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J.R. Freeze vs Waikiki Wipeout
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6 - 18 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 01-28-05 at 09:52 PM Must drop verse in 40 minutes after check in. |
Waikiki Wipeout has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-28-05 09:24 PM.
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J.R. Freeze has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-28-05 09:30 PM.
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Hey... wait a minute... we're you in pink... yeah your a big faggot...
But it doesn't matter Junior... your mother has the Mauii Wowee dick habit... But your mentally retarded... thats why you freeze when you spit... Your not a gangsta see Garden*... that's why theres no g's in your clique... Your fame in high school? We all knew it was you jackin' of in gym class.... In the locker room fool... In the back corner lookin' at men ass... Kid... one more y'all... Junior wacker than how I kill my weeds... I'm kinda like alchohal... stick me in the freeze and I still won't freeze... *New Jersey is the garden state... I call peeps from kansas sunflower so I called him Garden. |
Waikiki, just Go-Chill, you dont wanna Battle~The~Flow's~Ill, Freeze losing? thats hard to picture like Cameras~Wit~No~Film/
murder you then Stabbing~Your~Ghost~Still, no way you're goin to War~For~Rounds/ Slaughter~Clowns, honestly, is it your first spit or is your shit naturally this Watered~Down?/ no ones Appearing~This~Sick, im Tearing~His~Skin, so you better Fear~When~I~Spit/ dont Dare~To~Resist, or answer back, cuz like deaf kids tossing salads i aint 'Hearing~Your~Shit'/ Stray-Rounds make you Lay-Down, holding weight? well my bullets Graze-Pounds/ Get~Away~Clown, JR's punches are sick, He got 'no swings' so lay down!!/ Freez's Cruel~With~The~Blasts, Nigga 'run shit' like races through Sewers~And~Trash/ my Fluent~Attacks will Ruin~This~Fag, you aint a rapper, like 'newborn girls', you wouldnt kno what to 'Do~With~A~Pad!'/ I bring Disaster~G', my Tenacity will Smash~Your~Spleen with Massive~Heat/ im a Cannibal-Bitch, leave you soaked in 'Flammable-Piss' so unless you wanna get burned to the Last~Degree dont count on 'Matchin~me'(match in pee)!/ your Sickness~Has~Left, quit rap, even when Spittin~In~Text i smell Dicks~On~Your~Breath/ i read your verses and like 'white girls at frat parties' im Quick~To~Hit~X!/ (close) your garbage kid, and JR's Hotter~Lyrical, seriously one Shot'll~Tear~Your~Skull/ i kno you Gotta~Fear~The~Flow, ive peeped your work, best verse was called Lyrics Not~Available!!!/ Murda...... stompin on dis bitch Wai~w/CLEETS~under my FEET/ leave his body hiding~cops look in my trunk and dont see him~and thats because he's UNDER MY BEATS!/(game OVeer) |
Voted For: J.R. Freeze
diz was a good battle on both sides no bullshit but it goes: opener: jr freeze multis: jr personals: jr vocab: jr structure: waikiki closer: jr it was not close at all but good i feel dat jr freeze just came harder & flow more lines which got him da win in my opinion Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: J.R. Freeze
Voted for J R Freeze Good battle but Freeze got it due to punches n flow Wipeout ya flow was a lil off plus the punches u threw wernt as hard as I would have liked to see given a a 6/10 for the whole battle Freezes bes Line: murder you then Stabbing~Your~Ghost~Still, no way you're goin to War~For~Rounds/ Slaughter~Clowns, honestly, is it your first spit or is your shit naturally this Watered~Down?/ Wipeouts bes line: Hey... wait a minute... we're you in pink... yeah your a big faggot... But it doesn't matter Junior... your mother has the Mauii Wowee dick habit... thas all i could find in ur verse W that actually went hard at freeze get sum harder shyt n u can kick sum ass good battle to both fo sho Not Hatin, Jus Votin Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: J.R. Freeze
tough one, tough one, j.r. freeeze took it though better punches and should he could keep his rhymes fresh and vocab is good on both parts but set aside that my vote is for j.r. freeze **returning tha favor** Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: J.R. Freeze
cool battle shit was wun sided tho..... opener-jr structure-wipeout punchlines-jr wordplay-jr multis-jr personals-nun finisher-jr enjoyed-jr RETURN IT........... Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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danm son he just got merk hands down but i cant vote same crew....
