50hater_killer vs SUPERVILLAIN
 

CRHYME SINDICATE vs. nok out kings

Battle Rules:

Topical: "Heros"
6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 250

Check in by: 01-27-05 at 11:13 AM

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50hater_killer has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-24-05 03:46 PM.

SUPERVILLAIN has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-25-05 10:40 AM.

Topical: "Heros"


"CLOVE STREETS FINEST"

Romey was the homie that lived around the corner on clove street...
He'd help old women with their grocery and was never known 2 beef
Whenever i peeped his report cards...the lowest grades seen were b's
In the times that i felt hopeless...the homie showed me i was worthy

He broke 2 records in track, and was crowned state champ @ the emporium
He graduated a year early.......and was appointed class valedictorian
My pal "the adolescent with wisdom" was easily accepted n2 princeton
Visions of lifting his family from their current conditions kept him driven

When he wasnt going 2 work on grave...he was doing homework all day
Saved up for a NY vacation...only then...2 send his family in his place
They couldnt make the trip during winter, so he set it up before november
When they went there...they perished...on that 11th day of september

Not only was this intense but he had 2 defend against arrogance 'n spit
He was unprepared for the hits...did i mention he was of arabic descent?
so romey left school and joined new recruits like he had somethin 2 prove
Boot camp went smooth...afghanistan got skipped and iraq was his move

the worse that could happen? a rebel faction ambushed his small convoy
14 out of 18 died bravely, under inept orders from cptn. john foye
Romey fought off the last of the guerillas...and kept the wounded safe
When the coast was clear they escaped, the nearest base...3 miles away

just before safety...another attack!!! moments build, more deadly...dire
they survived that, but 200 ft. from base...romey was killed by friendly fire
to romey adair...remembered as the bravest...a hero to all, so just face it
i tell his untold story below our pics, mounted respectfully in my basement


...the super......crhyme sindicate

it was this day where heros where made,
wars take lives but their souls did not yet fade.
They marched on for miles and took no fear,
and welcomed their enemies like headlights and a deer.
Bombs rocking in the distance and smokey lungs,
while they made their way with the sound of guns!
they faught for one thing and one cause,
and that was to give freedom and do it without a pause,
as the day grew weery they faught on to the death,
for I know that this field woul yet be their final bed.
for as I watched my comrads fall i knew that this was..
their chance to yet be called hero!

....................uppin dis shit gl homes.........

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

I got to give dis one to Super for da Heart he put in it and it was nice as hell he won hands down.......no hate to 50 but he merked u bad......jus keep elevating homie......Super ur shit jus grabbed me and made me read it.....i mean i looked at both of them but 50 yours didnt grab me like his did good shit dawg..........~1~

Return da favor please.........

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Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

You are the best topical battler i seen.
There is no doubt at all.
If i was you i would be pissed off i wrote domething this good and it had to go against 50 hater's verse which is nowhere near as elevated or anything compared to yours.
On every count you took this. I am still stunned at your verse greatness

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This was feedback posted for SUPERVILLAIN
 

you got this shit know doubt.....uppin for this ill nigga.....
CS

good lookin' out family and folkers. thank you very much for your support gentlemen. much love.

also, nice drop 50.......you did you pimpin'........im not mad at you. hold it down.

^^^UPPIN'!!!


s.v.

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

V/supervillain......this was a one sided battle super jus took this wit good punchs that were more creatively used he had better vocab an personals....50 u need to elavate u had to much basic flow no real punchs or diss's......
punchs=super
vocab=super
multi's=super
structure=super
opener=super
closer=super
overall=supervillain
*RETURN THE FAVOR*

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uppppppppppin dis shit yea super no hate here......

^^^UPPIN' FOR LEGIT FEEDBACK!!!^^^

...the super...

This was feedback posted for 50hater_killer
 

maybe you should make your raps longer. peace homie

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

SV got the whole bag.
SV:You came with the emotion, and the depth drawed me into the story even more.
Your structure was on point, so no problem's in following the verse.
Nice vocabulary, which is important in topical's.
Keep it up.

