d-cËpt!0n vs J DOT
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
Topical Battle

Topic: Contract with a demon


aight, lets here yo pre-written shit...even tho i wanna diss u

Minimum posts to vote: 150

Check in by: 01-24-05 at 10:49 AM

Must drop verse in 5760 minutes after check in.

Closed - Expired / old battle win

J DOT has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-24-05 10:24 AM.

d-cËpt!0n has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-24-05 10:47 AM.

A dark aura around my soul told me of an ominous presence/
Then appeared a lady that radi-ated a voluptuous essence/
Red lips, red dress, slim hips, full breasts adorned her curves/
I was overtaken by a high that warmed my nerves/
"Give me your soul as a toll and my body yours tonight"/
I vicously ripped her dress, intently battling this love fight/
Moving sensation, my motions impatient, ripping her in half/
Blood flowed slow-ly, ears deafened by the ringing of her laugh/
Then I came and felt my frame emptied of its soul, im sold
My eternal hell is in a bed cell, and im force to love a burning hole/

I’m faced with a dilemma; blow this demon right off tha map
Or accept tha fact he’s different, and leave him right where he at
Friends or clap?……….even tho I aint been provoked
I’m thinking, could this be reality, or is it all just a joke?
I know I can war with him, but do he wunna war with me?
War with he?....I might not make it, so should I keep tha war in tha streets?
Its all crazy, I’m wishing I can get in his dome
So I can hear tha things he’s thinking, if he wanted war all along
I gota talk to him, maybe its all a misunderstanding
But I don’t wunna be tha soft head, but at least I’ll be standing
…….fuck it, I take tha risk, I got nuthin to lose
so, I set down my hands and said “Whats up with you”

Talking to demon
Never knew u had the same thoughts of not knowing what to do
War or fight…….i can’t leave it up to you
We gotta make this right, we both could go hard with our fist
But only ones gunna survive………should we take that risk?

We really got no beef, just wrong place at tha wrong time
Crossed each others line, now we forced to draw nines
U could sense we don’t want war, maybe its all just stupid
But not knowing what to do, makes me wunna just lose it
I think he’s bluffing, he might just take tha first shot
He thinks ima blast first, and leave him tied in a knot
I’ll be tha bigger man……“lets both put our guns on down”
“and talk this over a bit, cause we both acting like dumb clowns”
“lets shake a hand, sign a contract, we both leave here safe”
…..amazed, he agreed……we were in tha same place

took tha pen out….wrote down we both would end this
with no blood…no guts, just loyalty and friendship
sign on tha dotted lines….we could live our lives now
with respect for one another, since we both backed down

uppin this shit................faggots ..............

uppin this shit................faggots ..............

Voted For: J DOT

u got it this man.....................................

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wtf. Unexplained...Uppin this bitch............Fo sho

Voted For: J DOT

ima give dis to jdot cuz he had betta punches and personals...dception had way betta structure though and sum good vocab use..flow was a tie but jdot had betta wordplay...multis were lackin in dis battle...but doesnt cuz jdot took wit eaze...

v/jdot

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Voted For: J DOT

Hmmm....both had good verses...but I believe J Dot got this for overall a better verse...imagery was nice...story was good...voab was a'ight...flow was off in places, btu structure was still intact...Deception....short verse...you need to make it longer...and you need to work on your imagery and vocab...not much of a story due to length...you have potential...keep workin at it...no hate.

No hate but two votes dont count Assas-Sin and Marvelis dont have good explanations/. ETF with the punches. Last vote was legit, nice explanation.

^ITS COOL...i wouldve done tha same thing....EXPLAIN THESE DAMN VOTES.....PEOPLE



uppin this shit

uppin this shit.......................




and i dont even do toical, and i kno i won!!!


ha!

Voted For: J DOT

J DOT got this, it was a close battle, but JDot had better imagery, better insitefulness, and he showed more emotions, both verses flowed fine, but J Dot had this,

also D's verse was too short though

vote: J DOT

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I guess I should explain more since the top 2 votes got DQed....

I liked JDOT's story better, he possess better vocab, wordplay and manage to keep good structure

JDot's best lines:

We really got no beef, just wrong place at tha wrong time
Crossed each others line, now we forced to draw nines
U could sense we don’t want war, maybe its all just stupid
But not knowing what to do, makes me wunna just lose it

D's best lines

A dark aura around my soul told me of an ominous presence/
Then appeared a lady that radi-ated a voluptuous essence/

D-cept, I think you could work on the emotions, please lose the /s in your lines, that's really herbish. And I think the main reason you lost this is because your verse was too short so yeah...

overall I voted for: J DOT

PS RTF

Voted For: J DOT

j dot got it mayne both had good shit but j dot had a flow that was far better than the otha dude good shit j dot u got my vote

^^good lookin out on all tha votes

View Poll Results: Who won this battle?
J DOT 3 100.00%
d-cËpt!0n 0 0%
Voters: 3. You have already voted on this poll

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This was feedback posted for d-cËpt!0n
 

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Voted For: d-cËpt!0n

my vote goes to ....

even though d-ceptions verse was considerably shorter than JDots.. i felt it was on point, and got right to the punch no bullshit .. i was feelin tha whole sexy devil lady thangg.. Jdots verse was too long for me, too many gimics if you will, like the whole 'talking to the demon' thing, c'mon man just spit a straight up verse ..

........D-Ception

^idiot...u cant vote on this shit, we in tha same crew..and that vote was mad comical...i ripped dude