Switching Styles, Crit Plz!
 

- Realness In Me -

Obsessive, Compulsive, hell nah just the strive to,
succeed -
Aiming high not finshing till the end dont care if it,
takes me a lil longer or if i bleed -
Pumping the fusions through my system sweating it,
all out getting my high a natural hit -
Maken sure i give it my best so no critics fuck about,
so no lies are created no unjustifiable doubt -
It gives me power puts me on my pedastol,
i can do wat eva the powers in me loosen my kool,
taken it all out on you -
One bad look provokes me give me two evil eyes,
a punch of death i get in a zone the plesent dies,
and the hates takes a rise -
Theres no time to figure a pattern or have a plan,
before you know it your out and im waving ma hands -
Murderous by nature Masked in my fame ,
represting this crew but dont forget the name -
DiMeOnd
Tripple the mystery with a hint of bitch,
mix it - spike it wid Xtasy you got the gist -
I dont believe in broken hearts a true player ,
wid no manner and bad ghetto grammer -
Im a fighter a lover the perfect equation to the,
realness in me -

tis shows exactly wat u hold tha realness in ur rhymes to bring out even tha full potential of a tru rappist keep it up one

Thanx, Up

your style is real , and your wordplay was hot
keep it up

hmm girl this poem tripped me out..and the thing is...thats why..i can't place a finger on it..much luv..God bless..1..

haha, what?

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respect for the rhyming ability, like i said before, i'ma try to check out all your pieces, style switch? damn then, i wanna keep up on your style(s) then... peace


signed,
~madd

Like i told the other female in here tryin to write lyrics........YOU'RE JUST NOT FIT FOR IT!...

anyways just work on it
this shit was trash to me but just my thoughts....




Peace.....
1...........

Much appreciated, truth always taken in!

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SHYT WAS HOTT. AND U NO I ALWAYS GOT U HOLD U DOWN U ALWAYS GIVIN ME LUV. HIT ME BACC UP ON MY NEW POST IN POETIC.

Damn Mah...That was Ill .....Nice Style Switch.....Holla At My Scriptures....WuN

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Somebody please point out to me wordplay in this piece..

LMAO..

glad to see u laugh at ma ish ,
glad to see the respect i get on dis board . haha

~1~

LONG TIME NO CHAT GIRL!!!!!
 

U KNO I RESPECT YA ALWAYZ GIRL!

I REMEMBER WEN I SWITCHED FROM FREESTYLES TO POETRY......NOW IM BAK AN OPIN TO CAUSE SUM MORE MaYheM!!!!

THIS WAS AGOOD PIECE GIRL KEEP IT UP!

^^^^UPPIN DIS Y`ALL^^^^

Um..I got news for you, Barbie..
Not everyone is gonna suck ya dick cuz you posted a couple pics you thought were cute and try to sound like a lil thug.
SOME people WILL, as proven in this thread by you receiving props for wordplay when there wasnt any in the whole verse..
Truth of the matter is..there was no multi's, no wordplay, no vocab, no similies, no kind of interesting topic..no nothin..just a bunch of cocky bars with end rhyming words, thrown together..

If you want respect you gotta earn it like everyone else.
Postin verses like this is not the way to do it.

dang i want to see dis fight!!!!! YO DIMOND HOLLA BACC
MAN UP NI66A!!!!! LOL ight da piece was still ight. 1luv peace

Aint nobody fightin.

awwwww why not!!!! :( cmon ill buy u dinner!!!!!