50:You didn't really post a proper verse, lack of depth, vocab and length, just improve your vocab and try to amplify your emotion..
So overall my vote goes to SV.

Voted For: 50hater_killer

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^oh....shit, i thought i click feedback.....well, imma get that taken off....my bad.....

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

vote: S.V cuz ya flow was nice and u had more detail in ya verse and u got preety deep in to it, creativeness was good and all around hot...

Not only was this intense but he had 2 defend against arrogance 'n spit
He was unprepared for the hits...did i mention he was of arabic descent?
so romey left school and joined new recruits like he had somethin 2 prove
Boot camp went smooth...afghanistan got skipped and iraq was his move

^^ feeling those lines nice...

just before safety...another attack!!! moments build, more deadly...dire
they survived that, but 200 ft. from base...romey was killed by friendly fire
to romey adair...remembered as the bravest...a hero to all, so just face it
i tell his untold story below our pics, mounted respectfully in my basement

nice twist int he story and good ending...

strong verse.....


50:
it was this day where heros where made,
wars take lives but their souls did not yet fade.
They marched on for miles and took no fear,
and welcomed their enemies like headlights and a deer.
Bombs rocking in the distance and smokey lungs,
while they made their way with the sound of guns!
they faught for one thing and one cause,
and that was to give freedom and do it without a pause,
as the day grew weery they faught on to the death,
for I know that this field woul yet be their final bed.
for as I watched my comrads fall i knew that this was..
their chance to yet be called hero!

that was preety simple, good flow, no creativeness really just like a opener more then a WHOLE VERSE, u aint get deep into it which made the read preety boring, there wasnt no twist in it no real detail either all around this was preety weak...
but nice try...

This was feedback posted for SUPERVILLAIN
 

his didnt really compare lol but anyways good battle to both i guess lol

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

um easy win basically

SV basically got every aspect

50hater just make longer verses...this was a good opportunity to go 100 lines if you wanted since it was unlimited and you shouldve taken it...you only dropped 12 lines...thats not enough for a topical...i liked what you gave though...if you gave 40 lines with the words you used there with a little more detail and vocabulary you might have one but it was too short so there wasnt enough detail in it...

SV this verse was really really good...i liked it alot
it had emotion and detail the words you used were great and you managed to keep the flow great also...i like the ending it gave it more emotion too...beginning was good because it started like a story and ended like one...instead of jumping right into the battle or into 9/11 you introduced a little of the character which i liked a lot...

good luck to both no hate
return the favor when you get a chance...

peace

LMFAO^...FUNNIEST VOTE I EVER SEEN...yea nice disses and punches in a topical rofl...priceless

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

seen seen...yo I liked ur's better..I liked the imagery in this and the multi's were really good..
I don't think u won with just a longer verse but ur story had more literary devices than 50 haterkiller...

I dont have time for a full review of both ur's but I give this to chryme...word up!! return favour in sig y'all...

This was feedback posted for SUPERVILLAIN
 

Lmfao At 50 Super Got This Easy If 50 Gets Any Votes They D.r Fo Sho Now Sv You Need To Work On Vocab And Cut Down Your Line Length Each Line Is Long As Fuck Like A Damn Sentence Thats Too Much Words It Cant Possible Flow Properly Like That And Dont Jump So Quickly Ez Into The Plot You Gave A Decent Image But Jumped To Quickly Through Time Frames Here And That Was Not Only Annoying But Ruined It Alot .now 50 Had No Imagery Vocab Was Weak Structure Was Good But No Site Was Given Or Emotion And That Hurt Him Sv You Should Have This Ez

thanks fellas.....much love. word.

cali, i'll try to incorporate your advice towards my topicals in future battles. right on homie. one.


s.v.

Voted For: SUPERVILLAIN

SV gets dis easily he put work into his 50 it look like u was just writin shit n puttin dumb stuff together and den it was a topical i figure you would of put more lines but Sv flow was dere and i was into his story den 50 it was deep and convincin