but da da ada da da danm... he was merk in da 1st dagree |
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Voted For: J.R. Freeze
your Sickness~Has~Left, quit rap, even when Spittin~In~Text i smell Dicks~On~Your~Breath/ i read your verses and like 'white girls at frat parties' im Quick~To~Hit~X!/ vs. nothing This battle was horrible. BUT JR did have one NICE bar that had to get quoted, seriously, that was nice. But on tom the bad things. JR your~structure~and~doing~this is GAY. Shorten your lines and focus on punches rather than flow. WW man you are just new, read more battles and tutorials and you can get better, you obviously are trying to get the basics down, which i like :) v-JR |
Voted For: J.R. Freeze
Aight both y'all structures are really messed up.. JR your lines are too stretched and the squigly lines don't help ya flow or nothing, it would still sound the same if u read it out loud.. and Wakkiki you do NOT need all those "...." you got a lil carried away.. best lines J.R.: Stray-Rounds make you Lay-Down, holding weight? well my bullets Graze-Pounds/ Get~Away~Clown, JR's punches are sick, He got 'no swings' so lay down!!/ Freez's Cruel~With~The~Blasts, Nigga 'run shit' like races through Sewers~And~Trash/ my Fluent~Attacks will Ruin~This~Fag, you aint a rapper, like 'newborn girls', you wouldnt kno what to 'Do~With~A~Pad!'/ ^^tip don't try to force wordplay.......... ^^ best lines Waikiki: But your mentally retarded... thats why you freeze when you spit... Your not a gangsta see Garden*... that's why theres no g's in your clique... Your fame in high school? We all knew it was you jackin' of in gym class.... In the locker room fool... In the back corner lookin' at men ass... ^^tip try not to tell a story while u dissin someone.. just keep dissin them don't say u were at my house doin this, then u went downstairs to do that.. no.. just diss them str8 off.. JR had better punches, metaphors, some stretched wordplay but way more lines to take this win... v/ J.R. Freeze |
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Voted For: Waikiki Wipeout
Waikiki you took this due to the personals. and the better structure and flow. this shit was dope...good punches in my opinion....your structure was aiight. and your flow was koo. vocabulary was good. and you worded the shit correctly.... 7.22/10 J.r the only dope thing you had was punches and multi's but seriously dawg. you need to stop with that stretched shyt naww meanz. but overall this shit was pretty dope. i was feelin it....just fix your structure and flow and you should be good 5/10 vote: wai Can you return the favour and drop an honest vote on this battle http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=175364 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Waikiki Wipeout
lmao... yeah... this was a tite battle but I'm diggin' this new cats' style yo... he has fun when he rhymes... and he shows it when he types which is hard to do trust dat Quote:
Structure - wakiki multis-jr freeze punches-tie personals-waikiki flow-waikiki wordplay-neither Quote:
The fact that your winning J.R. makes me question the integrity of the RV voters. And your not bad at all beleive me I read most of your battles but you let your guard down on this one and you know it. And Waikiki just got the better of you but don't get down you got skills. One tip... personals... research your opponent next time you battle. Waikiki-keep truckin' you got potential and you will be a rv superstar if you start gettin' better. |
Voted For: J.R. Freeze
this battle was one sided the winner is JR Freeze i honestly dont think i have to break it down into lines because it is so obvious. Waikiki- ur verse wasn't bad at all, as a matter of fact the punches were pretty strong, its just J R had stronger ones, and he hand stronger multis, and a stronger opener and finisher. keep battling though Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: J.R. Freeze
J.R Freeze so took this one, i like it Wakiki, your punches and personals were a little lacking/weak, didnt really come as hard as freeze did and that killed you. not a very good opener, too simple and your and one dimensional, closer wasnt bad, coulda been worded differently thou...flow was nice, kept things consistent, originality was in there but couldnt not really that well of structure.....just elevate and you should be fine Freeze, sweet drop man, flow little choppy in areas, but nothing that cant be elevated....good punches that connected, personals were well thoughout, multis, just maybe variatize vocab/ideas, but thats all really i can say, really well done, nice drop, i like, especially the deaf kid line, that was orig and funny overall: Freeze, harder punches/personals, better structure/smoother flow, flat out came harder word |
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^ word, you should rtf in one of my links in my sig....giddy
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