

good luck to both no hate just honest vote return the favor in my sigs if you get a chance theyre really gettin slept on...

peace

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